Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

This is a terrific poem, I wasn't really sure where it was going and you kept me in happy suspense.. well, maybe a little bit scary suspense.. and then you brought it all home with the grandkids in your last stanza and I just loved that.. nice work!

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

I am so pleased you liked it, Dawny53, I love it when my grandchildren knock on my door. We have to play our parts as well, lol. Thank you so much for your lovely review! xsx Sandra.

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Oh, Sandra, your Halloween poem is pure delight. I love your descriptions of the man, and your words made me believe he was a mean man who Hayes Halloween. The surprise ending is wonderful!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Hi, Karyn, thank you so much for your lovely review. I am almost ready for the big night, been practicing my look of fear for when my grandchildren knock, LOL, they love it. :) Sandra xsx

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the fear of an old gentleman and Halloween as it comes around each year
his cries of despair as children knock on his doo for treats
this time to hear his own grandchildren

good visual

good AB/AB rhyme theme through out verses

just a look at "the" you use it six times to begin a sentence they could all be deleted and not take from the poem

good use of "O" assonance through out

2nd stanza line two
insert "in" his tiny room for better flow

just my thoughts no malice intended

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Hi, Faye, thank you so much for your helpful comments, I didn't realise I had written so many 'the' in my poem! Just shows how much we need to focus on our words. I will be sorting it out, so a big thank you, my friend. I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem, and I would never, ever think of you having a malicious thought in your body! :) Sandra xsx

Comment from skye

Excellent

What a fun poem. Great set-up, powerful delivery, wonderful ending. So cute and timely. Love the rhymes, love the art, love the season.
Excellent.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

What a lovely review, Skye, I am so pleased you enjoyed it! :) xsx Sandra

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

I liked the humour in this, Sandra. I am not too fond of Halloween, but this was nice and light-hearted kids' fun. Excellent rhyming and good descriptions. Great picture, too. Enjoyable read. Faye

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Thank you so much, Faye, for this lovely review. I hate the Halloween films they put out, I have stopped watching them, they scare the life out of me! :( xsx Sandra

Comment from amahra

Excellent

I love the Halloween, Thanksgiving and Christmas holidays. The poems you guys put out are fabulous. Loved this poem. And especially loved the picture of the kids who are obviously having a great time.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

I think we are all big kids when these occasions come around, Amahra, I just love them! Thank you so much for your lovely review. :) Sandra xsx

Comment from royowen

Excellent

What a lovely rich poem full of fun, and poor old grandpa, my grandkids do the same with me, when I can visit them, beautifully written Sandra, I enjoyed this so much, good abab rhyming, the language was well scribed and composed beautifully, I enjoyed it! Blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014

Thank you, Roy, we are all ready for them this year. Bless their hearts! I'm delighted you enjoyed it. :) Sandra

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

Ha ha! I enjoyed your poem very much, Sandra! I especially liked the surprise ending. The buildup to that ending is very well done.

You've rhymed well, and you've made great use of alliteration and enjambment to increase the flow of your words.

Thanks for sharing this fun write! Alana

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014

I am so pleased you liked it, Alana, I was sitting here thinking about last years Halloween, we are prepared this year, well and truly! LOL. :) Sandra. xsx

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Sandra, this is very good. Perfect abab rhyme quite gripping. I saw the picture then started reading and thought OMG this is not going to be what I thought, and that you were doing a Dean Kuch on the reader LOL - all that garlic and flickering candles. Then half way through the whole poem changed tack, very cleverly, like the light went on. A really good poem that suits all ages - young and old. Well done - warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014

Aww, thank you so much, my friend. I did have fun with this one. The funny thing was, I did start off writing it as a Dean Kuch style of poem, but somehow the words started to change tracks, LOL. I am so pleased you liked it, Dorothy, thank you. xsx Sandra

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Sandra,

I love it. What a fun story. Proof that grandparents will do whatever it takes to get the job done when it comes to making the grandkids happy.

Great job with this one.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014

If you were near our house next week on Halloween's night, you would think I'd lost the plot! LOL, we have to get into the spirit of these things! Thank you so much for your lovely review, Jax. :) Sandra. xsx