Truthful Jones, Greatest Babysitter
Short Story-World's Greatest Babysitter45 total reviews
Comment from amahra
LOL! This was really nice. There was humor in every paragraph. I envy writers that can make readers laugh. I can't wait for the next story. You are excellent in writing broken dialogue.
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LOL! This was really nice. There was humor in every paragraph. I envy writers that can make readers laugh. I can't wait for the next story. You are excellent in writing broken dialogue.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from drivenbackward
Okay, Mikey. I hope you appreciate my honesty. That way you know when I'm telling the truth on compliments. I tried this, but you lost me about 30% through. I definitely thinks it's just my reading tastes, though. I really like your writing, but you change styles often, and the dialogue on this just didn't grab me like your other stuff. Sorry!
Khrushchev stood up and hopped around shadow boxing. -- No need for 'up'
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Okay, Mikey. I hope you appreciate my honesty. That way you know when I'm telling the truth on compliments. I tried this, but you lost me about 30% through. I definitely thinks it's just my reading tastes, though. I really like your writing, but you change styles often, and the dialogue on this just didn't grab me like your other stuff. Sorry!
Khrushchev stood up and hopped around shadow boxing. -- No need for 'up'
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Where in the world did this come from Mikey? Now this is truly entertaining and so full of ballony it is hellarious. You may have found a nitch here ny friend. I can't wait to read more.
Well done. Nancy
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Where in the world did this come from Mikey? Now this is truly entertaining and so full of ballony it is hellarious. You may have found a nitch here ny friend. I can't wait to read more.
Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yep, it looks like there was a lot of looking, listening, and learning going on to get to this point of your story. I enjoyed it and can't wait to read the next part. Great job. :-)
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Yep, it looks like there was a lot of looking, listening, and learning going on to get to this point of your story. I enjoyed it and can't wait to read the next part. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from padumachitta
Hi this is fun , it reads real, i have met people like this, well, i think i have...it was at the yellowknife bar and a few pitchers of the barley soupd and all and then there was the night in Ahousat and the homemade spirit and charlie george charlie and his brother john chralie geroge.
thanks i enjoyed your story...padumachitta
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Hi this is fun , it reads real, i have met people like this, well, i think i have...it was at the yellowknife bar and a few pitchers of the barley soupd and all and then there was the night in Ahousat and the homemade spirit and charlie george charlie and his brother john chralie geroge.
thanks i enjoyed your story...padumachitta
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from emrpoems
The moving backward and forward with your ideas made the dialogue seem so natural and the content drew me in immediately. An enjoyable read
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The moving backward and forward with your ideas made the dialogue seem so natural and the content drew me in immediately. An enjoyable read
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: I like how you toss ideas back and forth to entertain with the Australian dingos on a raft, wine in a box, Budweiser, teenager Bigfoot and a wrasslar. Bigfoot to Foot Long, are you hungry for a subway? Great story! Like the laugh line too! Very creative, good old boy time!
flylikeaneagle
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Michael: I like how you toss ideas back and forth to entertain with the Australian dingos on a raft, wine in a box, Budweiser, teenager Bigfoot and a wrasslar. Bigfoot to Foot Long, are you hungry for a subway? Great story! Like the laugh line too! Very creative, good old boy time!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
i LIKE THIS,and the picture of the sitter. I enjoyed reading,and the imagery was good as well as the flow of the story. Thanks for sharing. Mary
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i LIKE THIS,and the picture of the sitter. I enjoyed reading,and the imagery was good as well as the flow of the story. Thanks for sharing. Mary
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
I just love the off the grid attitude of this. I feel like I am thumbing my nose at the world and laughing at every convention here. Love this. MORE!!!
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I just love the off the grid attitude of this. I feel like I am thumbing my nose at the world and laughing at every convention here. Love this. MORE!!!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from rjuselius
this is an interesting piece of literary art! it flows quite well but i had to read it twice to understand what was going on. however this may be due to the fact that english is not my mother tongue.
anyhoo, thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
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this is an interesting piece of literary art! it flows quite well but i had to read it twice to understand what was going on. however this may be due to the fact that english is not my mother tongue.
anyhoo, thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
