haiku(evil nasty things)
Contest entry (5-7-5)57 total reviews
Comment from thee-name
Excellent 5-7-5. Had a good laugh. Suggestion: Put writing as humour category.
EVIL NASTY THINGS
POUNDING AT MY DOOR TONIGHT
IN- LAWS ARE IN TOWN
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Excellent 5-7-5. Had a good laugh. Suggestion: Put writing as humour category.
EVIL NASTY THINGS
POUNDING AT MY DOOR TONIGHT
IN- LAWS ARE IN TOWN
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you Thee, I never think about the category thing and it has gotten me chewed on a bit once before LOL! I wrote a horror and put it in children's somehow, I woke up to some pretty rough reviews LOL! I will definitely edit this in. God Bless!
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THANK YOU!
Comment from mikemagine
HA!! This rates a six!! Very, very good:-) NeoNewman, you are a genius! Considering the season..., isn't it kind of ironic that we're supposed to accept 'em, "...warts and all" lol!
Bravo!!
Mike
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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HA!! This rates a six!! Very, very good:-) NeoNewman, you are a genius! Considering the season..., isn't it kind of ironic that we're supposed to accept 'em, "...warts and all" lol!
Bravo!!
Mike
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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LOL! Genius no, moderately intelligent maybe. I do love to write and wish I could make a great living at it, what a glorious day that would be. God Bless!
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You never know...you just might get to make a living as a writer. My opin. is that spirits of genius kiss all our souls at certain times...We just need to be more watchful, perhaps.
God bless, my friend!
Mike
Comment from dennis0530
A haiku mixed in with humor and disdain. In-laws who never know how to knock but instead pound at the door as if wanting to knock it down are surely undesirables.
I guess people, in-laws or not who don't respect gentility become evil, nasty "things."
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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A haiku mixed in with humor and disdain. In-laws who never know how to knock but instead pound at the door as if wanting to knock it down are surely undesirables.
I guess people, in-laws or not who don't respect gentility become evil, nasty "things."
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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I suppose this is true, I have always treated the in-laws with respect and kindness and only ask they do the same. I have been known to get a little out of line when they say something less tolerable LOL! God Bless!
Comment from royowen
A good entry in this contest, congratulations on your win, I can understand why your entry won, extra special in-laws obviously, what a horror coming to visit, good combination of artwork and poem, well done. Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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A good entry in this contest, congratulations on your win, I can understand why your entry won, extra special in-laws obviously, what a horror coming to visit, good combination of artwork and poem, well done. Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you Roy on the congrats and the awesome review. God Bless!
Comment from Dibul
Congratulations on winning the contest! And such a deserving entry! It's a very well-done 5-7-5 and you haven't missed a single ingredient. The last line delivers the perfect punch. The picture, the descriptive words, and the humor... very well-written.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Congratulations on winning the contest! And such a deserving entry! It's a very well-done 5-7-5 and you haven't missed a single ingredient. The last line delivers the perfect punch. The picture, the descriptive words, and the humor... very well-written.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you Dibul for the awesome inspiring review. I wanted to take the Halloween thing to a humorous, unpredictable level. God Bless!
Comment from Glasstruth
LOL. I was expecting your typical Halloween poem, but the third line is a real killer. I can see why you won. Congrats! Les
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LOL. I was expecting your typical Halloween poem, but the third line is a real killer. I can see why you won. Congrats! Les
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you Less for the awesome review, I was definitely leaning towards being not typical as they have been boring me a little lately. I love the element of surprise and have enjoyed all of the success this piece has brought me. God bless!
Comment from Emily George
Ha ha are you sure they are not mine.
Great use of a haiku, every word sublime to my ear.
The pictures a bit kind
Sorry great use of descriptive words to fulfill the contest requirements. I really thought it was a lot of fun.
Sorry I don't have a six left.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Ha ha are you sure they are not mine.
Great use of a haiku, every word sublime to my ear.
The pictures a bit kind
Sorry great use of descriptive words to fulfill the contest requirements. I really thought it was a lot of fun.
Sorry I don't have a six left.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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"The pictures a bit kind" I nearly fell out of my chair as these words entered my brain. I appreciate every review you have delivered and love the repeat readers. Emily, the reviews alone are my 6 stars. God bless!
Comment from Caressa_08
Yes, why is it, in-laws are labeled as not good people, it seems still, even though past generations, for some to be a nasty happening if they come, especially unexpected...Though don't know why this is, as never thought of mine as such terrible people.....Anyways, this entry probably was the best of the bunch, Congratulations on the win & a good, somewhat humorous poem for Halloween.
Caressa
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Yes, why is it, in-laws are labeled as not good people, it seems still, even though past generations, for some to be a nasty happening if they come, especially unexpected...Though don't know why this is, as never thought of mine as such terrible people.....Anyways, this entry probably was the best of the bunch, Congratulations on the win & a good, somewhat humorous poem for Halloween.
Caressa
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you Caressa for the awesome review and my in-laws are great people who thankfully enjoy my humor LOL! God Bless!
Comment from mfowler
Oh, I can see why they picked this. Congratulations.
The image invites the reader to think one way, and then your satori line kicks in and instead of a scream, you laugh out loud. I actually did.
Fun stuff. I see you must have spent part of your prize money getting this up here. I hope you get hundreds of great reviews.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Oh, I can see why they picked this. Congratulations.
The image invites the reader to think one way, and then your satori line kicks in and instead of a scream, you laugh out loud. I actually did.
Fun stuff. I see you must have spent part of your prize money getting this up here. I hope you get hundreds of great reviews.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you mfowler for the inspiring review and I did spent about half of the latest wins to promote this and the other 2 pieces. I thoroughly enjoy reading all of the responses and would love to make a living out of writing, just not sure how to go about it LOL! God bless!
Comment from Eric1
Hi neonewman, I am not at all surprised that this one won the competition my friend, I am still laughing at it! i don't know how I missed it before, congratulations, well deserved.
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Hi neonewman, I am not at all surprised that this one won the competition my friend, I am still laughing at it! i don't know how I missed it before, congratulations, well deserved.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you again Eric for another awesome review. I have been laughing quite a bit myself over the many responses I have received with this piece. God bless!
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You are very welcome my friend
