I'm But a Tiny Drop of Rain
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6121 total reviews
Comment from DR DIP
nice
You may be but one tiny drop
and I, the mighty sea,
but if it weren't for you, my friend,
then I would never be."
love this verse
nothing else to say, through fear of being abrasive lol
dip
ps I added a comma hope that's not too obtuse (Andy dufrane the fanstory redemption)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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nice
You may be but one tiny drop
and I, the mighty sea,
but if it weren't for you, my friend,
then I would never be."
love this verse
nothing else to say, through fear of being abrasive lol
dip
ps I added a comma hope that's not too obtuse (Andy dufrane the fanstory redemption)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Dip - glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from ChelseaAnel
Captivating. A breath taking view on the bigger picture. Even as a tiny drop, each has a place and contributes to complete life's puzzle -making sense of it all.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Captivating. A breath taking view on the bigger picture. Even as a tiny drop, each has a place and contributes to complete life's puzzle -making sense of it all.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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ChelseaAnel, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
This is another of your simple, philosophical gems spoken so simply in natural imagery, that a reader can easily forget the wisdom within. You name the part, you name the whole, and in three short verses remind us that something a enormous as the ocean is made up of its many tiny parts. One is nothing without the other. Seems to be a metaphor for life as a whole.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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This is another of your simple, philosophical gems spoken so simply in natural imagery, that a reader can easily forget the wisdom within. You name the part, you name the whole, and in three short verses remind us that something a enormous as the ocean is made up of its many tiny parts. One is nothing without the other. Seems to be a metaphor for life as a whole.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Mark :-) Brooke
Comment from Irish Rain
So true, we never know whose inner thirsts we'll quench, whose parched mental landscapes we'll bring new life to...with just our tiny drop.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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So true, we never know whose inner thirsts we'll quench, whose parched mental landscapes we'll bring new life to...with just our tiny drop.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Irish Rain, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Michaelk
Wonderful poem. What a fantastic message to take nothing for granted. Your rhythm is great, very smooth and flowing. Your rhymes are great as well. I love the sea and the rain talking back and forth to each other. What was really interesting was the mutual respect that you brought out through your writing.
Simply excellent.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Wonderful poem. What a fantastic message to take nothing for granted. Your rhythm is great, very smooth and flowing. Your rhymes are great as well. I love the sea and the rain talking back and forth to each other. What was really interesting was the mutual respect that you brought out through your writing.
Simply excellent.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Michael, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Warren Rodgers
I knew it LOL, the sea!
No seriously I love this poem, love the dialogue between the drop of rain and the sea! Very creative, in your legendary rhyme and meter and a wonderful message that relates to many situations.
The last verse is fantastic!
easily worth a six, my friend.
All the best,
Rodger
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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I knew it LOL, the sea!
No seriously I love this poem, love the dialogue between the drop of rain and the sea! Very creative, in your legendary rhyme and meter and a wonderful message that relates to many situations.
The last verse is fantastic!
easily worth a six, my friend.
All the best,
Rodger
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Rodger, thank you so much, my friend, and congrats on sharing the anapestic win with me :-) You make good company. Brooke
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My pleasure and congrats to you too! Montco rules! LOLOL
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Montgomery County, PA - home of the anapestic poet king and queen LOL
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LOLOL I'm just waiting for that call to be co-grand marshalls in the holiday parade thru the K of P mall :)
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would I get to sit on Santa's lap? :-)
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Of course! The queen gets to do whatever she wants! :)
Comment from Joe_P
A lovely poem that describes a truth unseen, an vast ocean comprised of insignificant drops of water. Together, they form the most significant feature on Earth.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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A lovely poem that describes a truth unseen, an vast ocean comprised of insignificant drops of water. Together, they form the most significant feature on Earth.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Joe, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Brooke,
I like how you start out with the raindrop pov, and then end with the sea and its pov. Coming full circle is a good thing.
Enjoyed it. Great photo as well.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Hi, Brooke,
I like how you start out with the raindrop pov, and then end with the sea and its pov. Coming full circle is a good thing.
Enjoyed it. Great photo as well.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Jax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
You scratch my back and I'll scratch yours???
Pretty little piece that raises some thought-provoking questions about our place in the world and the importance of the individual.
Steve
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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You scratch my back and I'll scratch yours???
Pretty little piece that raises some thought-provoking questions about our place in the world and the importance of the individual.
Steve
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Steve :-) Brooke
Comment from bob cullen
What a charming piece of logic.
Your words always blend together like dancers in a waltz. Their flow is almost magical as they present pictures in the mind.
Brooke, you have a rare talent.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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What a charming piece of logic.
Your words always blend together like dancers in a waltz. Their flow is almost magical as they present pictures in the mind.
Brooke, you have a rare talent.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Bob :-) Brooke
