Comment from Warren Rodgers

Excellent

Hey Dean,
You've written a terrific story poem in excellent anapest meter and aabb rhyming. This meter is great for story telling and your presentation is fabulous. I enjoyed reading it very much.

all the best,
Rodger

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014

Thanks, and congrats on your win.

Comment from Dobson

Excellent

Really skillful and you don't get a word wrong - good fun. Loved the ending. A touch of gothic! Rhyme and rhythm sustained well. This would be a great poem for Halloween!

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014

Thanks, Dobson, and I did write this just before Halloween for the contest that's still going on. It will be for two more days. It's not doing as well as I'd hoped in the voting booth right now, but it was fun to create just the same. Plus, I learned a great deal about anapestic meter while working on it.

Thanks again for your encouraging comments and review.

Comment from JM

Exceptional

I love the way this reads, easy, great rhyme, terrific little story. During the Day of the Dead mexican celebrations, we see skeleton puppets dancing around...performing skits. This is more of a zombie nature but I like the "theme".

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, JM. I've witnessed the Day of the Dead celebrations in Mexico and they are amazing. I sincerely appreciate your outstanding comments and rating, and I am so happy you enjoyed it.

Comment from Muffins

Exceptional

A poem peppered with horror and humor tangled inside a musical beat that you can snap your fingers to. I know I should be scared but I found myself laughing out loud.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thanks, Muffins, and comedic horror was exactly what I was shooting for. I really appreciate your glowing review and excellent rating, especially since the poem isn't performing very well in the contest.

Thanks again! :}

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Excellent story. Very timely for Halloween. This anapest is smooth as silk.The rhymes are great and the picture is well chosen. Great contest entry.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014

Thanks, RYME4U. I sincerely appreciate your encouraging comments. :}

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Dean,

Your poem for Poetry Mechanics - Contest #3 is written very well. Then again it's how you always write your poems, that makes them very interesting to read. Bravo that it's already been REC and received the ATB award.

Kat

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, MizKat, and I tried to keep it pretty tame for this one. I am really happy that you enjoyed it. :}

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

I should've been scared, maybe, but your poem
made me laugh, the presentation was fabulous,
as was the content, I'm reading this before I
retire, maybe I should be scared, but no I'm
laughing.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014

No, it wasn't my intention to scare anyone at all with this poem, Bryana. I was aiming for humor, albeit, a bit morbid, but humor just the same.

That being said, you're response was just what I was hoping for.

Thanks for your review.

Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

Love your writing style, Dean...you quite often sprinkle bits of humor here and there. I laughed out loud at "ward of the state". What could be worse? My grandparents were undertakers, so this poem struck a special chord with me. Highly entertaining, Dean.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

You say your grandparents were undertakers? Well, that could have made for an interesting visit a time or two, 'ey? LOL...

Thanks so much for the complimentary comments, Green Lake Girl, I do appreciate it! :D

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Aha! A Michael Jackson moment he was having, 'Thriller' come to life. I love this, and I believe it's a great entry for this contest, good luck!

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thanks, Irish Rain. I'm glad you liked it. :}

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

What a delightful Halloween poem! Your poetry comes alive with vivid imagery and a timely story. And the rhythm and rhyme are without flaw. That poor mortician. I can just see him wigging out! Thank you for a fun read. Blessings to you and best of luck in the contest with this winner. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thanks so much for the good luck wishes and encouraging review, Linda. All are greatly appreciated. :}