haiku (must walk on water)
contest entry (5-7-5)23 total reviews
Comment from acerisestory
Yours is a nicely written haiku, Loanna. I very much like the imagery of your first two lines and the fun following satori.
Your accompanying artwork is beautiful and a good enhancement for your words.
Thank you for sharing! Alana
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Yours is a nicely written haiku, Loanna. I very much like the imagery of your first two lines and the fun following satori.
Your accompanying artwork is beautiful and a good enhancement for your words.
Thank you for sharing! Alana
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Your words are kind ones. Thanks so much.
Comment from dennis0530
Before long, walking on water will turn to struggling in the water.
But luckily with a change of heart and a change of plan, a boat is a good option. Short of wanting for air transport, a boat ride seems the logical way to leave.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Before long, walking on water will turn to struggling in the water.
But luckily with a change of heart and a change of plan, a boat is a good option. Short of wanting for air transport, a boat ride seems the logical way to leave.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Ha, your response was much more fun than my original poem! Thanks!
Comment from c_lucas
When one must walk on water to leave a bad situation, it is best that the water is in its icy State. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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When one must walk on water to leave a bad situation, it is best that the water is in its icy State. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thank you...and your truth is evident! I appreciate your comments.
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You're welcome, Lois. Charlie
Comment from LIJ Red
I'll restrain the urge to say "Duh." The absolute common sense of your haiku in unmistakable. Since it is a true five seven five-excellent.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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I'll restrain the urge to say "Duh." The absolute common sense of your haiku in unmistakable. Since it is a true five seven five-excellent.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thank you...and a good "DUH" now and then doesn't hurt anyone...Thanks!
Comment from TAB_that's me
A boat is better unless you have great, unfailing faith in Jesus:) Great satori line. perfect haiku for the contest - good luck.
teresa
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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A boat is better unless you have great, unfailing faith in Jesus:) Great satori line. perfect haiku for the contest - good luck.
teresa
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Hi Tab....I agree wholeheartedly! Your kind comments were also so nice to read.
Comment from Charlene0513
Not typically the sort of thing you would imagine unless you were very close to Jesus and He invited you to walk by faith.
Hardly but kind of nice to think about it that way.
Charlene
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Not typically the sort of thing you would imagine unless you were very close to Jesus and He invited you to walk by faith.
Hardly but kind of nice to think about it that way.
Charlene
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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That is very true! Thanks so much for writing.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
good alliteration in walk on water and in better with a boat
good humor and entertaining visuals
I am sitting here laughing as I visualize somebody's attempt to walk on water before sinking and wishing for that boat LOL :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
good alliteration in walk on water and in better with a boat
good humor and entertaining visuals
I am sitting here laughing as I visualize somebody's attempt to walk on water before sinking and wishing for that boat LOL :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Brooke, I miss your class...and thank you sincerely for your comments.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this haiku about the best way to leave an island. good luck in the contest....
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this haiku about the best way to leave an island. good luck in the contest....
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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You are a breath of fresh air when you comment...thanks!
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words portray well if one wants to walk from the island on foot they will have to walk on water better by boat
cleverly done
good visual
cheers Smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words portray well if one wants to walk from the island on foot they will have to walk on water better by boat
cleverly done
good visual
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
Comment from Judy Couch
This is funny. It sparked my imagination and made me wonder what it would be like to try and walk away from an island. Great job.
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This is funny. It sparked my imagination and made me wonder what it would be like to try and walk away from an island. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
