Monster Who Moved to My Neighborhood
a poem for Nora and Sawyer140 total reviews
Comment from trimple
LOL
What a fabulous poem about this lovable monster in the neighbourhood.
The love you display toward Sawyer through this poem is crystal clear.
Wonderful humor Brooke.
kind regards
trimple :)
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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LOL
What a fabulous poem about this lovable monster in the neighbourhood.
The love you display toward Sawyer through this poem is crystal clear.
Wonderful humor Brooke.
kind regards
trimple :)
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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trimple, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
Living with my lively grandsons in a confined area in New York, although a generous sized apartment their is 1/4 acre back yard to play in like children grew up in. So sometimes I am amazed at the patience of my daughter and hubby, to cope with three energetic little boys, but it's so wonderful being with them I cherish the moments! It just reminded me of your wonderful poem devoted to this wonderful monster living in your grandson's neighbourhood, in the guise of your grandson! Beautifully composed, even rhythmic meter, with great aabb rhyming, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Living with my lively grandsons in a confined area in New York, although a generous sized apartment their is 1/4 acre back yard to play in like children grew up in. So sometimes I am amazed at the patience of my daughter and hubby, to cope with three energetic little boys, but it's so wonderful being with them I cherish the moments! It just reminded me of your wonderful poem devoted to this wonderful monster living in your grandson's neighbourhood, in the guise of your grandson! Beautifully composed, even rhythmic meter, with great aabb rhyming, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Roy, thank you so much - living with your grandsons, now that is the life :-) Brooke
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You better believe it.
Comment from acerisestory
Oh, that Sawyer! Such a nice monster, he is. Great picture, by the way. I swear, he's growing up right before our eyes!
I love the lines: "He has obligations to growl and glare -
you'd think he'd be happy to work that stare." Love it!
Great rhyming and rhythm, Brooke! Love the story. Thanks for sharing. Alana
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Oh, that Sawyer! Such a nice monster, he is. Great picture, by the way. I swear, he's growing up right before our eyes!
I love the lines: "He has obligations to growl and glare -
you'd think he'd be happy to work that stare." Love it!
Great rhyming and rhythm, Brooke! Love the story. Thanks for sharing. Alana
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Alana :-) Yep, I need to figure out how to slow down that growing stuff. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
Stunning colour presentation to match Sawyer's great fun outfit, Brooke.
As you say, what's the point in being a monster if you're not scary enough? :-)
Excellent alliteration and enjambment throughout.
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Stunning colour presentation to match Sawyer's great fun outfit, Brooke.
As you say, what's the point in being a monster if you're not scary enough? :-)
Excellent alliteration and enjambment throughout.
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Ray - Nora has been pestering Miranda to make her drawings that she does every day for Nora scarier and bloodier for the past week LOL Nora is a kid after my own heart :-) Brooke
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No probs, Brooke.
I've decided to keep my reviews of your excellent poems completely free of constructive critique in future, as I know that's what you prefer, and I think it's the best way to retain our friendship.
Compliments only from here on in. :-)
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Oh, my gosh! The picture is adorable! I love it! Great the way you did the black and green to match his costume! Absolutely adorable poem and picture package!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Oh, my gosh! The picture is adorable! I love it! Great the way you did the black and green to match his costume! Absolutely adorable poem and picture package!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Linda :-) He sure is a cutie, isn't he? :-) Brooke
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He sure is!!!!
Comment from DSMalott
So strong all around.
Strong rhyming scheme.
Strong straight forward quatrain structure.
Strong contrast in theme between what is normal about Halloween and what is abnormal about your friendly little monster.
Enjoyable to read.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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So strong all around.
Strong rhyming scheme.
Strong straight forward quatrain structure.
Strong contrast in theme between what is normal about Halloween and what is abnormal about your friendly little monster.
Enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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DS, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
I can't even imagine Sawyer being "grim" or "grimacing"
Look at that face! Darling.
Excellent word choice for this Halloween poem about a
kind monster who is just not into scaring people.
Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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I can't even imagine Sawyer being "grim" or "grimacing"
Look at that face! Darling.
Excellent word choice for this Halloween poem about a
kind monster who is just not into scaring people.
Nancy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
Ha ha ha...what a cut pic to complement you adorable theme. Made me smile. Great rhymes, good flow. Favorite lines:
A ghoul ought to partner with hairy bugs,
not comfort the neighbors in need of hugs -
Well voiced:
No smile puts the "happy" in Halloween,
a time meant for grimacing, grim and mean -
ha ha!
Lots of fine alliteration and other poetic devices.
good work, dear. Happy Halloween to you and Sawyer too. Please tell him I think he makes a great kind monster...
Smiles,
rd
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Ha ha ha...what a cut pic to complement you adorable theme. Made me smile. Great rhymes, good flow. Favorite lines:
A ghoul ought to partner with hairy bugs,
not comfort the neighbors in need of hugs -
Well voiced:
No smile puts the "happy" in Halloween,
a time meant for grimacing, grim and mean -
ha ha!
Lots of fine alliteration and other poetic devices.
good work, dear. Happy Halloween to you and Sawyer too. Please tell him I think he makes a great kind monster...
Smiles,
rd
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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thanks so much - Nora always asks Miranda to draw pictures for her, and the last few days she wants them scarier and gorier for the holiday - Miranda keeps adding fangs and blood and other gory stuff by request LOL :-) Brooke
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Hee hee! :-))
Comment from Donya Quijote
Sweet adorable fun. Is the monster a monster at all? Tone is pleading as if the writer really does long for a good scare.
Favorite stanza:
No smile puts the "happy" in Halloween,
a time meant for grimacing, grim and mean -
a ghoul's not in business to help me sleep -
if I want a nap I can count some sheep!
Made me roar with laughter the bit about a nap and counting sheep.
Nice bouncing this fluid piece.
Such Halloween fun!!!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Sweet adorable fun. Is the monster a monster at all? Tone is pleading as if the writer really does long for a good scare.
Favorite stanza:
No smile puts the "happy" in Halloween,
a time meant for grimacing, grim and mean -
a ghoul's not in business to help me sleep -
if I want a nap I can count some sheep!
Made me roar with laughter the bit about a nap and counting sheep.
Nice bouncing this fluid piece.
Such Halloween fun!!!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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he's dressed up as Mike Wazowski from Monsters, Inc - so yep, kind of like Casper the friendly ghost. Thanks so very much, Donya, rot your generous stars :-) Brooke
Comment from Deniz22
I love it! I think its been a while since Sawyer was the main star ion one of your poems but this makes up for it. Would that all "monsters" were Sawyers! Thanks for this, Dennis
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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I love it! I think its been a while since Sawyer was the main star ion one of your poems but this makes up for it. Would that all "monsters" were Sawyers! Thanks for this, Dennis
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Dennis :-) Brooke
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