Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "CHAPTER OCHO; PART CUATRO"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Good cliff hanger conclusion, Barbara - exactly - WHAT were they up to? As usual, your pacing is excellent and the plot just gets better and better.
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Good cliff hanger conclusion, Barbara - exactly - WHAT were they up to? As usual, your pacing is excellent and the plot just gets better and better.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
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Comment from Adri7enne
I like your characters - the dogs, too. LOL! I don't know if you have a set plot in mind or if you're following your characters around, watching what happens. Novels take off on their own sometimes. I enjoyed the glimpse into their lives.
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I like your characters - the dogs, too. LOL! I don't know if you have a set plot in mind or if you're following your characters around, watching what happens. Novels take off on their own sometimes. I enjoyed the glimpse into their lives.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
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Comment from TKField
Well, this installment of the saga keeps everything firmly on simmer, but I'm sure it will be brought to a boil at some point. Obviously, trouble's a brewin at the Rockin-A. Interesting stuff about the Apache mythology. When did Jim get shot in the shoulder? Did I miss some guy-play somewhere?
I can tell the dogs are starting to play a more prominent role in this story, since we are constantly reminded where they are and what they are doing, even if they are just following the people around. Certainly it won't be long before they are running to get help for Soni trapped in a collapsed mine shaft or ripping the throats out of the bad guys.
This was fine, but I would still like to see you pick up the pace a bit. And how about giving the main characters some more depth and complexity? As it stands Soni is too good to be true. How about a deep dark secret or a childhood trauma or a character flaw of some kind? She could get addicted to peyote, or be terrified of snakes or epileptic. Something she has to overcome within herself. It's your book, but I vote for a little more edge here.
PS: Being a fifth generation Texan, I can say that we do have nice sunsets, but New Mexico's are better. What Texas does well is Chicken fried steak, chili, grits, barbecued brisket, Tex-Mex, football, Bluebonnets, beautiful women, sucking dead dinosaurs from the depths of the earth, cattle, wild hogs, floating down the Brazos in an inner-tube, bass fishing, guns, primitive Baptists, highways, the death penalty and hunting almost anything with fur or feathers.
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Well, this installment of the saga keeps everything firmly on simmer, but I'm sure it will be brought to a boil at some point. Obviously, trouble's a brewin at the Rockin-A. Interesting stuff about the Apache mythology. When did Jim get shot in the shoulder? Did I miss some guy-play somewhere?
I can tell the dogs are starting to play a more prominent role in this story, since we are constantly reminded where they are and what they are doing, even if they are just following the people around. Certainly it won't be long before they are running to get help for Soni trapped in a collapsed mine shaft or ripping the throats out of the bad guys.
This was fine, but I would still like to see you pick up the pace a bit. And how about giving the main characters some more depth and complexity? As it stands Soni is too good to be true. How about a deep dark secret or a childhood trauma or a character flaw of some kind? She could get addicted to peyote, or be terrified of snakes or epileptic. Something she has to overcome within herself. It's your book, but I vote for a little more edge here.
PS: Being a fifth generation Texan, I can say that we do have nice sunsets, but New Mexico's are better. What Texas does well is Chicken fried steak, chili, grits, barbecued brisket, Tex-Mex, football, Bluebonnets, beautiful women, sucking dead dinosaurs from the depths of the earth, cattle, wild hogs, floating down the Brazos in an inner-tube, bass fishing, guns, primitive Baptists, highways, the death penalty and hunting almost anything with fur or feathers.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
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Comment from angelface2
Another good chapter, Barbara. The picture is gorgeous. I love sunsets like that, though I don't live in Texas, we do have some good ones. Miss Sally
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Another good chapter, Barbara. The picture is gorgeous. I love sunsets like that, though I don't live in Texas, we do have some good ones. Miss Sally
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
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Comment from Hareem.S
I really like how the story is progressing. I have missed on a great many chapters, and hopefully I will try to read them too. This chapter kept me hooked till the end
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I really like how the story is progressing. I have missed on a great many chapters, and hopefully I will try to read them too. This chapter kept me hooked till the end
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
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Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara. I really enjoyed this chapter. It deepens the characters and ends with an interesting twist. Well done, as always!
:) Bev
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Hi, Barbara. I really enjoyed this chapter. It deepens the characters and ends with an interesting twist. Well done, as always!
:) Bev
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
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You're very welcome! xx Bev
Comment from lindalcreel
This was another great chapter. I'm guessing we will soon figure out who is behind this mischief and my money is on Miguel. He is trying to frighten Soni into giving up her land so he will have a direct route with his drugs. He underestimates her for sure.
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This was another great chapter. I'm guessing we will soon figure out who is behind this mischief and my money is on Miguel. He is trying to frighten Soni into giving up her land so he will have a direct route with his drugs. He underestimates her for sure.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
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A pleasure again.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
It is obvious that the four men Soni and Jim met on the way to the dance, are not alone. I still think it likely the trailer is going yo be used in an attempt to steal Midnight.
I wonder if the flashes of light were signals, perhaps alerting others that the ranch hands were still at the dance.
Great dialog, but Soni still is hiding the ominous warning letter from Jim. Does she not trust him?
I only found one small error: They walked until [the ==>they] {A typo?} came to the area where the trailer had set.
I am ready for more action. As usual,I offer you my love and Irish Hugs for encouragement.
Roger
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Hi Barbara:)
It is obvious that the four men Soni and Jim met on the way to the dance, are not alone. I still think it likely the trailer is going yo be used in an attempt to steal Midnight.
I wonder if the flashes of light were signals, perhaps alerting others that the ranch hands were still at the dance.
Great dialog, but Soni still is hiding the ominous warning letter from Jim. Does she not trust him?
I only found one small error: They walked until [the ==>they] {A typo?} came to the area where the trailer had set.
I am ready for more action. As usual,I offer you my love and Irish Hugs for encouragement.
Roger
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. Will fix.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, just what you lead us all to believe from the very beginning, there was more going on with those guys and the trailer. Now, I can't wait to find out what. Great job. :-)
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Well, just what you lead us all to believe from the very beginning, there was more going on with those guys and the trailer. Now, I can't wait to find out what. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
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Comment from Gargantuan2
Once again, a very good post. I only found one typo:
walked until the came to
walked until they came to
I await the next entry :)
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2014
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Once again, a very good post. I only found one typo:
walked until the came to
walked until they came to
I await the next entry :)
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
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