The Raiment of Autumn
a poem in anapestic meter117 total reviews
Comment from Benny Beeharry
There is so much feeling here and nostalgia for the eventual departure of the autumn's colours, specially when the dark cold winter has the next hand.
I like the tone and the idea of freeze ..inevitability at the back.
Well done
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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There is so much feeling here and nostalgia for the eventual departure of the autumn's colours, specially when the dark cold winter has the next hand.
I like the tone and the idea of freeze ..inevitability at the back.
Well done
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Benny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Eternal Muse
Brooke, this is an enjoyable piece, but I thought the rules state Anapest meter are two unstressed syllables, followed by a stressed one. Yours have a stress on the second syllable. Maybe I am missing something.
Very much enjoyed your autumn turning to winter imagery.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Brooke, this is an enjoyable piece, but I thought the rules state Anapest meter are two unstressed syllables, followed by a stressed one. Yours have a stress on the second syllable. Maybe I am missing something.
Very much enjoyed your autumn turning to winter imagery.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Yelena, thank you so much :-) Take a look at Rose's detailed directions for anapestic meter with a catalexis. These contest directions explain this 11 syllable variation on the meter that I have employed, and Rose herself read the poem and gave it a 6, stating that I used that contest-approved variation perfectly :-) Brooke
Comment from Joe_P
This is a lovely poem. I like how you used expressive colors. Mostly, I also like how you compared the fall of leaves to deraiment. (Good use of synonyms, too.)
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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This is a lovely poem. I like how you used expressive colors. Mostly, I also like how you compared the fall of leaves to deraiment. (Good use of synonyms, too.)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Joe, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
Not being fond of Winter, brings the Lil' Abner song to mind, "Put Them Back the Way They Were." This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Not being fond of Winter, brings the Lil' Abner song to mind, "Put Them Back the Way They Were." This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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thank you, Charlie, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from chasennov
a poem in anapestic meter 'The Raiment of Autumn.' This is a cold reminder what you are going to have top go through soon. We've just come out of our winter, but a more pleasant Autumn. Are we looking forward to Spring and Summer. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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a poem in anapestic meter 'The Raiment of Autumn.' This is a cold reminder what you are going to have top go through soon. We've just come out of our winter, but a more pleasant Autumn. Are we looking forward to Spring and Summer. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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thanks so much, chasennov :-) Brooke
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It is always my pleasure, Brooke.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Another impressive write, Brooke..
and you know how I love to read
about Nature, whatever the season.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Another impressive write, Brooke..
and you know how I love to read
about Nature, whatever the season.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Margaret, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This one is a bit different than others I've read of yours. The personification of "she" in this one is glorious. Love trees anyway so this one was such a treat to read! xoxo d
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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This one is a bit different than others I've read of yours. The personification of "she" in this one is glorious. Love trees anyway so this one was such a treat to read! xoxo d
Comment Written 23-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Deborah :-) Brooke
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A lovely visualization of that last leaf blowing in the wind as the season
advances into the cold and bleak winter weather. I happen to really
love winter, (I know, everyone thinks I'm crazy) A very enjoyable read.
Smiles, Robin :)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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A lovely visualization of that last leaf blowing in the wind as the season
advances into the cold and bleak winter weather. I happen to really
love winter, (I know, everyone thinks I'm crazy) A very enjoyable read.
Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Robin - I detest winter - the cold, the dangerous and slippery snow and ice, the power outages, the car accidents, the getting stuck inside for days, sometimes weeks on end - last year I couldn't leave my apartment for three weeks. I suppose someone has to love the season, but it ain't me. :-) Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
Wow! Anapestic meter to perfection Brooke. I've tried a few with little success. Excellent rhyming couplets. Very nice imagery throughout. Good use of alliteration with winds of winter, when winds and last leaf. I throughly enjoyed reading this one.
Janet
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Wow! Anapestic meter to perfection Brooke. I've tried a few with little success. Excellent rhyming couplets. Very nice imagery throughout. Good use of alliteration with winds of winter, when winds and last leaf. I throughly enjoyed reading this one.
Janet
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Janet, thank you for your thoughtful review and your generous six stars :_) Brooke
Comment from granny goes viral
Almost had me shivering in second verse. Yes, soon all the leaves will be gone, either blown away or up in smoke. The wonderful fall colors will fade to white.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Almost had me shivering in second verse. Yes, soon all the leaves will be gone, either blown away or up in smoke. The wonderful fall colors will fade to white.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Granny :-) Brooke
