Truthful Jones, Greatest Babysitter
Short Story-World's Greatest Babysitter45 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a cute story, Michael, and I look forward to seeing what the ending is, I got caught up in the vernacular you were using and it made me smile. love the story of Footlong, lol
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this is a cute story, Michael, and I look forward to seeing what the ending is, I got caught up in the vernacular you were using and it made me smile. love the story of Footlong, lol
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Neonewman
Thank you for sharing this mighty fine piece you have delivered in a well-crafted manner. I thoroughly enjoyed it throughout and will be patiently waiting for the next installment. God bless!
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Thank you for sharing this mighty fine piece you have delivered in a well-crafted manner. I thoroughly enjoyed it throughout and will be patiently waiting for the next installment. God bless!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Ookami Taki
This put a stitch in my side, and I loved every second of it. Everything, from the speech affectations (which, btw, are usually hard to effectively pull off in the written word) to the wonderful tale being strung out - it's great. I guess that to do my duty as a reviewer, I'd have to *cough* say something about the *cough* misplaced modifier (from a box in the kitchen with a spigot), but I didn't notice that at all anyway. Excellent story; excellent writing.
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This put a stitch in my side, and I loved every second of it. Everything, from the speech affectations (which, btw, are usually hard to effectively pull off in the written word) to the wonderful tale being strung out - it's great. I guess that to do my duty as a reviewer, I'd have to *cough* say something about the *cough* misplaced modifier (from a box in the kitchen with a spigot), but I didn't notice that at all anyway. Excellent story; excellent writing.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from Zue65
I didn't know the author could be really crazy funny. This story succeeded eliciting laughter in the readers as I did while reviewing it. The dialogue, the unrealistic twists, the unbelievable whereabouts of big foot boy, the baby sittin' of Footlong, this silly name, the wrestling opportunity for big foot, all these and more, made the story hilariously wrong. What a fun diversion from all the serious stuff. Excellent job mikey. Jesus bless you.
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I didn't know the author could be really crazy funny. This story succeeded eliciting laughter in the readers as I did while reviewing it. The dialogue, the unrealistic twists, the unbelievable whereabouts of big foot boy, the baby sittin' of Footlong, this silly name, the wrestling opportunity for big foot, all these and more, made the story hilariously wrong. What a fun diversion from all the serious stuff. Excellent job mikey. Jesus bless you.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from scd41
Your story is amusing and a few names Krushchev and Canada used are interesting. You have rightly observed that the title does not fit. But it would be too early to draw any conclusion as the story is not complete. May be, the cat may come out of the bag at the end. Looking forward to the submission of the next part.
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Your story is amusing and a few names Krushchev and Canada used are interesting. You have rightly observed that the title does not fit. But it would be too early to draw any conclusion as the story is not complete. May be, the cat may come out of the bag at the end. Looking forward to the submission of the next part.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from onebrit
I love these old tall tales, and this seems to be one of the tallest going. Used to read Pecos Bill to my kids....what funny names everyone involved seems to have. Great dialogue.....can't wait for the next installment.
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I love these old tall tales, and this seems to be one of the tallest going. Used to read Pecos Bill to my kids....what funny names everyone involved seems to have. Great dialogue.....can't wait for the next installment.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
This is just incredibly hilarious. I don't know where to begin - everywhere you go in this story there's one thing after another that just catches you - Khruschev, the North Pole, Australia, the dialect - it's all so unexpected, and so funny. I really hope you keep on with this. I've been debating between a 5 and a 6, and I finally decided - this is so good, I just don't know how it could be funnier, or more engaging. I want to read MORE of this one!
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This is just incredibly hilarious. I don't know where to begin - everywhere you go in this story there's one thing after another that just catches you - Khruschev, the North Pole, Australia, the dialect - it's all so unexpected, and so funny. I really hope you keep on with this. I've been debating between a 5 and a 6, and I finally decided - this is so good, I just don't know how it could be funnier, or more engaging. I want to read MORE of this one!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from ravenblack
your voicing of truthful jones is the true star of this story. I can picture a grizzled prospector weaving a tall tale. and this one is about as tall as the empire state building. bigfoot, Vince Mc Mahon, and another character named Kruschev - were you imbibing in that wine?
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your voicing of truthful jones is the true star of this story. I can picture a grizzled prospector weaving a tall tale. and this one is about as tall as the empire state building. bigfoot, Vince Mc Mahon, and another character named Kruschev - were you imbibing in that wine?
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from lancellot
I bet it would a great tale, if the locals ever stop interrupting him so he could finish spinning it. Well done, I love the lite humor and accents. The embellishments are just how a good story is told.
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I bet it would a great tale, if the locals ever stop interrupting him so he could finish spinning it. Well done, I love the lite humor and accents. The embellishments are just how a good story is told.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I have no words for this except... were you drinking wine that comes in a box while you wrote it? LOL! I have no idea where you're going with this bizarre tale, but I'm confident that you don't either. That's my Mikey. LOL! :)
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I have no words for this except... were you drinking wine that comes in a box while you wrote it? LOL! I have no idea where you're going with this bizarre tale, but I'm confident that you don't either. That's my Mikey. LOL! :)
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
