I Didn't Stand a Chance
a children's poem in rhyming couplets135 total reviews
Comment from His Grayness
Dear Brooke: this fanciful and uplifting work is a great blending of outstanding verse and delightful photograph that only leaves the reader with joy! Great work! Vance
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Dear Brooke: this fanciful and uplifting work is a great blending of outstanding verse and delightful photograph that only leaves the reader with joy! Great work! Vance
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Vance, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your encouragement and your generous six stars :-) Brooke
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Dear Brooke: you are a very gifted poet and six stars is NEVER enough for your work. All the best! Vance
Comment from psychostix
Kept me guessing till the very end what on earth you were trying so hard to contain! I love the fact that the rhythm of this poem bounces like laughter. Didn't realize that either until the very last word.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Kept me guessing till the very end what on earth you were trying so hard to contain! I love the fact that the rhythm of this poem bounces like laughter. Didn't realize that either until the very last word.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, psychostix, for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Samuel Dickens
Yes, and now you've got me laughing. My youngest is now twenty-three, but I remember well his little smiling face looking up through the colored balls, much like your photo.
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Yes, and now you've got me laughing. My youngest is now twenty-three, but I remember well his little smiling face looking up through the colored balls, much like your photo.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Samuel, I'm thrilled it made you laugh :-) Thank you. Brooke
Comment from Acquired Taste
...and the laughter of children is one of the perfect things on the planet. And for grams and poppas - it is nirvana - that laugh makes everything sunny. Nice write Brooke. Jean
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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...and the laughter of children is one of the perfect things on the planet. And for grams and poppas - it is nirvana - that laugh makes everything sunny. Nice write Brooke. Jean
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Jean, thank you so much :-) BRooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
What a delightful way to describe how Sawyer couldn't stop his giggling. You always amaze me with your original ways of writing about every day occurrences. This is bouncy and fun!
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke,
What a delightful way to describe how Sawyer couldn't stop his giggling. You always amaze me with your original ways of writing about every day occurrences. This is bouncy and fun!
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Lou :-) Brooke
Comment from Delahay
This is a very cute and amusing poem for children or adults. It leaves us guessing from the start as to what is happening that cannot be stopped. The ending made me smile when I found out what it was.
Mary
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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This is a very cute and amusing poem for children or adults. It leaves us guessing from the start as to what is happening that cannot be stopped. The ending made me smile when I found out what it was.
Mary
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Mary, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
Is there anything more contagious
than a laugh that can't be tamed?
If there is, I promise you
it simply can't be named!
As Sawyer's laugh slowly bubbled to the surface. . .I realized my grin was broadening :-)
What a great way to start my day :-)
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Is there anything more contagious
than a laugh that can't be tamed?
If there is, I promise you
it simply can't be named!
As Sawyer's laugh slowly bubbled to the surface. . .I realized my grin was broadening :-)
What a great way to start my day :-)
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Leineco, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from poetbear
Great photo.
Ready to review again but not write.
This reminds me of my nieces when they were little.
This re ally needs tobe a
Later because of the messages here.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Great photo.
Ready to review again but not write.
This reminds me of my nieces when they were little.
This re ally needs tobe a
Later because of the messages here.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Maddy, thank you so much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Dutchie
Such a pleasure to read this poem. hildren have Always fun in the ball pit. You expressed those emotions so well.
It gave me a good laugh too. Remembered me of my grandchildren when they were little. Great pictures of Sawyer too. Loved it. Fia
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Such a pleasure to read this poem. hildren have Always fun in the ball pit. You expressed those emotions so well.
It gave me a good laugh too. Remembered me of my grandchildren when they were little. Great pictures of Sawyer too. Loved it. Fia
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Fia, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
Laughter is such a fantastic thing, and a child's laugh is magical. Your poem tells a great story of the birth of laughter; together with the picture, it makes me laugh!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Laughter is such a fantastic thing, and a child's laugh is magical. Your poem tells a great story of the birth of laughter; together with the picture, it makes me laugh!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Evi, thank you so much :-) I so appreciate your graciousness and generosity. Brooke
