Excuse me mister monster.
A child scared of the closet monster.97 total reviews
Comment from Louise Michelle
I think this is a good children's poem because it inspires the kiddies to fight their fears while encouraging faith in God. A nice change of pace for Halloween. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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I think this is a good children's poem because it inspires the kiddies to fight their fears while encouraging faith in God. A nice change of pace for Halloween. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you Lou as always you give the most inspiring reviews. God bless!
Comment from Delahay
This is an interesting perspective on the monster in the closet. I like the idea that this child knows the monster is going to be in big trouble now.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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This is an interesting perspective on the monster in the closet. I like the idea that this child knows the monster is going to be in big trouble now.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you WardHays for another awesome review. God bless!
Comment from gazzagodbod
loved this its funny how all children have a monster i remember mine in my wardrobe it used to growl turned out to be my grandad in the next room snoring lol good luck my friend xxgazzaxx
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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loved this its funny how all children have a monster i remember mine in my wardrobe it used to growl turned out to be my grandad in the next room snoring lol good luck my friend xxgazzaxx
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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LOL! My father is a huge snorer and I'm sure the neighbors can hear him. God bless!
Comment from ChowChow
Hi, This is a very good thing to write about. Monsters in the closet. I'm a 73 year old grandma, and have heard them all. No doubt I had them too, and was told the same thing. Covering up my head to escape them. I liked the way you put the whole poem together as an enjoyable poem to read. Thank you for sharing. Visit chowchow.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Hi, This is a very good thing to write about. Monsters in the closet. I'm a 73 year old grandma, and have heard them all. No doubt I had them too, and was told the same thing. Covering up my head to escape them. I liked the way you put the whole poem together as an enjoyable poem to read. Thank you for sharing. Visit chowchow.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you ChowChow for this most inspiring review. God bless!
Comment from Nosha17
There are far too many scary things in the media, etc. for kids to be afraid of, especially when night time is difficult for a four year old child. This had a nice balance about it, everything in moderation is the key. I am glad the child has been cured of this fear by your poem which was well written and an enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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There are far too many scary things in the media, etc. for kids to be afraid of, especially when night time is difficult for a four year old child. This had a nice balance about it, everything in moderation is the key. I am glad the child has been cured of this fear by your poem which was well written and an enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you Faye for another awesome review and I the fact that this helped this baby is the best feeling ever. God bless!
Comment from rjpurdy
Bravo! What an incredible poem of support. I lovce the rhythm and cadence, it reads like a melody, and it has great progression. That darned old monster will never show his face again. Thank you so much. rj
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Bravo! What an incredible poem of support. I lovce the rhythm and cadence, it reads like a melody, and it has great progression. That darned old monster will never show his face again. Thank you so much. rj
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you rjpurdy for yet another inspiring review. I do love reading your feedback. God bless!
Comment from MaggieMcCall
Ah! I love it! And such a perfect read for Halloween! This is really really sweet, and it really reminded me of my childhood. The language that you used is so spot on for a four year old. Thank you so much for sharing this!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Ah! I love it! And such a perfect read for Halloween! This is really really sweet, and it really reminded me of my childhood. The language that you used is so spot on for a four year old. Thank you so much for sharing this!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you MaggieMcCall for this inspiring review. God bless!
Comment from PatVallesMangan
This was well done! The author totally took on the persona of a child facing his fears. As a retired teacher, I would surely read this to my class. All of the contest rules were nicely met. The picture is just perfect. I see no reason for any changes. God bless!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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This was well done! The author totally took on the persona of a child facing his fears. As a retired teacher, I would surely read this to my class. All of the contest rules were nicely met. The picture is just perfect. I see no reason for any changes. God bless!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you Pat for this encouraging and inspirational review. I love the fact that you were a teacher, I have the utmost respect for those who help others succeed in life. God bless!
Comment from sibhus
Ha, ha, what a fun little poem. You really have captured the voice and the thoughts of a four-year old with these well rhymed words. Poor little guy, I can see this really happening. Good poem and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Ha, ha, what a fun little poem. You really have captured the voice and the thoughts of a four-year old with these well rhymed words. Poor little guy, I can see this really happening. Good poem and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you Sibhus for another awesome review. God bless!
Comment from bigmox
This has the makings of a publishable poem, but the third stanza isn't as good as the rest of the poem. You could just leave it out. If not, you need to rework it so it doesn't sound contrived. The last line is okay, but the first three aren't. They need to convey a sense of Jesus' sympathy and compassion for a frightened child. A little more thought and you'll have a great poem.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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This has the makings of a publishable poem, but the third stanza isn't as good as the rest of the poem. You could just leave it out. If not, you need to rework it so it doesn't sound contrived. The last line is okay, but the first three aren't. They need to convey a sense of Jesus' sympathy and compassion for a frightened child. A little more thought and you'll have a great poem.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you bigmox for this inspiring and very helpful review. I would love one day to become a published writer and this site is certainly nudging me in the right direction. I am relatively new at poetry and find myself deeply involved. God bless!
