Abra Cadaver
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Comment from Acquired Taste
Sounds like he needs a room at Danforth! Love this - great rhyming and perfect Halloween material for the little ones...ha, ha, ha. Just read it to them and push their little buns out the front door. LOL Good one Dean.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Sounds like he needs a room at Danforth! Love this - great rhyming and perfect Halloween material for the little ones...ha, ha, ha. Just read it to them and push their little buns out the front door. LOL Good one Dean.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Jean, and I had Danforth in mind as I wrote this. I wonder if Danforth has a morgue? Being a mental institution, it would certainly have to, right? Oh boy, how would you like to be a fly on the wall in that place, LOL?
Thanks so much again! :}
Comment from Glasstruth
LOL. Those corpses have a sense of humor. This kept my interest in the way you tell a story in rhyme. A great write for Halloween. Thanks for sharing. Les
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LOL. Those corpses have a sense of humor. This kept my interest in the way you tell a story in rhyme. A great write for Halloween. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from Donya Quijote
I enjoyed this amusing tale from the crypt. You made me laugh at the poor doctors demise. The first stanza conjured up the Monster Mash, just you should know. Clever presentation. A pleasing read indeed...
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I enjoyed this amusing tale from the crypt. You made me laugh at the poor doctors demise. The first stanza conjured up the Monster Mash, just you should know. Clever presentation. A pleasing read indeed...
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from DR DIP
Amazing presentation! Great play on a magician's exclamation ABRA CADABRA to ABRA CADAVER
Interesting proximate rhyme in verses 2 and 3 but very effective,
You definitely have the whole package Deano!.....and your poems are good as well!
as always
dip
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Amazing presentation! Great play on a magician's exclamation ABRA CADABRA to ABRA CADAVER
Interesting proximate rhyme in verses 2 and 3 but very effective,
You definitely have the whole package Deano!.....and your poems are good as well!
as always
dip
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from mfowler
This is a really entertaining ditty in your usual ghoulish vein. I loved the simplicity of this theme as a mortician is driven batty by some fun loving cadavers. The verse flows smoother than embalming oil and the whole scene is cackle worthy. The title is precious and deserves to win all by itself. Excellent work, dean.
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This is a really entertaining ditty in your usual ghoulish vein. I loved the simplicity of this theme as a mortician is driven batty by some fun loving cadavers. The verse flows smoother than embalming oil and the whole scene is cackle worthy. The title is precious and deserves to win all by itself. Excellent work, dean.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from krys123
Dean;
I enjoyed reading your poem written in anapestic tetrameter that make your rhythm flow so smoothly throughout your writing. Also, throughout your writing, your requirements are met perfectly. Even your rhyming, which was neither forced nor labored, helped with the rhythmic flow.
Your imagery was exclusively descriptive and remarkably expressive in this writing: "Soon after the corpses were back under their seats; the dark flew right out of the door and into the streets." And no wonder the police picked him up for probably his explanation was totally crazy.
Thanks for writing and sharing dancing good luck in the contest for this is an excellent writing an entry.
Alex
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Dean;
I enjoyed reading your poem written in anapestic tetrameter that make your rhythm flow so smoothly throughout your writing. Also, throughout your writing, your requirements are met perfectly. Even your rhyming, which was neither forced nor labored, helped with the rhythmic flow.
Your imagery was exclusively descriptive and remarkably expressive in this writing: "Soon after the corpses were back under their seats; the dark flew right out of the door and into the streets." And no wonder the police picked him up for probably his explanation was totally crazy.
Thanks for writing and sharing dancing good luck in the contest for this is an excellent writing an entry.
Alex
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from James Dooney
This is a pretty cool one and it reminds me of the fina breath we take before we fully expire ! Well done on your playful description here !
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This is a pretty cool one and it reminds me of the fina breath we take before we fully expire ! Well done on your playful description here !
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from nancyjam
Love the humor in this well
crafted Anapest poem.
Great visuals through descriptive images.
Terrific rhyming and a wonderful artistic presentation.
Best of luck in the contest, Dean. Nancy
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Love the humor in this well
crafted Anapest poem.
Great visuals through descriptive images.
Terrific rhyming and a wonderful artistic presentation.
Best of luck in the contest, Dean. Nancy
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from c_lucas
I wondering if it was the tinkling of the bells cause his problem. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
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I wondering if it was the tinkling of the bells cause his problem. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from country ranch writer
SOME TIMES WHEN YOU GET SO TIED UP IN YOUR WORK IT SEEMS YOU ARE GOING OUT OF YOUR MIND BECAUSE TIME KEPT ON WHILE YOU WERE PREOCCUPIED
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SOME TIMES WHEN YOU GET SO TIED UP IN YOUR WORK IT SEEMS YOU ARE GOING OUT OF YOUR MIND BECAUSE TIME KEPT ON WHILE YOU WERE PREOCCUPIED
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
