The Night When the Skeletons Woke
a poem of horror in anapestic meter138 total reviews
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: this one is dark and gloomy and scary. Glad the skeletons went back to their afterlife home! Excellent rhythm and rhyme, keeping the pace intact with the speed at which I would be running from those skeletons. Good work! Linda
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Brooke: this one is dark and gloomy and scary. Glad the skeletons went back to their afterlife home! Excellent rhythm and rhyme, keeping the pace intact with the speed at which I would be running from those skeletons. Good work! Linda
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
Brooke, this is one of your all-time best! You have done a fabulous job of describing the Night of the Dead.
I love how you set the scene and make us see the dead skeletons rise from their graves. I especially like stanza 7 where you describe how they greet the living with their wails.
You have all the elements of Gothic horror here--the black night, the eerie graveyard, and the monsters that reign (briefly).
Superbly crafted! Rod
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Brooke, this is one of your all-time best! You have done a fabulous job of describing the Night of the Dead.
I love how you set the scene and make us see the dead skeletons rise from their graves. I especially like stanza 7 where you describe how they greet the living with their wails.
You have all the elements of Gothic horror here--the black night, the eerie graveyard, and the monsters that reign (briefly).
Superbly crafted! Rod
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Rod, for your generous and encouraging response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from JudyS
Brooke, Wonderful Halloween poem. Nice and creepy, just the way they're supposed to be. Excellent job on this one. Have a great evening, Judy
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Brooke, Wonderful Halloween poem. Nice and creepy, just the way they're supposed to be. Excellent job on this one. Have a great evening, Judy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Judy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
LOL Sawyer's cat is almost as big as he is. Anyway, loved this poem. Your poems are classy even when they're scary. Loved the art work and the rhythm was good for foot taping.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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LOL Sawyer's cat is almost as big as he is. Anyway, loved this poem. Your poems are classy even when they're scary. Loved the art work and the rhythm was good for foot taping.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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thank you so much, amahra - it wasn't too long ago Potato was bigger LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from mermaids
This is a wonderful Halloween tale,for one night the skeletons arise from the dead and reign,scaring the living. You have an excellent poetic form with a smooth flow of rhyming words that makes this poem to be read every Halloween.
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This is a wonderful Halloween tale,for one night the skeletons arise from the dead and reign,scaring the living. You have an excellent poetic form with a smooth flow of rhyming words that makes this poem to be read every Halloween.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tatarka2
This is just perfect. You just get better and better. This one is entertaining, descriptive, and the rhyming seems perfect to me. It reads even better aloud. I know little ones would hear this, be captivated, and want to hear it read over and over. Well done!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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This is just perfect. You just get better and better. This one is entertaining, descriptive, and the rhyming seems perfect to me. It reads even better aloud. I know little ones would hear this, be captivated, and want to hear it read over and over. Well done!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, my generous and encouraging friend :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
what a truly fascinating piece of poetry where your imagination is very inventive and ingeniously creative with a superb resourcefulness beyond compare.
The meter and tempo was written and composed well which created a rhythm that flowed smoothly throughout your writing. The uses a method many different types of rhyming whether it be Ceasural, leonine(couplet rhyme) or terminal or and rhyming. All of which were neither forced nor labored and helped with your rhythmic flow.
Your imagery all throughout your poem was very intense and truly demonstratively descriptive as well as elegantly expressive: "The vultures were circling, awaiting for death of one who expelled his last remnants of breath." What a truly visually picturesque site of vultures just waiting to swoop down and have a way with one who is dying. Eerily but effectively written lines.
Thank you so much my friend for sharing and posting this and may the Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
PS: ever since taking your class I've been noticing a lot of people who use lie instead of lay and use it in the wrong context.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Brooke;
what a truly fascinating piece of poetry where your imagination is very inventive and ingeniously creative with a superb resourcefulness beyond compare.
The meter and tempo was written and composed well which created a rhythm that flowed smoothly throughout your writing. The uses a method many different types of rhyming whether it be Ceasural, leonine(couplet rhyme) or terminal or and rhyming. All of which were neither forced nor labored and helped with your rhythmic flow.
Your imagery all throughout your poem was very intense and truly demonstratively descriptive as well as elegantly expressive: "The vultures were circling, awaiting for death of one who expelled his last remnants of breath." What a truly visually picturesque site of vultures just waiting to swoop down and have a way with one who is dying. Eerily but effectively written lines.
Thank you so much my friend for sharing and posting this and may the Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
PS: ever since taking your class I've been noticing a lot of people who use lie instead of lay and use it in the wrong context.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Alex, I am so very happy to hear you are noticing things from grammar class :-) Thank you for you observant and generous review, my thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
absolutely the best and quite a description. What a story in a piece and it really is for those of all ages. rhyme and meter excellent
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absolutely the best and quite a description. What a story in a piece and it really is for those of all ages. rhyme and meter excellent
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Barb, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Curly Girly
Oh, wow! This is a creepy one. This is a far cry from your usual joviality. It competes with the scary ones at the top. Perfect structure, good story and imaginative word choices.
But the greetings they gave were not given with cheer,
those gasps filled with horror as danger drew near.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Oh, wow! This is a creepy one. This is a far cry from your usual joviality. It competes with the scary ones at the top. Perfect structure, good story and imaginative word choices.
But the greetings they gave were not given with cheer,
those gasps filled with horror as danger drew near.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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Thanks so very much, Curly Girly - it's fun to write the dark stuff in Halloween season :-) Brooke
Comment from Acquired Taste
Love this Brooke - I must say though, the photo of Sawyer looks as if you are reading to him and he is searching for a safe haven...under the cat! Great addition to your Halloween series. Jean
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Love this Brooke - I must say though, the photo of Sawyer looks as if you are reading to him and he is searching for a safe haven...under the cat! Great addition to your Halloween series. Jean
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014
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The picture was taken when he had a fever - the antibiotics have him all active and chipper again :-) Thanks so much, Jean :-) Brooke
