Monster Who Moved to My Neighborhood
a poem for Nora and Sawyer140 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
The ntire poem reminded me of Calvin and Hobbs!What a delightful costume and the theme is so suited for Halloween. I loved the lines 'a ghoul's not in business to help me sleep'/if I want a nap I can count some sheep'-so cute!
Brooke I would like to share the joyful news with you -My granddaughter Leya was born on Ocotber 23rd, in Singapore.It was a happy coincidence that she was born on our "Festival Of Light, Diwali".It was a crazy couple of weeks for me and I missed reading your posts.I am trying to catch up .I enjoyed your "ten HungryVultures' and'The stars shone' very much.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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The ntire poem reminded me of Calvin and Hobbs!What a delightful costume and the theme is so suited for Halloween. I loved the lines 'a ghoul's not in business to help me sleep'/if I want a nap I can count some sheep'-so cute!
Brooke I would like to share the joyful news with you -My granddaughter Leya was born on Ocotber 23rd, in Singapore.It was a happy coincidence that she was born on our "Festival Of Light, Diwali".It was a crazy couple of weeks for me and I missed reading your posts.I am trying to catch up .I enjoyed your "ten HungryVultures' and'The stars shone' very much.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Sanku, thank you so very much for your generous and gracious review :-) Congratulations on Leya's birth!!! Smiles all around :-) Brooke
Comment from PatVallesMangan
This is such a delightful poem! Yes, kids want scary stuff! ;) As a Mom and a retired teacher, I did everything to scare them silly at Halloween and when they needed it anytime ;) The picture is so cute and yes, he wants scary! "He has obligations to growl and glare" ... I just loved that! It's in the monsters job description! The poem is filled with great imagery and marvelous alliteration which always makes my day! Great work and such a cute little boy Sawyer is! Congrats on this gem!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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This is such a delightful poem! Yes, kids want scary stuff! ;) As a Mom and a retired teacher, I did everything to scare them silly at Halloween and when they needed it anytime ;) The picture is so cute and yes, he wants scary! "He has obligations to growl and glare" ... I just loved that! It's in the monsters job description! The poem is filled with great imagery and marvelous alliteration which always makes my day! Great work and such a cute little boy Sawyer is! Congrats on this gem!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Pat - moms and teachers understand! :-) Brooke
Comment from Ninap2
This is exceptional in my opinion! I like how you brought in the picture of the Sawyer in his "Mike" outfit. So many clever ideas from you!I like how you stated that he has an "obligation" to be scary. Big fan. -Nina
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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This is exceptional in my opinion! I like how you brought in the picture of the Sawyer in his "Mike" outfit. So many clever ideas from you!I like how you stated that he has an "obligation" to be scary. Big fan. -Nina
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Nina :-) Brooke
Comment from justjo66
This is darling. Delightful poem and picture. Great rhyming and fun to read. This poem brought back memories of my own five children and how much they loved to dress up at Halloween.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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This is darling. Delightful poem and picture. Great rhyming and fun to read. This poem brought back memories of my own five children and how much they loved to dress up at Halloween.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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justjo, thanks so very much for your generous and warm response to this poem. Those are great memories, aren't they? Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Next weekend, isn't it? I already have tins of goodies to give away, some of the costumes are really way out scary! LOL. I have to agree with you, Brooke, your grandson does not look in the least with grumpy scary! He does look as if a cuddle would do nicely, thank you very much! Another great poem that Sawyer will have a laugh about in years to come. :) Sandra xsx
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Next weekend, isn't it? I already have tins of goodies to give away, some of the costumes are really way out scary! LOL. I have to agree with you, Brooke, your grandson does not look in the least with grumpy scary! He does look as if a cuddle would do nicely, thank you very much! Another great poem that Sawyer will have a laugh about in years to come. :) Sandra xsx
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Sandra - yep, the last day in October, which makes it easy to remember - this year it is on a Friday - always nice when it doesn't fall on a school night. He does scary really well if you try to get him to use a public potty. LOL :-) Brooke
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LOL, Brooke, he is just like my Eric, he will not, even with a bit of bribery use the public toilets, he would rather hold on. Aren't they funny! :)
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My older sister has informed me that I was like that - I'd hold it in all day if I had to, much to the chagrin of our mother. LOL
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I just cannot picture you like that! LOL, but I must say, when I enter some of these public places, I do make myself hold on. It makes me wonder what some people are like in their own homes. x
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Sawyer is more than happy to use his own home's potty - he has a little hierarchy. He is also content to use the potty anywhere there is a single bathroom, not one with stalls. The ones with the stalls are the ones most likely to have the automatic flushers and the loud, powerfully sucking flushers. His mother has sat on several of the loud, sucking kind to show him she comes to no harm, but he's having none of it. LOL
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I can quite understand how he would be worried about that, I have never heard of toilets like that. That did try putting single cubicles in the high streets that self flushed, but sometimes they flushed before you had finished, now that was NOT nice! LOL, they took them away in the end, because people wouldn't use them. Tell Sawyer, I am on his side! LOL.
