Comment from Dutchie

Exceptional

Hi Dean. Great this poem with a wonderful presentation and very desripive. Very scary indeed. But what scared me the most was the one star rating. Creepy!!! Your biggest nightmare...
Poem has a smooth flow, unforced rhyme and geat imagination, it's just exceptional. Great job!! Fia

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Hah, yeah, Fia, i still don't quite understand that reviewers rating. I'm not sure if they liked it, and their praise was purely sarcastic, or if they outright hated the poem, LOL... Still a mystery...

As for your exceptional rating and stellar review, I certainly appreciate it, Fia. At least your rating matches your written communication, heh-heh...

Thanks so much again, and I'm very happy you enjoyed it. :}

reply by Dutchie on 26-Oct-2014

You're welcome, Dean.

Comment from Aletheia

Excellent

Hahahaha..
mortified mortician is on the loose
run away, or grab your noose!
:)
I like your dreadful sense of humor. :) I laughed hard at the imagery. Your presentation is off the charts awesome as well. Love the title. Clever. :)

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

Comment from Javed05

Good

This is a good write up and creates good imagery. It has good rhyming and flows very well. I enjoyed this and keep it up. Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Okay, Javed. So what suggestions do you have to raise it to the level of at least an "Excellent" status? Generally, if someone gives less than a five star rating here, they also offer suggestions to improve. Yet you have said nothing but good things about the writing.

Perhaps you took offense to the topic, or the presentation threw you for a loop? You obviously felt it was only average. Let me guess, you are new here and haven't taken the time to read what the ratings system and stars actually mean?

Go figure...

Thanks for your review just the same.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Exceptional

Hello Dean
your poem indeed shows your talent knowing how to us a very difficult format (Anapestic Tetrameter)
Great poem for upcoming Halloween

Gert

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Thanks, Gert, I'm really happy that you liked it. I had lots of help from many fellow writers here to get it right ( I hope). So much so, in fact, you could say it's more of a collaboration than anything else, LOL.

Thanks for the awesome rating and kind compliments, my friend. :}

reply by Gert sherwood on 26-Oct-2014

You are welcome Dean
Gert

Comment from SimplyaStudent

Excellent

I do have to ask you one thing dean... where do you come up with this stuff? I mean its funny yeah but gee, do you go around with it in your head all day??? Good work sir:-)
SS

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Thanks, SimplyaStudent! I sincerely appreciate your complimentary review.

In an interview on a Sunday CBS morning news show, an interviewer once asked author Stephen King, Where do you come up with all of these crazy ideas, these macabre settings? How do you maintain your sanity?"

King rubbed his chin for a moment, looked up, then looked at that man, right square in the eyes and said, "I could tell you...but then I'd have to kill you." Ha-ha!

Seriously, I really appreciate the kind review. :}

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

A gastly take form the morgue in well executed Anapestic meter. The usual well crafted composition, blending imagery and verse, makes this outstanding.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Thanks, Mister 'T', and coming from you, with your extensive knowledge of meter and the mechanics of poetry, I have to believe that you certainly know what you're talking about. For you to say that this is in perfect Anapestic meter is a load off of my shoulders, LOL! I'm no poetry expert when it comes to mechanics, not by any stretch of the imagination. But I do try very hard.

Thanks so much for your supportive and thoughtful review.

A weight has been lifted.

Hallelujah! :}

Comment from nigai

Poor

Tight, rhythmic and thought provoking. Corpses may not be as lively as you have written but, there is cadavaric spasm. And, farting as well as belching.

Best to you on further writing,

Nigai

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Thank you, Nigai, for giving me my first ever POOR rating. How special, Oh, joy-- rapture, what a treat!

But if I may inquire, if it is so POOR, then where are your suggestions to correct it, to make it at least GOOD? Why is your review nothing but positive comments, yet you award me the very lowest rating that one can give? You do know that one star is the lowest rating, correct? Here is what the site says about the ratings system...

The site offers a six star scale for ranking work. Here's a guideline:

Six Stars (Exceptional: Simply Outstanding)
Five Stars (Excellent: Enjoyable and no revisions needed)
Four Stars (Good: Adjustments needed)
Three Stars (Below average)
Two Stars (Below Average: Needs lots of work)
One Star (Poor: Major revision required)

So, my question is, if you feel major revision is required, what do you suggest?

Good grief you newbies make me crazy!

reply by nigai on 05-Jan-2015

Mr. Kuch, yes I know the ratings. Please consider the fact that I had a brain infarct. No excuse. Nothing to correct. As I noted in my review, I stand by it.

P.S. I'm not a newbie, just an old fart who had an infarct.

Nigai

reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015

Good luck here. you're going to need it with that attitude, my friend. :}

God Bless.

reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015

It would warm the very core of my blackened heart if you'd see fit to raise the rating, then, if you didn't feel it was one-worthy. Even a three, or a four star rating would suffice. I have infarcts myself, from time to time, for many different reasons, heh-heh...

God bless! :)

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Exceptional

Dean- this presentation is perfect'
How clever of you to hook this willing reader with colour and technique.
How frightening it must have been-no wonder he lost his mind.
I've checked the doors and windows are locked several times tonight- not sure about turning out the light.
THANKS! DEAN. Lol.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, seken58, and sorry about the delayed reply. We just finished up our Halloween charity haunt, so it's been pretty crazy here the past month.

While the poem isn't doing all that well in the contest booth right now, I appreciate your kind comments and exceptional rating all the more.

Thanks again! :}

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Just read the rules for this contest and it seems very complicated, but this creepy little poem simply reads and rhymes extremely well. Love the picture you give us of the cadavers dance. Great read, and good luck in the contest.

valda

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

Comment from kiwisteveh

Exceptional

Magnificent presentation which I'm sure didn't influence me at all in awarding six stars!

Great imagination in your comical little tale and as is pointed out in the prompt, the anapaestic meter is wonderful for this sort of verse.

Wish I'd seen those dancing cadavers.

This is bound to do well in the contest and has set the bar very high for the rest of us.

Good luck - not that you need much.

Steve

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, Steve, and so sorry about the delayed reply. We just finished up our Halloween charity haunt, so it's been pretty crazy here the past month.

While the poem isn't doing all that well in the contest booth right now, I appreciate your kind comments and exceptional rating all the more.

Thanks again! :}