I Issued an Invitation
poem in mixed meter and abcb rhyme122 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
It is hard for me to accept the concept of a feminine Sun and a masculine moon. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
It is hard for me to accept the concept of a feminine Sun and a masculine moon. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
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Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Charlie :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your presentation is amazing. I love the picture. The font color is the sun shining. The rhyme keeps the flow moving forward. I like the personification of the sun. Well done. One question: Should the word "extend" be "extended" as in " if she's extended her stay" ? Thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed your poem.
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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
Your presentation is amazing. I love the picture. The font color is the sun shining. The rhyme keeps the flow moving forward. I like the personification of the sun. Well done. One question: Should the word "extend" be "extended" as in " if she's extended her stay" ? Thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed your poem.
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Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much - I had a typo when I wrote she's extend, which was meant to read she'd extend - I appreciate your bringing this to my attention :-) Brooke
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As you can see, that typo was minor in my eyes. Your poem was very good. I have many typos courtesy of cats walking on the keyboard.