The Night the Lights Went Out
story poem in rhyming couplets131 total reviews
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
What truth to this poem that there may be, sounds like the coming of the Three Dark Nights as has been foretold to come. May we be prepared in faith & do battle according to the Lord's will in prayer & in good will.
The poem reads well & rhymed leading thunderously stanza by stanza to it's climax & never ending questioning sentence: "Why was I spared?".
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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What truth to this poem that there may be, sounds like the coming of the Three Dark Nights as has been foretold to come. May we be prepared in faith & do battle according to the Lord's will in prayer & in good will.
The poem reads well & rhymed leading thunderously stanza by stanza to it's climax & never ending questioning sentence: "Why was I spared?".
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Giovanni :-)
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Y/W GMT
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
This is really scary, probably your best Halloween poem so far. As always, perfect cadence and well chosen rhymes. You know what came to my mind? The movie, "Hotel Rwanda." I was recalling a scene where they were driving back to the hotel with supplies and found themselves driving on scores of bodies. Don't know if you saw that movie. Anyway, I'm glad I'm not reading this at night.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke,
This is really scary, probably your best Halloween poem so far. As always, perfect cadence and well chosen rhymes. You know what came to my mind? The movie, "Hotel Rwanda." I was recalling a scene where they were driving back to the hotel with supplies and found themselves driving on scores of bodies. Don't know if you saw that movie. Anyway, I'm glad I'm not reading this at night.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Lou, thank you so very much, my generous friend. Yes, I remember that movie, and yes, you are spot on in thinking of that film in conjunction with what I had to say in this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from trimple
Hello Brooke
Your poem cleverly depicts not only Halloween, but also the current state of our war torn world, and its horrors.
You manage to encourage the reader to conjure up all sorts of nasty thoughts.
Very clever...
Great writing
kind regards
tracey
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Hello Brooke
Your poem cleverly depicts not only Halloween, but also the current state of our war torn world, and its horrors.
You manage to encourage the reader to conjure up all sorts of nasty thoughts.
Very clever...
Great writing
kind regards
tracey
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Tracey, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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you're welcome
Comment from Goodauthor
Truly a story for the season, the imagery was so vivid I felt like I was there. This was truly a scary story in a poem. It would definitely be a terrible experience.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Truly a story for the season, the imagery was so vivid I felt like I was there. This was truly a scary story in a poem. It would definitely be a terrible experience.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Goodauthor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are coming into you Halloween finest. I know how you enjoy this season. Halloween is all my first graders can talk about.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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You are coming into you Halloween finest. I know how you enjoy this season. Halloween is all my first graders can talk about.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Barbara - what are the costumes most of them are planning to wear? Brooke
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I am not sure. At our school they have to dress as their favorite story book character so the gory ones are out.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
My goodness, Brooke! I have never read a poem like this from you, it is magnificent! It tells such a terrible story, you should have put this one in a contest, it is truly amazing. Well done, you! I wondered why I had kept a 6 back, this is the first time. Brilliant, can't praise it enough. :) xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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My goodness, Brooke! I have never read a poem like this from you, it is magnificent! It tells such a terrible story, you should have put this one in a contest, it is truly amazing. Well done, you! I wondered why I had kept a 6 back, this is the first time. Brilliant, can't praise it enough. :) xsx Sandra
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thank you so very much, Sandra, for your most encouraging and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
Excellent rhythm in the rhymed couplets
Excellent use of alliteration.
Easy flow of words from one line to another
Stunning presentation of this eerie story. Still wondering what caused the lights to go oust and why then stampede
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Excellent rhythm in the rhymed couplets
Excellent use of alliteration.
Easy flow of words from one line to another
Stunning presentation of this eerie story. Still wondering what caused the lights to go oust and why then stampede
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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emrpoems, the cause of the lights going out is entirely secondary to the fear the dark generates since it is never actually the dark or anything in it that kills - the people kill themselves/each other because of their irrational fears - thank you so much for reviewing :-) Brooke
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I get it.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I think this one is the scariest that you written this year. The closer Halloween gets, maybe the scarier, huh?
~~Teresa~~
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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I think this one is the scariest that you written this year. The closer Halloween gets, maybe the scarier, huh?
~~Teresa~~
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Teresa - I don't think I have it in me to get scarier than this one :-) Brooke
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is excellently written, Brooke. The imagery is very good, the rhythm superb. A frightful poem, in story form, in rhyming couplets. This one is especially well put into words. How good a poet you are!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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This is excellently written, Brooke. The imagery is very good, the rhythm superb. A frightful poem, in story form, in rhyming couplets. This one is especially well put into words. How good a poet you are!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Drew, thank you so much for your generous and encouraging review :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
This is just to spooky and eerie, great fun and just right for the season of Halloween. Hope it's not too dark on Halloween night this year! Evi
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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This is just to spooky and eerie, great fun and just right for the season of Halloween. Hope it's not too dark on Halloween night this year! Evi
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Evi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
