Excuse me mister monster.
A child scared of the closet monster.97 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That brought back a nasty memory for me. I was sure there was a monster in my cupboard above my wardrobe, he always hid when my Mum and Dad showed me it was an empty cupboard! LOL, aren't we funny! Loved this poem and I quite understand how you won the contest, sorry I missed it, but so pleased I have read it now. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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That brought back a nasty memory for me. I was sure there was a monster in my cupboard above my wardrobe, he always hid when my Mum and Dad showed me it was an empty cupboard! LOL, aren't we funny! Loved this poem and I quite understand how you won the contest, sorry I missed it, but so pleased I have read it now. xsx sandra
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you Sandra and we are funny! I had the monster under the bed. God bless!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Neonewman
I can see why you were awarded first prize
A very good poem especial the part of how the child had trust in Jesus to protect him
Very touching.
Gert
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Hello Neonewman
I can see why you were awarded first prize
A very good poem especial the part of how the child had trust in Jesus to protect him
Very touching.
Gert
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you Gert for this inspiring review. God bless!
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from MizKat
Hi Neonewman,
Your poem is well written and interesting. I'm glad your co-worker took a copy of it to read to her son who feared a closet monster and that his fear was relieved. As a small child I was afraid to go to sleep as I always had terrible nightmares. Thanks to God, He rid me from them. Still, at my old age, I don't sleep more than 3-5 hours a night.
Kat
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Hi Neonewman,
Your poem is well written and interesting. I'm glad your co-worker took a copy of it to read to her son who feared a closet monster and that his fear was relieved. As a small child I was afraid to go to sleep as I always had terrible nightmares. Thanks to God, He rid me from them. Still, at my old age, I don't sleep more than 3-5 hours a night.
Kat
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Very inspiring review you have delivered Kat, I am most appreciative of this excellent review. We all had our monsters growing up the ones with live with as adults. God bless!
Comment from Jackarrie
Congratulations on a deserved win, the poem is just wonderful to read. Just the way a child would speak.
Well written
Well don
Mary
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Congratulations on a deserved win, the poem is just wonderful to read. Just the way a child would speak.
Well written
Well don
Mary
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you Mary for this awesome review. God bless!
Comment from Capricorn30
It's good that your poetry was able to help a child relieve his fears;
Many children experience fear of monsters, not only in the closet--but beneath the bed--I always had that fear;
Well-penned comments from child to monster.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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It's good that your poetry was able to help a child relieve his fears;
Many children experience fear of monsters, not only in the closet--but beneath the bed--I always had that fear;
Well-penned comments from child to monster.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you Capricorn for this inspiring review, my greatest ambition in life is to help others, the feeling is extraordinary. Thank you again God bless!
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You're welcome:)
My pleasure.
Comment from Marisa3
I love this sweet poem, it reveals the innocence of a trusting child. He is definitely putting his faith in a higher power.
The rhythm of the poem was perfect, and I might add, so was the illustration.
Marisa
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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I love this sweet poem, it reveals the innocence of a trusting child. He is definitely putting his faith in a higher power.
The rhythm of the poem was perfect, and I might add, so was the illustration.
Marisa
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you Marisa for the awesome and inspiring review. God bless!
Comment from scd41
A very intersing poem written for childen but readers of all ages would enjoy reading it. The background behind penning this poem and the wonderful effect it had on the child for whom it was written make the whole efforts rewarding. You have also been rewarded by FS. Congrats!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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A very intersing poem written for childen but readers of all ages would enjoy reading it. The background behind penning this poem and the wonderful effect it had on the child for whom it was written make the whole efforts rewarding. You have also been rewarded by FS. Congrats!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you scd41 for this inspiring review. My biggest rewards come from helping others when I can. God bless!
Comment from Domino 2
With respect, I think this structured/rhymed poem would benefit enormously from regular meter to smooth out the lines, making them less 'jumpy' to read.
However, it's an excellent story in a poem, where the monster is humanised to make it less scary and able to be fought off easily. Suits the theme of chilling out the child, very well.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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With respect, I think this structured/rhymed poem would benefit enormously from regular meter to smooth out the lines, making them less 'jumpy' to read.
However, it's an excellent story in a poem, where the monster is humanised to make it less scary and able to be fought off easily. Suits the theme of chilling out the child, very well.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you Ray for this most inspiring review. I have been writing a novel and joined this site to help in honing my craft. Everyone who has read bits and pieces of my novel have simply wanted more, they say I have a way with telling a story.
Me being my own worst critique joined this site where no one knows me personally. I am not a poet, but have found this are to be stimulating and now have grown to love its relativity.
Reviewer like yourself aide most in my growth, I will have to learn about this meter thing LOL! I am not educated in these areas. Thank you again Ray for your support in my growth.
God bless!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Excuse me mister monster' is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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'Excuse me mister monster' is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you duchessofdrumborg for this most inspiring review. God bless!
You're very welcome Neonewman.
God bless you too, the Duchess
Comment from James Dooney
I must say that I do quite like this one indeed. It talks about that innocent little fear we all had as children. Great job describing here !
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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I must say that I do quite like this one indeed. It talks about that innocent little fear we all had as children. Great job describing here !
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you James Dooney for the awesome review, I remember my younger days all to well LOL! God bless!
