For the Things You Didn't Do
A speaker poem35 total reviews
Comment from Dr. Nad
Thanks for sharing "For the Things You Didn't Do" with us. We all have our own unique ways of disseminating this sensitive information and this poem uses tact and empathy to draw us in. Again thank you for sharing something that sadly we all can relate to. May God Bless You Good Luck in the Contest
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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Thanks for sharing "For the Things You Didn't Do" with us. We all have our own unique ways of disseminating this sensitive information and this poem uses tact and empathy to draw us in. Again thank you for sharing something that sadly we all can relate to. May God Bless You Good Luck in the Contest
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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Thank you for this understanding and wise review, Dr. Nad. Thank you too for the good luck wishes. I appreciate this very much.
Comment from risktaker
Excellent imagery, tone, and word choice. I feel the regret, loss of brother, and inability to correct a lie that never should have been said. It is impossible to be free from guilt until you make amends for inflicting pain on an innocent person. Message well expressed.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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Excellent imagery, tone, and word choice. I feel the regret, loss of brother, and inability to correct a lie that never should have been said. It is impossible to be free from guilt until you make amends for inflicting pain on an innocent person. Message well expressed.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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You have read this poem with extraordinary sympathy and understanding and I thank you for the kind response and for the exceptional rating as well. Your point of view is so greatly appreciated. It is a difficult situation.
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Comment from kiwisteveh
Yes, all of the events that surround abuse are tortured and tangled and the effects spread far beyond those actually involved and may linger a lifetime.
Your poem is particularly well- written - by that I mean the rhyme and meter are consistent throughout making the piece flow smoothly.
The story too is told well, although the full details are only gradually released.
Steve
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014
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Yes, all of the events that surround abuse are tortured and tangled and the effects spread far beyond those actually involved and may linger a lifetime.
Your poem is particularly well- written - by that I mean the rhyme and meter are consistent throughout making the piece flow smoothly.
The story too is told well, although the full details are only gradually released.
Steve
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2014
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Thank you for reviewing this poem so kindly Steve. I am grateful. I know it is a sensitive subject.
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written. It speaks of abuse in a real way. It is a shame that someone would be falsely accused.
There are times when a child is abused and the person who abused was indeed the one who did the dirty deed, as is the case of a young lady I know who was abused for 4 years by her step father. The man was found guilty on 13 counts and sent to prison for 125 years no parole. It was justice for the family.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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This is very well written. It speaks of abuse in a real way. It is a shame that someone would be falsely accused.
There are times when a child is abused and the person who abused was indeed the one who did the dirty deed, as is the case of a young lady I know who was abused for 4 years by her step father. The man was found guilty on 13 counts and sent to prison for 125 years no parole. It was justice for the family.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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Thank you for this great response to my poem. I know the guilty are often named, but sometimes the innocent are falsely accused and to me that is a double tragedy. Thank you so much for reading and for sharing your story. I sincerely appreciate this.
Comment from LoannaLois
I not only understand, but grieve from the knowledge of it. I don't know how you were about to put this in poetic writing...and so beautifully done...but you did.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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I not only understand, but grieve from the knowledge of it. I don't know how you were about to put this in poetic writing...and so beautifully done...but you did.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your kind understanding of this poem LL, and for the extra star you have so generously bestowed. I am very grateful.
Comment from sbedian
I liked this piece, the rhythm and meter have good flow, I really like the use of dialogue within the poem, it adds texture and makes good storytelling. Five stars!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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I liked this piece, the rhythm and meter have good flow, I really like the use of dialogue within the poem, it adds texture and makes good storytelling. Five stars!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014
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Thank you for reading this, and thank you for the kind review and stars. I'm so glad you stopped by.
Comment from RYME4U
Excellent! What a sad and guilt-ridden story your poem tells, The flow of words is even and the rhymes in the quatrains are so well done!You have done an excellent job here.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Excellent! What a sad and guilt-ridden story your poem tells, The flow of words is even and the rhymes in the quatrains are so well done!You have done an excellent job here.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your kind words Rose. I am so glad you liked the poem.
Comment from Ranwolf
Really soul retching deep. I cannot imagine going through life accusing the innocent of such lies and keep on living. I could hear the tortured soul in your poem. This was really well written. It was a poem that, as I read it, just kept building up tension. Even though what was done was really wrong, I felt sorry for this person. Great writing.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Really soul retching deep. I cannot imagine going through life accusing the innocent of such lies and keep on living. I could hear the tortured soul in your poem. This was really well written. It was a poem that, as I read it, just kept building up tension. Even though what was done was really wrong, I felt sorry for this person. Great writing.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014
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Thank you for this most perceptive review. It is gratifying to me to see that you felt just what I was feeling... I too feel very sorry for this one who carries such guilt and can't seem to find a way to get free of it. It is not a happy way to live, I'm sure. Thank you for reading and for your sensitive response. I greatly appreciate this.
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You are very welcome
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
this is quite a piece and fits the rules. You are right too often things like this happen and then the lies go on and on till they are so out of control, is correction possible? Very well done
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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this is quite a piece and fits the rules. You are right too often things like this happen and then the lies go on and on till they are so out of control, is correction possible? Very well done
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Thank you Barb. I'm glad you understood and I agree with what you said. The lies are difficult to take back.
Comment from irishauthorme
The trouble with a false accusation of sexual molestation, especially if the crime was committed against a child, is that even if the accused is later proved innocent, many people will still hold suspicion against that person.
Many times the victim will name another person, to protect someone they love.
Not only that, many times the crime goes unreported, especially when the perpetrator is another family member.
Finally, the trauma sometimes stays with the victim for the rest of their life, and affects many of their actions and interactions with others.
Seems to be more of these crimes, every year. Sad, but true.
Good job of describing the pain of the girl, and the suffering of her brother.
irish
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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The trouble with a false accusation of sexual molestation, especially if the crime was committed against a child, is that even if the accused is later proved innocent, many people will still hold suspicion against that person.
Many times the victim will name another person, to protect someone they love.
Not only that, many times the crime goes unreported, especially when the perpetrator is another family member.
Finally, the trauma sometimes stays with the victim for the rest of their life, and affects many of their actions and interactions with others.
Seems to be more of these crimes, every year. Sad, but true.
Good job of describing the pain of the girl, and the suffering of her brother.
irish
Comment Written 01-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2014
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Thank you Irish. Your thoughtful review shows a sensitivity to both sides of the problem and inevitably there is pain, which can affect an entire family. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with me.
