haiku(evil nasty things)
Contest entry (5-7-5)57 total reviews
Comment from Judy Couch
This is funny. I expected ghosts and goblins and it was inlaws that were nasty. I enjoyed the humor since so much of Halloween is just nasty. Great job.
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This is funny. I expected ghosts and goblins and it was inlaws that were nasty. I enjoyed the humor since so much of Halloween is just nasty. Great job.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
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Thank you Judy for the awesome review, I was looking for a funny twist. God Bless!
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Poet
I'm not certain whether to laugh hysterically or be scared out of my wits. You've conjured up quite a horror show for me. YIKES ... I haven't moved far enough. :)))
I'm halfway through reading the entries ... this is the first to really excite me enough to write a review. Very clever, so ghoulish and so true for some of us.
Love the first two lines, enjoyed the 'y' consonance and the 'i' assonance ... you instantly capture the atmosphere of a very scary Halloween. I was completely taken in and just beginning to have all kinds of creepy images form in my mind ... then your killer last line. I was very much taken by surprise ... you stepped outside the box and produced a creative and very effective scare. Definitely a break from the 'expected'. WOW I think this superb and hope your satire is appreciated in the vote.
One small suggestion ... which you may take or leave. I think your last line would be more powerfully expressed with "in-laws come to town" ... you have the bonus of 't' alliteration and assonance of 'o' which gives an echo, and to me, a creepier effect. Almost a six. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Great presentation... super image ... from the family album? lol Wishing you the best of luck. Warmest wishes - Lovinia xoxo
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Hi Mystery Poet
I'm not certain whether to laugh hysterically or be scared out of my wits. You've conjured up quite a horror show for me. YIKES ... I haven't moved far enough. :)))
I'm halfway through reading the entries ... this is the first to really excite me enough to write a review. Very clever, so ghoulish and so true for some of us.
Love the first two lines, enjoyed the 'y' consonance and the 'i' assonance ... you instantly capture the atmosphere of a very scary Halloween. I was completely taken in and just beginning to have all kinds of creepy images form in my mind ... then your killer last line. I was very much taken by surprise ... you stepped outside the box and produced a creative and very effective scare. Definitely a break from the 'expected'. WOW I think this superb and hope your satire is appreciated in the vote.
One small suggestion ... which you may take or leave. I think your last line would be more powerfully expressed with "in-laws come to town" ... you have the bonus of 't' alliteration and assonance of 'o' which gives an echo, and to me, a creepier effect. Almost a six. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Great presentation... super image ... from the family album? lol Wishing you the best of luck. Warmest wishes - Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thank you so Lovinia for this most inspiring review you have delivered. I really enjoyed writing this piece and was looking for that funny little twist to give it the edge. God Bless!
Comment from Capricorn30
LOL! I, like many others can relate to these dreaded family members, mystery author;
"Evil nasty things"--so true, in fact they can be much more evil than friends or complete strangers;
Well-penned Halloween thoughts of a different sort--I guess in a way these individuals can be considered ghouls/monsters/ghastly beings.
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LOL! I, like many others can relate to these dreaded family members, mystery author;
"Evil nasty things"--so true, in fact they can be much more evil than friends or complete strangers;
Well-penned Halloween thoughts of a different sort--I guess in a way these individuals can be considered ghouls/monsters/ghastly beings.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
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LOL! Thank you Capricorn for another most inspiring review. God bless!
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count
You made me laugh, especially since I survived the mother-in-law from hell, only mine wasn't funny LOL
Brooke
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Your poem is in good 5/7/5 syllable count
You made me laugh, especially since I survived the mother-in-law from hell, only mine wasn't funny LOL
Brooke
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
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LOL! Sorry you had to go through that Brooke, but we all have our Demons. This piece is becoming quite recognized around town LOL. God bless!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
LOL...This is a hoot, at the in-laws expense, I might add. Great photo to make a good presentation.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hi,
LOL...This is a hoot, at the in-laws expense, I might add. Great photo to make a good presentation.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
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Thank you for another awesome review Jax, it is so good to see how many repeat readers I have been getting. God Bless!
Comment from tfawcus
A fate worse than death LOL A nicely humorous response for the Halloween contest. Good luck with it! At least the children will have a captive audience for trick-or-treating!
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A fate worse than death LOL A nicely humorous response for the Halloween contest. Good luck with it! At least the children will have a captive audience for trick-or-treating!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
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LOL! I have had so much fun reading the reviews on this piece. God Bless!
Comment from ravim
Spirit of Halloween well stated rather tangentially. The idea of introducing the in-laws although sounds nasty is both funny and creative. I love those lines.
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Spirit of Halloween well stated rather tangentially. The idea of introducing the in-laws although sounds nasty is both funny and creative. I love those lines.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
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Thank you Ravim for an awesome review. God bless!
Comment from seaglass
Ha, ha ,ha this made me laugh. I use to have the in-laws from hell and terror filled my heart every time they visited. Great little poem about a real terror.
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Ha, ha ,ha this made me laugh. I use to have the in-laws from hell and terror filled my heart every time they visited. Great little poem about a real terror.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
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LOL! Thank you Seaglass for the awesome review. God Bless!
Comment from w.j.debi
You made me giggle with the unexpected last line. Yes, you better watch out for the hauntingly, scary things that can happen during times like these. Good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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You made me giggle with the unexpected last line. Yes, you better watch out for the hauntingly, scary things that can happen during times like these. Good luck!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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LOL! This was the plan w.j.debi, I am so glad you enjoyed it. God bless!
Comment from Spitfire
LOL. I got a big laugh out of the satori line. That's the way I feel about my son-in-law and his family. That's the way he feel about everyone except his wife and obnoxious friends.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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LOL. I got a big laugh out of the satori line. That's the way I feel about my son-in-law and his family. That's the way he feel about everyone except his wife and obnoxious friends.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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LOL! I suppose there should be a support group for people like us LOL. Thank you for the awesome review Spitfire. God Bless!
