Snowfall
Sedoka15 total reviews
Comment from NurseBarb
Great job with this contest entry Mikey. You followed the prompt exactly as asked- different perspectives in two different stanzas. A clear winner and glad you won.
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Great job with this contest entry Mikey. You followed the prompt exactly as asked- different perspectives in two different stanzas. A clear winner and glad you won.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
Comment from mfowler
Clever idea, Michael. Great juxtaposition of the natural and the human perspective.
Love the angel imagery, but the 'holiday coffin nails' is really special and very poignant in the context of homeless in the snow
Nice set up with the alternative photos
I meant to get this written earlier as I recognised your unique touch; never too late
I did vote for you because yours was best. Congratulations
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Clever idea, Michael. Great juxtaposition of the natural and the human perspective.
Love the angel imagery, but the 'holiday coffin nails' is really special and very poignant in the context of homeless in the snow
Nice set up with the alternative photos
I meant to get this written earlier as I recognised your unique touch; never too late
I did vote for you because yours was best. Congratulations
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Nothing close to this in depth of meaning. A clear contrast which is looked for in this form. Wonderful presentation to boot. This should win.
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Nothing close to this in depth of meaning. A clear contrast which is looked for in this form. Wonderful presentation to boot. This should win.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
Comment from victor 66
A very powerful message expressed in a very few words. The irony of the two worlds seemingly oblivious to each other, gives one concern. What else don't we see? Good luck.
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A very powerful message expressed in a very few words. The irony of the two worlds seemingly oblivious to each other, gives one concern. What else don't we see? Good luck.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Perfect timing... a cold front is moving this way as I write. A winter blast will cripple the north. He's smiling because he is on the inside nice and cuddly. grinning like a fat possum eating fecal matter. Nice poem. Count your doubloon. A see FIVE snowflakes crystalize and one Frosty The Snowman. Tapped out. do loco
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Perfect timing... a cold front is moving this way as I write. A winter blast will cripple the north. He's smiling because he is on the inside nice and cuddly. grinning like a fat possum eating fecal matter. Nice poem. Count your doubloon. A see FIVE snowflakes crystalize and one Frosty The Snowman. Tapped out. do loco
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Eric1
This is a wonderfully written entry for this particular competition my friend, showing the two different aspects of a fall of snow, good luck in the contest.
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This is a wonderfully written entry for this particular competition my friend, showing the two different aspects of a fall of snow, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Acquired Taste
Excellent sedoka - so very relevant at this season coming into winter - your choice of artwork fully underlines your words - happiness to complete sadness in so few words. Well penned. AT=/
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Excellent sedoka - so very relevant at this season coming into winter - your choice of artwork fully underlines your words - happiness to complete sadness in so few words. Well penned. AT=/
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from adewpearl
You do what I look for in this form - you portray the winter snow scene as beautiful and delightful from the point of view of someone who can enjoy the scene from inside her home/windows, and then describe it from the far less "pretty" perspective of someone forced to bed down in the snow - I wish more people would do this, for it is the essence of the form, not the syllable count
Brooke
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You do what I look for in this form - you portray the winter snow scene as beautiful and delightful from the point of view of someone who can enjoy the scene from inside her home/windows, and then describe it from the far less "pretty" perspective of someone forced to bed down in the snow - I wish more people would do this, for it is the essence of the form, not the syllable count
Brooke
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from bard owl
A stark evaluation between those who are blessed with a warm home and those who must suffer through the winter in homelessness. Best of luck in the contest with this thoughtful piece.
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A stark evaluation between those who are blessed with a warm home and those who must suffer through the winter in homelessness. Best of luck in the contest with this thoughtful piece.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, the snowfall that means two different people at different stations in their life. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, the snowfall that means two different people at different stations in their life. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
