Truthful Jones, Greatest Babysitter
Short Story-World's Greatest Babysitter45 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Is this more or less about you? I think it might be. Your grandfather made you a special chair, when you were a baby. Then the whole world comes over me.
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Is this more or less about you? I think it might be. Your grandfather made you a special chair, when you were a baby. Then the whole world comes over me.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from mikemagine
What's wrong with this picture? Nothing. It shows the kind of men who'll protect our country in the future. Men trained to scare Hell outta others. Men dedicated to guarding the borders, lifting the boulders and hurling 'em at any adversaries. A battalion of THESE guys will easily prevail.
Funny story, Truthful Jones:--) Started laughing soon as I began reading and couldn't easily stop...This is excellent and great therapy!
Mike
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What's wrong with this picture? Nothing. It shows the kind of men who'll protect our country in the future. Men trained to scare Hell outta others. Men dedicated to guarding the borders, lifting the boulders and hurling 'em at any adversaries. A battalion of THESE guys will easily prevail.
Funny story, Truthful Jones:--) Started laughing soon as I began reading and couldn't easily stop...This is excellent and great therapy!
Mike
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from Spitfire
Shades of Humpwhistle, Mikey. For a while your prose seemed to model the voice of Dean Kuch. Honestly,, I hear so many different voices in your prose. You probably aren't even aware of it. Love the names of all your characters in this piece and the colloquialisms as well as the references to Australia. Be interesting to see how this turns out.
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Shades of Humpwhistle, Mikey. For a while your prose seemed to model the voice of Dean Kuch. Honestly,, I hear so many different voices in your prose. You probably aren't even aware of it. Love the names of all your characters in this piece and the colloquialisms as well as the references to Australia. Be interesting to see how this turns out.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from vapros
Michael, this is a first class effort, with endless humor and spoof. Very imaginative and creative, and one of the best reads we have seen here recently. I enjoyed it immensely.
Bill
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Michael, this is a first class effort, with endless humor and spoof. Very imaginative and creative, and one of the best reads we have seen here recently. I enjoyed it immensely.
Bill
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from Thewriterwithnoname
Well, this is definitely a fun and interesting way to start a story. It's hard to do dialects because they can so often be off putting, but here it doesn't damage the flow at all. It remains quite readable. Entertaining and funny. Well done.
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Well, this is definitely a fun and interesting way to start a story. It's hard to do dialects because they can so often be off putting, but here it doesn't damage the flow at all. It remains quite readable. Entertaining and funny. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the story. I would have liked a baby sitter like that for my young'uns at times. They could be real rascals at times. Then I got to reading and found he was more yarn that brawn. He can spill a fanciful tale. Great work. Eager to read more.
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I love the picture. I love the story. I would have liked a baby sitter like that for my young'uns at times. They could be real rascals at times. Then I got to reading and found he was more yarn that brawn. He can spill a fanciful tale. Great work. Eager to read more.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from trimple
LOL Oh blimey, Mikey - you are funny.
I was pretty lost in the lingo to be honest, being brit n all, but none the less, what I did pull out of this was a great sense of humor and tongue in cheek slap stick.
The word 'Eskimo' you may want to change to inuit, for pc reasons though, I think...
Don't I feel like a skunk at possum orgy?
alligator Dongee
He took a pack of dingos on a raft! WTF! LOL
Footlong/Bigfoot - priceless
kind regards
tracey :)
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LOL Oh blimey, Mikey - you are funny.
I was pretty lost in the lingo to be honest, being brit n all, but none the less, what I did pull out of this was a great sense of humor and tongue in cheek slap stick.
The word 'Eskimo' you may want to change to inuit, for pc reasons though, I think...
Don't I feel like a skunk at possum orgy?
alligator Dongee
He took a pack of dingos on a raft! WTF! LOL
Footlong/Bigfoot - priceless
kind regards
tracey :)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from Sasha
I enjoyed this very much and love the wacky dialogue...something you have a real knack for. Fun story that desperately need an ending and I am impatiently waiting for part two so get to it...please!
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I enjoyed this very much and love the wacky dialogue...something you have a real knack for. Fun story that desperately need an ending and I am impatiently waiting for part two so get to it...please!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from PoeticXscape
This was a sweet, charming little story. The opening line made me laugh. I liked how it was written and came across. The picture of bigfoot is confusing at first but it kept me curious. Thank you for a sharing and keep writing.
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This was a sweet, charming little story. The opening line made me laugh. I liked how it was written and came across. The picture of bigfoot is confusing at first but it kept me curious. Thank you for a sharing and keep writing.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, what a wonderfully spun yarn complete with the colloquial speech and touches of humor. Are you sure you didn't spend some time in dem hollers up in does Appalachians in your other life, just playing. Nice work, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, what a wonderfully spun yarn complete with the colloquial speech and touches of humor. Are you sure you didn't spend some time in dem hollers up in does Appalachians in your other life, just playing. Nice work, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
