Comment from amada

Excellent

The satori line has me all in smiles, what a clever and imaginative interpretation! Lovely. Insightful and delightful haiku. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thank you, Amada, for this wonderful review for my haiku. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, and I appreciate your smiles and kind comments.
Smiles,
Ikaryn :-)

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

nice image of the leaf covered garden exposed in opening two lines
good use of alliterative starters in 'crumpled, covered' add rhythm to a tiny poem
excellent satori line with the completion line of 'sweater weather'...intimates the turn of seasons and the covering of the ground in a leafy 'jumper'. Lovely word play.
Well organised; solid haiku structure
Good Luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thank you, mfowler, for this excellent review and your positive feedback for my haiku. I'm glad you enjoyed my leafy jumper poem, and I appreciate your taking the time to read and review. Also, thank you for the contest good wishes.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

"crumpled oak leaves
cover lifeless flower garden
sweater weather"
this is a simple piece of poetic art right to the point. i like the second line, it even implies a seasonal reference. nice one.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thank you, rebekka, for reading my haiku and for sharing your great comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and thanks for reading, reviewing, and for your kind good luck wish in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Karyn


crumpled oak leaves
cover lifeless flower garden
sweater weather


Great use of "crumpled" ... arouses the audial to me ... plus the crunchy sound of "leaves". You capture the desultory nature of fall ... I feel the snugness of that warm and cosy sweater. Great assonance (or whatever it's called) in the 'ea' and "er' of "sweater and weather". A well considered haiku and a strong AHA moment. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thank you, Lovi, for reading my haiku and for your great review and comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the AHA and thank you so much for your good luck wish in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

A too soon scene to witness as you pose to glance at once was a beautiful garden of hues and now are blanketed with dead, damp and withered leaves.
Charlene

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thank you for taking the time to read my haiku, Charlene. I appreciate your kind review and thamk you for sharing your thoughts. Thanks so much.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Yep, it certainly is, and it's my favorite time of the year, too! Not too hot, and not too cold. Crisp chilly mornings, breezy cool afternoons and cold evenings, just perfect!

Your haiku was perfect as well, Indy (nice segue, huh?), and it should certainly be a strong contender in this contest.

Good luck to you.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thanks for your good luck wish in the contest, Dean. I appreciate your time to read, review, and share your comments for my haiku. The leaves are like a cozy sweater for spring's bulbs. I love autumn, too.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Oct-2014

It's always my pleasure, Indy...;}

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

Isn't that the truth. Sweater weather, and dead oak leaves flying all about. We had a bit of flurries today. I liked the ending. It was almost like a flash fiction in a way. Wasn't expecting the ending. LOL

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thanks for your great comments, Drew, and I'm delighted you enjoyed the haiku. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your response.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your syllable count come within contest guidelines

your few words portray the crumpled oak leave cover lifeless flower bed to bring warmth like a sweater

good visual & insight

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014

Thanks so much for this great review for my haiku, Smoothiecool, and for sharing your kind comments. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thanks for your good luck wish for the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

reply by Smoothiecool on 28-Oct-2014

most welcome..SC

Comment from Simple Reflection

Excellent

Ah, the sweater weather is upon us! You created a vivid image with the first two lines that ties in perfectly with the last line. This is well done without the use of artwork! Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014

Thanks so much for this great review for my haiku, Simple Reflection, and for sharing your kind comments. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thanks for your good luck wish for the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Karyn
The flower garden is wearing a sweater of oak leaves.
The oak leaves bring life back to a lifeless flower garden.
I'm not sure which of these I like better.
Yesterday afternoon, I took my cairn terrier for a walk on the trail, and saw the reddest oak leaves.
Isn't it something how fall not only follows summer, but covers summer?
You have a good haiku here. I count 4-8-4 syllables, a total of 16. The first two lines are connected, concrete imagery, and the last line reflects them both.
Good Luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014

Thank you so much, Kimbob, for your great review for my haiku. I always appreciate your kind and interesting comments, and thanks for your good luck wish in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)