I Didn't Stand a Chance
a children's poem in rhyming couplets135 total reviews
Comment from Trybuck
I felt it start way down inside
I tried my best to hide
But no hiding place to be found
Nothing muffled the sound
Of my giggle after giggle
Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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I felt it start way down inside
I tried my best to hide
But no hiding place to be found
Nothing muffled the sound
Of my giggle after giggle
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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thank you for your delightful poetic response to my poem, my talented friend :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
Nothing like a good laugh. It can't be stopped and sometimes it even becomes infectious.
A very creative write on a laugh in quatrains with rhymed couplets
A lovely picture of Sawyer
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Nothing like a good laugh. It can't be stopped and sometimes it even becomes infectious.
A very creative write on a laugh in quatrains with rhymed couplets
A lovely picture of Sawyer
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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emrpoems, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
It's so much fun to watch Alyssa giggle. She's quite an actor.
I loved your poem a child's laughter. Pure as pure can be.
I especially enjoyed the inner rhymes,
"I felt it grow but couldn't stop it,
couldn't bop or drop or pop it"
I like the way you personify the laughter,
"couldn't make it go away
once it had a mind to stay"
I like the near rhyme of "against/fence"
This is a bit of a tongue twister, and the kids would absolutely love it read out loud.
What terrific pictures of Sawyer! Thanks so much for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke
It's so much fun to watch Alyssa giggle. She's quite an actor.
I loved your poem a child's laughter. Pure as pure can be.
I especially enjoyed the inner rhymes,
"I felt it grow but couldn't stop it,
couldn't bop or drop or pop it"
I like the way you personify the laughter,
"couldn't make it go away
once it had a mind to stay"
I like the near rhyme of "against/fence"
This is a bit of a tongue twister, and the kids would absolutely love it read out loud.
What terrific pictures of Sawyer! Thanks so much for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Kimbob - I bet Alyssa's laugh is delightful :-) Brooke
Comment from Spitfire
What a surprise and delightful ending. I've seen this happen and I've been guilty of it too. Love the onomatopoeia in stanza one. And all the methods, the speaker tried to stop it. A fun read.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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What a surprise and delightful ending. I've seen this happen and I've been guilty of it too. Love the onomatopoeia in stanza one. And all the methods, the speaker tried to stop it. A fun read.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Spitfire :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Chasing balloons--now this is my kind of haiku. Delightful from start to finish, and the rollicking rhythm is infectious, captivating. Kenny
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Chasing balloons--now this is my kind of haiku. Delightful from start to finish, and the rollicking rhythm is infectious, captivating. Kenny
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Kenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from PatVallesMangan
This is truly a delightful children's poem. The rhyming couplets make it such a joy and adds to the fun rhythm that is worked out so nicely. Sawyer is adorable as always! :) A lovely package! Blessings Bright! ~ Pat :)
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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This is truly a delightful children's poem. The rhyming couplets make it such a joy and adds to the fun rhythm that is worked out so nicely. Sawyer is adorable as always! :) A lovely package! Blessings Bright! ~ Pat :)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thanks so very much, Pat :-) Brooke
Comment from JM daSilva
I think this kid of yours is lucky. No other kid has had so much poetry written about him. He's lucky. My son, for one, envies him.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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I think this kid of yours is lucky. No other kid has had so much poetry written about him. He's lucky. My son, for one, envies him.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, JM :-) When my kids were little, I had no time to write poetry, but being a grandma is different :-) Brooke
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Yeah, I understand. You must be the greatest grandma.
Comment from 9999pool
Genuine laughter comes from within the heart.
It can be considered an outburst to show a better side of us.
There are times when we just want to smile and laugh even over nothing but just plain silliness over a situation we are in or what we hear or see.
Life is a window that has blinds. We can choose to see and hear what we want - just to have a laugh or to break into a smile.
Great write and well expressed.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Genuine laughter comes from within the heart.
It can be considered an outburst to show a better side of us.
There are times when we just want to smile and laugh even over nothing but just plain silliness over a situation we are in or what we hear or see.
Life is a window that has blinds. We can choose to see and hear what we want - just to have a laugh or to break into a smile.
Great write and well expressed.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Ritchie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Hi Brooke,
My pleasure as always to read your works. Smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your cadence and echoing sounds. Thanks for including the captivating photograph and noting where it took place in your notes--the description made me very curious! ;) Hugs and happy weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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I enjoyed your cadence and echoing sounds. Thanks for including the captivating photograph and noting where it took place in your notes--the description made me very curious! ;) Hugs and happy weekend- Joan
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
Laughter is a healing energy. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Sawyer definitely looks happy.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Laughter is a healing energy. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Sawyer definitely looks happy.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
