Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

This is funny stuff, but I must tell you I almost didn't get it. I went away from it and it popped up again, so I thought I'd give it another chance. I didn't see the connection for Hi Jack. I wonder if I would have made the connection better if in the line above, you'd have said, "Just the Captain Jack came down the aisle"? Not even a suggestion; I was just wondering out loud.

It is very good, your sonnet and humorous sonnets I would think are a rarity.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014

Thanks, Jay. Just a bit of fun here.

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

Clever, concise and funny. An enjoyable verse. Descriptive with few
words. thank you for sharing this humorous write.
Smiles to you, Robin :)

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014

Thanks, Robin.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Tony,

Time, travel, bargain iPhone -- can they all coexist? NOPE, I don't think so.

This is a fun read. Love the artwork. Best of luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014

Thanks, Jax. Life was much simpler before mobile phones and flying.

Comment from flamingstar

Excellent

Ha! very funny. I guess you have to be very careful what you say nowadays on a plane. And don't joke with the pilot. A clever and engaging entry!

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 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014

Thanks, Flamingstar.