Abra Cadaver
Who needs Dancing with the Stars?141 total reviews
Comment from royowen
A great poem. Hilarious to the max, Dean, I like the idea of dancing corpses everywhere no wonder the mortician was committed to a term in mental place, well written in even rhyming, rhythmic poem, great language, with all the the right stresses and clever composition, well done, Dean, I enjoyed it! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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A great poem. Hilarious to the max, Dean, I like the idea of dancing corpses everywhere no wonder the mortician was committed to a term in mental place, well written in even rhyming, rhythmic poem, great language, with all the the right stresses and clever composition, well done, Dean, I enjoyed it! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Roy, and I'm very pleased to know that you enjoyed it. :}
Comment from Andrewajgblue
This was a great poem I loved your ryhme very much and it really made me smile, great for Halloween, I loved " postmortem prancing" really well done
Andrew
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This was a great poem I loved your ryhme very much and it really made me smile, great for Halloween, I loved " postmortem prancing" really well done
Andrew
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, dean, very creative and the author notes are what I really enjoyed. that's a wonderful story. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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this is an excellent write, dean, very creative and the author notes are what I really enjoyed. that's a wonderful story. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much for the exceptional rating and thoughtful comments, sweetwoodjax. I'm very happy that you enjoyed the poem.
Have yourself a great weekend, ya hear? :}
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Dean - Great poem and really amusing. Good entry for the contest in what, to me, is perfect anapestic tetrameter. I stumbled a bit in the second stanza - I lost the rhythm but it was, I thinki, the way I was reading it. What a good story in your author notes. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hi Dean - Great poem and really amusing. Good entry for the contest in what, to me, is perfect anapestic tetrameter. I stumbled a bit in the second stanza - I lost the rhythm but it was, I thinki, the way I was reading it. What a good story in your author notes. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Another attention grabbing poem. Good aabb rhymes and rhythm
Eerie as usual with good visuals.
Thanks for those notes
Good luck in the contest
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Another attention grabbing poem. Good aabb rhymes and rhythm
Eerie as usual with good visuals.
Thanks for those notes
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from Linda Engel
Creepy and fun as usual. Love the notes and I can just imagine the room where Sparky was being fixed. Clowns are scary things and I couldn't be in a room with 300 of them. Great graphics and excellent rhyme. I know this is your favorite time of the year.
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Creepy and fun as usual. Love the notes and I can just imagine the room where Sparky was being fixed. Clowns are scary things and I couldn't be in a room with 300 of them. Great graphics and excellent rhyme. I know this is your favorite time of the year.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Dancing cadavers, their glee hitting doc in the face like sprays of seltzer water. Your author notes- such an awesome launching pad. I really think you need to write a longer piece not restricted in length by a contest, and really bring in the clowns. A coffin that acts like a clown car, etc. Speaking of clowns, move over Pennywise. Tune in to American Horror Story: Freak Show for the new creepiest clown.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Dancing cadavers, their glee hitting doc in the face like sprays of seltzer water. Your author notes- such an awesome launching pad. I really think you need to write a longer piece not restricted in length by a contest, and really bring in the clowns. A coffin that acts like a clown car, etc. Speaking of clowns, move over Pennywise. Tune in to American Horror Story: Freak Show for the new creepiest clown.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Oh yeah, that is one freaky show, Ed. One of my personal faves, for obvious reasons, LOL.
As for a longer piece based on this premise, I'll see what I can do. That strange but true tale is what brought about the inspiration for the poem.
Thanks for the review, my friend! :}
Comment from livelylinda
Author: unique, clever, fresh (so to speak) poem. It reminds me that there are clowns everywhere! One line didn't seem right, though. You said that the frightened doctor was screaming in fear and scratching his head at the same time . . . I can picture him doing one or the other, screaming in fear or scratching his head in pondering the situation, but not both at the same time. Just a thought. The entire clown funeral of 1977 was quite a side story. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Author: unique, clever, fresh (so to speak) poem. It reminds me that there are clowns everywhere! One line didn't seem right, though. You said that the frightened doctor was screaming in fear and scratching his head at the same time . . . I can picture him doing one or the other, screaming in fear or scratching his head in pondering the situation, but not both at the same time. Just a thought. The entire clown funeral of 1977 was quite a side story. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thanks very much, Linda, and I'll see what I can do about that line. Maybe replace "scratching" with "clasping"?
Anyhow, I'll do what I can, and I really appreciate you sharing your thoughts and opinions with me on the poem.
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Clasping would work better . . . yes, I like it! And, so goes another opinion . . .LOL Linda
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Done, and done, Linda. Along with a few other subtle changes, LOL.
Thanks again! :}
Comment from dennis0530
Very informative and interesting Author Notes. Yes, maybe definitely strange. But with Sparky's occupation as a clown, it must have been a final muscular setting at the time of his death. Much like in the practice of securing the jaw of the dead to prevent it from dropping.
The poem itself is a mix of the funny and the spooky. With an experience like this, anybody's mind will just go wacky.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Very informative and interesting Author Notes. Yes, maybe definitely strange. But with Sparky's occupation as a clown, it must have been a final muscular setting at the time of his death. Much like in the practice of securing the jaw of the dead to prevent it from dropping.
The poem itself is a mix of the funny and the spooky. With an experience like this, anybody's mind will just go wacky.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Dennis. I guess Tonnel was creeped out after the whole experienced. After twenty-seven years on staff at Montgomery Mortuary, he resigned and took an early retirement two weeks after Sparky's burial.
Sometimes, truth is stranger than fiction!
Thanks so much for the fine review, my friend. :}
Comment from NurseBarb
Yes, I would imagine the Dr. was believed to be out of his mind by the hospital staff. A very entertaining poem, Dean. As always, fun to read. Kind of creepy, the smile was on his face, when it was not there before. Thank you for sharing and good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Yes, I would imagine the Dr. was believed to be out of his mind by the hospital staff. A very entertaining poem, Dean. As always, fun to read. Kind of creepy, the smile was on his face, when it was not there before. Thank you for sharing and good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thanks, NurseBarb. I appreciate the review, my friend.
