Comment from JM daSilva

Excellent

If he had shut up about it, fine. If you're too weird, you better keep quiet, or you'll attract the cops or the loony bin.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Haha, you got that right, JM!

Thanks so much for the review. :}

reply by JM daSilva on 03-Nov-2014

That's it. hehe

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

Congrats on your recent win, my friend. This poem is great for the season. You are brave to try this meter. Perhaps someday, I will accomplish iambic and then forge ahead into something else. For now, I am still struggling with iambic
and I do mean struggling. Best wishes in the contest, my friend. I admire your talent with meter, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thanks, Debbie, and I'm still learning. I do try very hard, i can honestly admit that to you. The poem's not doing too well in the voting right now, but it's still early.

Thanks so much again for the kind comments and review. :}

Comment from daeneam

Exceptional

The night of the dead! If this is not your poem, I would not care reading this. I don't like zombies and dead people. They are so grose. But you have this unique way of presenting disgusting creatures that I have difficulty ignoring it!

Happy Halloween, my friend! You have the most prolific imagination during this season. God bless and be safe always! c", mae

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, c", mae, I sincerely appreciate your outstanding comments and review, my friend. The poem isn't doing as well as I'd hoped in the voting booth, but it's still early in the contest.

I sincerely appreciate your wonderful and encouraging review. :}

Comment from mauial

Excellent

I must day this was quite a witty poem. When I first saw the title I thought it was something I wouldn't read. But I am glad I did. My nephew is a mortician in Arizona and he gave us a tour of the facilities a few years ago right after we had dinner. I thought I was going to chuck.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

Comment from jshep

Exceptional

Here I thought I was going to read and be going ick, Dean, but I ended up chuckling, 'babbling on Main and Vine and as ward of the state doing his time.'. Lol

That poor mortician. With the beat of your meter I could picture the dancing also made me think of the night before Christmas with the same beat although no topic connection for sure.

Good rhyme with routine and and scream as well as labs and and slabs. A great presentation visually and creative with the subject of the contest. You are truly one of the talents on fs. Best of luck. Joyce

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thanks a bunch, jshep, and I tried to keep it lighthearted for this particular contest for a change, LOL. It isn't doing too well in the voting booths right now, but it is still pretty early in the game.

I appreciate the kind and encouraging review, as well as the gift of six stars.

Much obliged, my friend. :}

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

I just love your sense of humor Dean. Still laughing. Very creative and clever marking the season. Great Anapestic meter and rhyming couplets. Good internal rhyme with breaking and smashing. Nice alliteration with cadavers can't.
A fun read and good luck in the contest.

Janet

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, Janet, and sorry about the delayed reply. We just finished up our Halloween charity haunt, so it's been pretty crazy here the past month.

While the poem isn't doing all that well in the contest booth right now, I appreciate your kind comments and exceptional rating all the more.

Thanks again! :}

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Nicely done seasonal poem. Very Halloweeny (if that's a word). It is very amusing. Maybe he should of changed his job before it got to him.

Good luck in the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

Dean Kuch,

I enjoyed this poem very much. Reading it was a pleasure. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out. Chosen explanations are made very clear and descriptive. Exceptional.

There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

Comment from zanya

Exceptional

Some 'serious fun' celebrated here with a nagging question at its heart - an absolute joy to read and raises a very big chuckle LOL

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thanks so much, zanya, and sorry about the delayed reply. We just finished up our Halloween charity haunt, so it's been pretty crazy here the past month.

While the poem isn't doing all that well in the contest booth right now, I appreciate your kind comments and exceptional rating all the more.

Thanks again! :}

Comment from PoeticXscape

Excellent

Being a huge Michael Jackson fan three guesses what came to mind when I read this lol. It was easy to envision and I liked how each rhyme. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014