Life Has One Lesson
a Halloween-inspired quatern91 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke yes you are so right there is no escape from the day we are born and our final step in life is Death
To me face it we cannot exist forever
PS I like your repeating words.
Life has one lesson left to teach
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hello Brooke yes you are so right there is no escape from the day we are born and our final step in life is Death
To me face it we cannot exist forever
PS I like your repeating words.
Life has one lesson left to teach
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Gert :-) Brooke
Comment from DSMalott
As they say, 'you can't escape death or taxes!'(not sure who 'they' are, however).
Well done. Nicely structured quatrain. Beautifully crafted rhymes and pithy phrases that made the point stand out clearly, in spite of its morbid reality.
Thanks again for writing.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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As they say, 'you can't escape death or taxes!'(not sure who 'they' are, however).
Well done. Nicely structured quatrain. Beautifully crafted rhymes and pithy phrases that made the point stand out clearly, in spite of its morbid reality.
Thanks again for writing.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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DSMalott, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
You have stated in no uncertain terms what lesson life has to teach us all, Brooke. You have also described how many try to outrun it and/or beg their way out of it, while no one is there to listen.
Excellent use of the refrain in every stanza to emphasize what this lesson is.
I like the hyphenate "stone-deaf ears" which further emphasizes how pointless it is to ignore reality.
And I really like your alliteration in the next to last line: so spare, squelch, screech. A grim lesson for us all. Rod
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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You have stated in no uncertain terms what lesson life has to teach us all, Brooke. You have also described how many try to outrun it and/or beg their way out of it, while no one is there to listen.
Excellent use of the refrain in every stanza to emphasize what this lesson is.
I like the hyphenate "stone-deaf ears" which further emphasizes how pointless it is to ignore reality.
And I really like your alliteration in the next to last line: so spare, squelch, screech. A grim lesson for us all. Rod
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
Yes indeed. Life has a hard lesson to teach us. It may not be much, but it I all that we have. We need to enjoy it while we can because when it is our time to depart, no pleasing will stop death from taking his prize.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Yes indeed. Life has a hard lesson to teach us. It may not be much, but it I all that we have. We need to enjoy it while we can because when it is our time to depart, no pleasing will stop death from taking his prize.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Tomes, thank you so very much for your generous review :-) Brooke
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You deserved it.
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
"Life has one lesson left to teach." The repetition of this line throughout the poem as his progression in each verse, to me, represents and eeriness of that of an Edgar Allan Poe's poem. And the rest of your writing is familiar to and helped with Hitchcock's movie. With a villain is fate And the hopeless victim, as referred to in your poem,
is the reader.
Your cleverness and witty carefulness in this poem is truly resourceful in your imagination that is really inventive and ingeniously creative.
Technically your rhyming quatrains were neither forced nor labored as it even helped in the rhythmic flow of your well metered and tempo lines.
The imagery is very descriptive and indeed intricately expressive: "Call out, But no one far nor near, will come, no matter if they hear." This line in its cell is quite terrifying to realize that a victim is being squandered with his life and crying out with no one there to help.
Very well written and quite terrifyingly effective in its composition.
Thank you for sharing this with everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Brooke;
"Life has one lesson left to teach." The repetition of this line throughout the poem as his progression in each verse, to me, represents and eeriness of that of an Edgar Allan Poe's poem. And the rest of your writing is familiar to and helped with Hitchcock's movie. With a villain is fate And the hopeless victim, as referred to in your poem,
is the reader.
Your cleverness and witty carefulness in this poem is truly resourceful in your imagination that is really inventive and ingeniously creative.
Technically your rhyming quatrains were neither forced nor labored as it even helped in the rhythmic flow of your well metered and tempo lines.
The imagery is very descriptive and indeed intricately expressive: "Call out, But no one far nor near, will come, no matter if they hear." This line in its cell is quite terrifying to realize that a victim is being squandered with his life and crying out with no one there to help.
Very well written and quite terrifyingly effective in its composition.
Thank you for sharing this with everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Alex, thank you so much. I'm glad you appreciate the effect of the quatern's descending/repeating line
Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome Brooke and I did enjoy that rhythm so well.
Alex
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Brooke:)
This is a meaningful quatrain wuth a perfect repeatung/descebdung line that continuall reinforce the funal lesson for each life.
I anm constantly amazed t tge lengths peole seem to go to in an attemot to viid thus simple,but universal truth. I fhink it is an attempt to circumvent death, underlies the evil of our world.
As always, I offer you my love and Irish Hugs for a great poetic message.
Roger
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke:)
This is a meaningful quatrain wuth a perfect repeatung/descebdung line that continuall reinforce the funal lesson for each life.
I anm constantly amazed t tge lengths peole seem to go to in an attemot to viid thus simple,but universal truth. I fhink it is an attempt to circumvent death, underlies the evil of our world.
As always, I offer you my love and Irish Hugs for a great poetic message.
Roger
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Roger, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
Very powerful. The repetition of: "Life has one lesson left to teach" works really in getting the message across. Dark, but it's a fact we all have to deal with. To me this is more than a Halloween poem. Superb!!!! Les
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Very powerful. The repetition of: "Life has one lesson left to teach" works really in getting the message across. Dark, but it's a fact we all have to deal with. To me this is more than a Halloween poem. Superb!!!! Les
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Les, thank you so much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
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You welcome. :)
Comment from Dawny53
Squelch that screech.. I love that! An excellent Halloween poem that is sure to get everyone in the spirit of things if they aren't already! Thanks for sharing..
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Squelch that screech.. I love that! An excellent Halloween poem that is sure to get everyone in the spirit of things if they aren't already! Thanks for sharing..
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Dawny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hey. I don"t know if this is meant to be a Halloweeny thing...but the truth is, this poem is right. It is only death that is sure...and the inbetween we do our best, but we can not cheat the end.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hey. I don"t know if this is meant to be a Halloweeny thing...but the truth is, this poem is right. It is only death that is sure...and the inbetween we do our best, but we can not cheat the end.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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padumachitta, thank you so much for your insightful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent quatern, brooke, you did an excellent job writing about the death that comes to all until God returns. then people will find themselves in eternity in the place of their choosing.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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this is an excellent quatern, brooke, you did an excellent job writing about the death that comes to all until God returns. then people will find themselves in eternity in the place of their choosing.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, sweetwoodjax :-) Brooke
