Sand Creek - Lest we forget
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Comment from jim lawler
Thanks for sharing your little tale, it evokes a sordid picture of the early days of colonization of America. Even though it is a lop-sided story you did a nice job with the side you wrote about. We must try to remember there were atrocities on both sides. I didn't see any tyoos and it needs no revision. Good job! Good luck with it! Jim
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Thanks for sharing your little tale, it evokes a sordid picture of the early days of colonization of America. Even though it is a lop-sided story you did a nice job with the side you wrote about. We must try to remember there were atrocities on both sides. I didn't see any tyoos and it needs no revision. Good job! Good luck with it! Jim
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nosha17
Slaughter for the sake of it is not permissible in any civilised society, no matter when or where it was. Maybe an apology will be issued, hope it suffices. Good use of rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. I spotted 2 errors-hope you don't mind-above the title, if you meant it to mean , for fear that we forget, it should be lest we forget. Verse 4, you may have meant to no avail? Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Slaughter for the sake of it is not permissible in any civilised society, no matter when or where it was. Maybe an apology will be issued, hope it suffices. Good use of rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. I spotted 2 errors-hope you don't mind-above the title, if you meant it to mean , for fear that we forget, it should be lest we forget. Verse 4, you may have meant to no avail? Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Prevail - succeed. The other I will correct as you suggest. My deepest appreciation. Blessings to you.
Comment from Glasstruth
Native Americans have suffered so much, and still go unrecognized. Your author notes were quite helpful and educational. Your quatrains flow and have a good rhythm. Well crafted. Les
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Native Americans have suffered so much, and still go unrecognized. Your author notes were quite helpful and educational. Your quatrains flow and have a good rhythm. Well crafted. Les
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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I do try. Thank you much for your thoughtful review.
Comment from Dawny53
Excellent writing! A great choice of topic for this contest, and I personally am glad you chose to remember the Indians.. a very sad and emotional write, really got to me. One little typo you may want to get in and fix.. last stanza her prayers goes.. her prayers go
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Excellent writing! A great choice of topic for this contest, and I personally am glad you chose to remember the Indians.. a very sad and emotional write, really got to me. One little typo you may want to get in and fix.. last stanza her prayers goes.. her prayers go
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Oh, thank you much. I will fix it.
Comment from TOMORAL
Oh, this is so poignant and compelling and sad. I have tears in my eyes for those noble people whose spirits were so alive and beautiful. They called them savage, but we were the savage ones. I vote this a winner. Please let it be the winner. Excellent poetry.
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Oh, this is so poignant and compelling and sad. I have tears in my eyes for those noble people whose spirits were so alive and beautiful. They called them savage, but we were the savage ones. I vote this a winner. Please let it be the winner. Excellent poetry.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Appreciate you as always, my friend. Blessings to you.
Comment from emrpoems
I often wonder at the merciless behaviour of those callous soldiers.The indigenous people of all lands have suffered the same plight. Well written.
Sorry about the pain you must be feeling . The best I can say is that you must try to leave the past behind as it will destroy the present and future.
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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I often wonder at the merciless behaviour of those callous soldiers.The indigenous people of all lands have suffered the same plight. Well written.
Sorry about the pain you must be feeling . The best I can say is that you must try to leave the past behind as it will destroy the present and future.
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Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your kind review . What goes around , comes around. Matter of time.
Comment from Capricorn30
It's rather sad how native peoples land was invaded, history reminds us many sorrowful events;
"Indians were killed after surrendering"--makes no sense;
Well-written poignant facts on the horror of needless killing--really, for what valid reason?
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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It's rather sad how native peoples land was invaded, history reminds us many sorrowful events;
"Indians were killed after surrendering"--makes no sense;
Well-written poignant facts on the horror of needless killing--really, for what valid reason?
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your kind review.
