Time Travel
Contest Entry: Sonnet about 'Time'44 total reviews
Comment from Just2Write
What a cute spoof about crossing the international date line with an iPhone, that doesn't have GPS. Clever word play on Hi Jack and hijack. Funny and fun - definitely an up-tempo Sonnet.
Rose.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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What a cute spoof about crossing the international date line with an iPhone, that doesn't have GPS. Clever word play on Hi Jack and hijack. Funny and fun - definitely an up-tempo Sonnet.
Rose.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Many thanks for your review, Rose
Comment from drivenbackward
A very different take on this contest and the concept of time. I greatly appreciated the originality. A fun read the whole way through.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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A very different take on this contest and the concept of time. I greatly appreciated the originality. A fun read the whole way through.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Many thanks for your review, drivenbackward
Comment from TAB_that's me
That would be a bit eerie feeling to go back in time. Wonderful sonnet form and great entry for the prompt - good luck:)
Teresa
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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That would be a bit eerie feeling to go back in time. Wonderful sonnet form and great entry for the prompt - good luck:)
Teresa
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Many thanks for your review, Teresa
Comment from Treischel
A funny little story with an electronic twist. A silly sonnet that, nevertheless is very well done. I had no idea what IDL was, so Greatful for your author's notes.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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A funny little story with an electronic twist. A silly sonnet that, nevertheless is very well done. I had no idea what IDL was, so Greatful for your author's notes.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Many thanks for your review, Tom
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Tony - This is a good and amusing entry for the contest. Written in good English Sonnet form - you created a problem and resolved it in the end. Mind you buying something in Hong Kong you were probably feeling slightly apprehensive to start with. On holiday once I saw what was supposed to be Reebok trainers and they were Reedok and Tommy Hilfiger was shown as Hilfinger. You would think these crooks would get it right. I've seen people buying so called Omega watches for a fiver in places like Tunisia. Good Luck with your iphone, LOL. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Hi Tony - This is a good and amusing entry for the contest. Written in good English Sonnet form - you created a problem and resolved it in the end. Mind you buying something in Hong Kong you were probably feeling slightly apprehensive to start with. On holiday once I saw what was supposed to be Reebok trainers and they were Reedok and Tommy Hilfiger was shown as Hilfinger. You would think these crooks would get it right. I've seen people buying so called Omega watches for a fiver in places like Tunisia. Good Luck with your iphone, LOL. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Many thanks for your review, Dorothy
Comment from kiwijenny
Ha ha ha in have crossed that line many a time. And figured I might never age if I flew on my birthday and kept missing it but I like cake and candles too much. I like this ..time prompt. This was funny
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Ha ha ha in have crossed that line many a time. And figured I might never age if I flew on my birthday and kept missing it but I like cake and candles too much. I like this ..time prompt. This was funny
God bless
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Many thanks for your review, Jenny
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming and proximate rhyme in good English sonnet format
I like your fun story line in this offbeat take on the contest prompt :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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solid rhyming and proximate rhyme in good English sonnet format
I like your fun story line in this offbeat take on the contest prompt :-) Brooke
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Many thanks for your review, Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Good sonnet form. Mechanics are good, and I laughed at the cleverness. S1L4 and S2L1 co-join but make an awkward sentence. Best of luck. Kenny
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Good sonnet form. Mechanics are good, and I laughed at the cleverness. S1L4 and S2L1 co-join but make an awkward sentence. Best of luck. Kenny
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Kenny. That bothered me too. I've now amended it so that the two quatrains are self-contained.
Comment from Nosha17
One has to keep with it on those long haul flights or one can land in trouble. I liked the humour and light-hearted approach to time, conveyed in your message. Those contraptions (my mother would call anything novel!) are sent to try us. Good use of rhymes and humour. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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One has to keep with it on those long haul flights or one can land in trouble. I liked the humour and light-hearted approach to time, conveyed in your message. Those contraptions (my mother would call anything novel!) are sent to try us. Good use of rhymes and humour. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Faye. Just a bit of nonsense to lighten the contest!
Comment from Ekim777
The sonnet is the classic verse form of love. I don't know if it is suited for humor/. Don't misunderstand me, humor is a fine yardstick to measure any poetry. Anyway your piece might be a little predictable half way through. You are nifty with the rhyme scheme. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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The sonnet is the classic verse form of love. I don't know if it is suited for humor/. Don't misunderstand me, humor is a fine yardstick to measure any poetry. Anyway your piece might be a little predictable half way through. You are nifty with the rhyme scheme. -Ekim777
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Ekim. Just a bit of nonsense to lighten the contest!
