I Issued an Invitation
poem in mixed meter and abcb rhyme122 total reviews
Comment from Benny Beeharry
A lovely chat with the sun and its schedules. Actually it happens as you write ...exactly. This is what I am happy about.
Thank you.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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A lovely chat with the sun and its schedules. Actually it happens as you write ...exactly. This is what I am happy about.
Thank you.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Benny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hi...oh a sund dance poem. Oh how I long that she would grace me with at least 4 hours a day. Just in the afternoon, that I may sleep in the warmth and then let the winter come...
padumachitta
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Hi...oh a sund dance poem. Oh how I long that she would grace me with at least 4 hours a day. Just in the afternoon, that I may sleep in the warmth and then let the winter come...
padumachitta
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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padumachitta, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Lighthouse Keeper
Great accompaniment for your lunar verse. (I seem to be reading these in reverse). Great characterization of the Sun. She is elegant and grand with a royal aura befitting her magnificence. These lines,
"the hour has come when day is done,
and I, the Sun, must set."
bounce along particularly well.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Great accompaniment for your lunar verse. (I seem to be reading these in reverse). Great characterization of the Sun. She is elegant and grand with a royal aura befitting her magnificence. These lines,
"the hour has come when day is done,
and I, the Sun, must set."
bounce along particularly well.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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lighthouse keeper, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Cajungirl
I am glad the sun hasn't been to friendly in Louisiana lately. We've been enjoying the cool temperatures. LOL
I enjoyed the poem very much.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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I am glad the sun hasn't been to friendly in Louisiana lately. We've been enjoying the cool temperatures. LOL
I enjoyed the poem very much.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Cajungirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from madhatter1977
Great poem again, Brooke! I like the mixed meter as it allows you more freedom of expression and it's an excellent piece of personification and very clever. Best wishes, Pete :)
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Great poem again, Brooke! I like the mixed meter as it allows you more freedom of expression and it's an excellent piece of personification and very clever. Best wishes, Pete :)
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Pete :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
Ah, if only it were that easy to get silly old Sol to put in an appearance!
Lovely alliteration in finest frocks and gracious guest garbed in garments...
Steve
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Ah, if only it were that easy to get silly old Sol to put in an appearance!
Lovely alliteration in finest frocks and gracious guest garbed in garments...
Steve
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Steve. Ah, so many things are easier to accomplish in Poetry Land :-) Brooke
Comment from Diny
So I have to say I really like the way this one flowed so well I hate it when so often I read sing songy couplets this was a refreshingly different style- and excellent as always- hugs-and Write On!-Di
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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So I have to say I really like the way this one flowed so well I hate it when so often I read sing songy couplets this was a refreshingly different style- and excellent as always- hugs-and Write On!-Di
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Di, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
Well, I guess it is only fair to do the sun, and the moon. This is great too, and it had more of a conversational tone. If one could speak to a star it may sound just like this. Well done again.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Well, I guess it is only fair to do the sun, and the moon. This is great too, and it had more of a conversational tone. If one could speak to a star it may sound just like this. Well done again.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from tbacha58
I'll try to come tomorrow,
for now that we are friends,
I know the way to find you
when e'er the Nighttime ends."
Your poem was sharing with me the same friendship with the sun. Your imaginations always runs through the beyond, and that is why your poems are special, even if our baby Sawyer is not visiting .
Beautiful Brooke. Bless you Terry xoox
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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I'll try to come tomorrow,
for now that we are friends,
I know the way to find you
when e'er the Nighttime ends."
Your poem was sharing with me the same friendship with the sun. Your imaginations always runs through the beyond, and that is why your poems are special, even if our baby Sawyer is not visiting .
Beautiful Brooke. Bless you Terry xoox
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Terry, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. I like this poem with its vivid imagery and it creates a beautiful picture in my mind's eye.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. I like this poem with its vivid imagery and it creates a beautiful picture in my mind's eye.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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thank you, Tomes, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