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those kinds of toilets are in all the malls and airports and many office buildings. They are supposed to flush automatically when you stand up, but they go off the second you shift your weight, including when 30 pound Sawyer shifts his weight - so there this tiny person sits when he feels a whoosh of water and hears what is to him a deafening sound. LOL His mom tries to take him to a public toilet and he starts chanting, too loud , too loud ;-)
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They haven't got around to those in England, yet! But we will soon, we do copy you a lot, I will just have to warn Eric! LOL!
Comment from Ekim777
I can't imagine any kid wanting to be scared by his monsters. I can't imagine any adult wanting to be plagued by the ghosts that reside behind his skull. I can imagine everybody hoping to discover some humanity in any kind of monster. And what if the monster displays some warmth, would we not respond in kind? After all everyone wants to be loved. I think I have been inspired to write a poem; something like; "An Ode to a Monster". Anyway I have never understood the attraction of Halloween. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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I can't imagine any kid wanting to be scared by his monsters. I can't imagine any adult wanting to be plagued by the ghosts that reside behind his skull. I can imagine everybody hoping to discover some humanity in any kind of monster. And what if the monster displays some warmth, would we not respond in kind? After all everyone wants to be loved. I think I have been inspired to write a poem; something like; "An Ode to a Monster". Anyway I have never understood the attraction of Halloween. -Ekim777
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Kids LOVE haunted houses and scary monsters at Halloween. An entire industry is built around it. It's like roller coasters. Nobody wants to ride a smooth, tame roller coaster. They expect to be, demand to be scared. Thanks for reviewing, Ekim :-) Brooke
Comment from sebe
This is a diverse poem. That is why people like it. They say that I have to criticize all the poems I read. So hear it comes. now I am listening Johnny Cashes version of hurt. It is a deep song. But I can only see a surface in your poem. I can not feel it. But it has to be a good poem because everybody likes it.
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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This is a diverse poem. That is why people like it. They say that I have to criticize all the poems I read. So hear it comes. now I am listening Johnny Cashes version of hurt. It is a deep song. But I can only see a surface in your poem. I can not feel it. But it has to be a good poem because everybody likes it.
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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sebe, you are entitled to your opinion. I'm hardly shocked you did not feel deep emotion from a humorous children's Halloween poem since that is not the purpose of a humorous children's Halloween poem. I thank you for taking the time to comment. Brooke
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you know I take poems very seriously. but now when I think of the poem again it laughs at death. I don't know if my notion is right. it is always healty to laugh at death but does anybody else see it like that
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It's just about someone who thinks monsters ought to be scary and not cute, my friend.
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that is a good attitude. thank for listening to my opinion,
Comment from The Death
Hi Brooke,
This is such a delightful, poem! I like your creative take on the theme.
Excellent use of alliteration throughout the poem.
A monster who moved to my neighborhood
refuses to act like a monster should.
It sounds lovely when read aloud. Love those echoes of O letter in these two lines.
Nice use of short I assonance here, along with consonance of N:
Instead he insists on that goofy grin -
no friendlier monster has ever been,
This made me chuckle:
a ghoul's not in business to help me sleep -
if I want a nap I can count some sheep
LOL! It's a very delightful Halloween-inspired poem. :)
A ghoul ought to partner with hairy bugs,
not comfort the neighbors in need of hugs -
Is it supposed to be 'comforts'? Fun rhyming of 'hugs' and 'bugs'.
The ending is fine, too.
Anupam
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke,
This is such a delightful, poem! I like your creative take on the theme.
Excellent use of alliteration throughout the poem.
A monster who moved to my neighborhood
refuses to act like a monster should.
It sounds lovely when read aloud. Love those echoes of O letter in these two lines.
Nice use of short I assonance here, along with consonance of N:
Instead he insists on that goofy grin -
no friendlier monster has ever been,
This made me chuckle:
a ghoul's not in business to help me sleep -
if I want a nap I can count some sheep
LOL! It's a very delightful Halloween-inspired poem. :)
A ghoul ought to partner with hairy bugs,
not comfort the neighbors in need of hugs -
Is it supposed to be 'comforts'? Fun rhyming of 'hugs' and 'bugs'.
The ending is fine, too.
Anupam
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Anupam :-)No, it is supposed to be comfort - a ghoul is supposed to partner, not comfort Brooke
Comment from Andrewajgblue
This is such a cute poem, full of warmth and love, it made me feel all the childhood innocence connected to Halloween, I found it really endearing, we'll done,
Andrew
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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This is such a cute poem, full of warmth and love, it made me feel all the childhood innocence connected to Halloween, I found it really endearing, we'll done,
Andrew
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Andrew, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
I think this is a darling picture of Sawyer. His costume is really cute and his too. The poem you wrote about him is also very nice. I had fun reading it.
Kat
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I think this is a darling picture of Sawyer. His costume is really cute and his too. The poem you wrote about him is also very nice. I had fun reading it.
Kat
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Kat - he is a cutie pie, isn't he? :-) Brooke
