Truthful Jones, Babysitter: Part Two
Short story in two parts.17 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
Okay, Mr. Vonnegut, you have lost your mind. Don King, Tyson, Godzilla- how are you going to top this with a moon shot. Neil Armstrong, the monolith, Alice Kramden after Ralph bam zooms her straight to the moon? Hilarious and surreal- a potent combination.
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Okay, Mr. Vonnegut, you have lost your mind. Don King, Tyson, Godzilla- how are you going to top this with a moon shot. Neil Armstrong, the monolith, Alice Kramden after Ralph bam zooms her straight to the moon? Hilarious and surreal- a potent combination.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
Comment from robina1978
Nice story that I did not expect with tiny pictures all the way through. I have to try and find the other one now. Nice to see a different genre from you.
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Nice story that I did not expect with tiny pictures all the way through. I have to try and find the other one now. Nice to see a different genre from you.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
these words stuck with me as i read your most enjoyabe pen Now, there's no use a puttin' the horse in front a the apple pie always the very beautifully crafted piece dear pal
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these words stuck with me as i read your most enjoyabe pen Now, there's no use a puttin' the horse in front a the apple pie always the very beautifully crafted piece dear pal
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
Comment from emrpoems
love this line--
"Now, there's no use a puttin' the horse in front a the apple pie."
you do have an imaginative mind to be able to write not one chapter but many at the same time and keep the reader's attention.
Good use of language
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love this line--
"Now, there's no use a puttin' the horse in front a the apple pie."
you do have an imaginative mind to be able to write not one chapter but many at the same time and keep the reader's attention.
Good use of language
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
Comment from CR Delport
What you been smoking when you thought all this up? It doesn't matter, I love it! :) This is really an interesting read with a big dollop of your great humour. Great stuff.
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What you been smoking when you thought all this up? It doesn't matter, I love it! :) This is really an interesting read with a big dollop of your great humour. Great stuff.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love Truthful Jones. He had those wrestlers going. I am kind of glad Big Foot's bear family came back. I am sure they could use him in their advertisements. I am anxious to hear about the real first man on the moon. Great work.
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I love Truthful Jones. He had those wrestlers going. I am kind of glad Big Foot's bear family came back. I am sure they could use him in their advertisements. I am anxious to hear about the real first man on the moon. Great work.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from drivenbackward
Ha! Nice. I had a lot more fun reading this chapter.
the most honest man in the world. -- LOL
Khrushchev raised his hand like he was in school. -- Check paragraph spacing here.
mom and dad to get home from their -- Mom and Dad
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Ha! Nice. I had a lot more fun reading this chapter.
the most honest man in the world. -- LOL
Khrushchev raised his hand like he was in school. -- Check paragraph spacing here.
mom and dad to get home from their -- Mom and Dad
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Baron Munchausen has nothing on Truthful Jones in the exaggeratin' department!
Your tale gets taller and taller as it goes on. Still no sixes for this bravura performance I'm afraid, but accept a virtual one.
Lots of fun and nobody gets hurt except for Mike Tyson's pride.
Steve
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Baron Munchausen has nothing on Truthful Jones in the exaggeratin' department!
Your tale gets taller and taller as it goes on. Still no sixes for this bravura performance I'm afraid, but accept a virtual one.
Lots of fun and nobody gets hurt except for Mike Tyson's pride.
Steve
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from Sankey
Looks like we ar back to Mikey and his queer curiouser and curiouser stories. WIll see where this all goes. No spags in this one mate.
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Looks like we ar back to Mikey and his queer curiouser and curiouser stories. WIll see where this all goes. No spags in this one mate.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from Sasha
Did you mother drop you on your head when you were a little one? There has to be a reason why you see the world upside down and inside out. But, I am so glad you do. I enjoyed this thoroughly and laughed at the dialogue from beginning to end. Do hope to see Truthful Jones again in the near future.
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Did you mother drop you on your head when you were a little one? There has to be a reason why you see the world upside down and inside out. But, I am so glad you do. I enjoyed this thoroughly and laughed at the dialogue from beginning to end. Do hope to see Truthful Jones again in the near future.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
