I Didn't Stand a Chance
a children's poem in rhyming couplets135 total reviews
Comment from Oatmeal
Brooke,
The flow was good. The theme was excellent! Your descriptive words were very good for explaining your ideas and your feelings. They were very understandable and comprehensible.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Brooke,
The flow was good. The theme was excellent! Your descriptive words were very good for explaining your ideas and your feelings. They were very understandable and comprehensible.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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Oatmeal, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'I Didn't Stand a Chance' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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'I Didn't Stand a Chance' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2014
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duchess, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Brooke, as always you're very welcome
:-) the Duchess
Comment from JudyS
Brooke, Super fun read. And great picture of Sawyer. I know what it's like to start to laugh and can't stop. Way fun. I so enjoyed this one, great job, as usual. Judy
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Brooke, Super fun read. And great picture of Sawyer. I know what it's like to start to laugh and can't stop. Way fun. I so enjoyed this one, great job, as usual. Judy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Judy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Brooke. How have you been? We are watching your grandson, Sawyer, grow up before our very eyes. (Through your wonderful poetry, of course.
Excellent job here as usual:
"Once it started down its path,
not one thing could stop my laugh."
Blesssings to all. Bob ps. Are you on facebook?
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Hi, Brooke. How have you been? We are watching your grandson, Sawyer, grow up before our very eyes. (Through your wonderful poetry, of course.
Excellent job here as usual:
"Once it started down its path,
not one thing could stop my laugh."
Blesssings to all. Bob ps. Are you on facebook?
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Bob, for your generous review. Yep, I'm on facebook - I will PM you.
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: oh, so cute! Our little grandchildren and their giggles. They know so little of what fright begats them one day. So, let them laugh away. Nice writing. Linda
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Brooke: oh, so cute! Our little grandchildren and their giggles. They know so little of what fright begats them one day. So, let them laugh away. Nice writing. Linda
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Hey, when you gonna write that poetry book for day kids? Lots of royalties pay for da nuking dinners! Grrreat little poem that made this old duck smile!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Hey, when you gonna write that poetry book for day kids? Lots of royalties pay for da nuking dinners! Grrreat little poem that made this old duck smile!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Kay, for your encouragement and your generosity :-) You've made me smile in spite of myself. Brooke :-)
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I was dubious about the low price of the lift-bed (never look a gift horse in the mouth. The elderly folks thought they should make a buyer happy. It is 5yrs old, works perfectly; brother was using it a little before a nursing home.
Comment from MaggieMcCall
Oh my gosh, the little boy in the pictures is the cutest thing in the world, as is your poem! That's such a perfect description of a little kid's laugh. Makes me really nostalgic! Thank you for sharing this!
Maggie
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Oh my gosh, the little boy in the pictures is the cutest thing in the world, as is your poem! That's such a perfect description of a little kid's laugh. Makes me really nostalgic! Thank you for sharing this!
Maggie
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Maggie - my grandson is quite the cutie pie :-) Brooke
Comment from mikemagine
Very clever, very well set up! Even as adults, isn't quite difficult, at times, to stop laughter?? I laugh a LOT! Even in the service, in formation, it was tough not to laugh:-)
Mike
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Very clever, very well set up! Even as adults, isn't quite difficult, at times, to stop laughter?? I laugh a LOT! Even in the service, in formation, it was tough not to laugh:-)
Mike
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Mike, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Sure thing, Brooke!
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
I thought you did a nice job disguising the point of the poem until the very end. I was reading the second stanza and started over because I thought I had missed something. Lol.
It brought back memories of my brother and I sitting in church with our parents. He would make a funny face and I would feel the laugh beginning to form. The fact that it was not the time for laughter made it that much harder, lol.
Nice job with this well metered write...it was fun, Bill
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Hello Brooke,
I thought you did a nice job disguising the point of the poem until the very end. I was reading the second stanza and started over because I thought I had missed something. Lol.
It brought back memories of my brother and I sitting in church with our parents. He would make a funny face and I would feel the laugh beginning to form. The fact that it was not the time for laughter made it that much harder, lol.
Nice job with this well metered write...it was fun, Bill
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Bill. I'm glad I managed to keep it a mystery and that it brought back good memories for you :-) Brooke
Comment from jshep
Before I could even get to the poem, Brooke, I felt such delight in Sawyer's smiles. Felt like I could hear his laughter.
You honestly had me to the end as I did not guess it was a laugh. Great job.k
Wonderful flow and rhyme and I think this poem would delight any child with its light and carefree voice.
Well done. Hope all is well. Joyce xx
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Before I could even get to the poem, Brooke, I felt such delight in Sawyer's smiles. Felt like I could hear his laughter.
You honestly had me to the end as I did not guess it was a laugh. Great job.k
Wonderful flow and rhyme and I think this poem would delight any child with its light and carefree voice.
Well done. Hope all is well. Joyce xx
Comment Written 09-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Joyce, how good to see you. I'm glad I didn't give it away :-=) Brooke
