Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

I know nothing about anapest tetrameter, Brooke, but I do believe your poem is a worthy lesson for me. We are beginning to wonder if stark winter will visit us this year in Colorado. This autumn has lasted a very long (and beautiful) time. Winter will be here soon enough, I am sure.

You've made wonderful use of alliteration. I also like the personification of autumn. I noticed in the first stanza that you've rhymed gone and warm and wondered if there might be a better word to use? You know better than I if this is okay.

Thanks for sharing yet another fabulous poem, Brooke. Best of luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014

Alana, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

The raiment of autumn, indeed again winter is not far of,I hope it will be a mild one,that's a very nice expressed poem,nice rhyming as always. I enjoyed reading it,God bless you.Hugs!lakeport.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2014

Erich, thank you so much :-) Brooke

reply by lakeport on 23-Oct-2014

you are very welcome.Hugs!lakeport.

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Exceptional

This has lovely, inventive personification of the seasons, Brooke. I'm guessing you'll be seeing the raiment of winter up there sooner than I'll see it down here in Texas. It is a gorgeous October day right now - sunny, shirt-sleeve weather and the gentlest of breezes. I like the nice flow of anapestic meter in the poem, and the well-chosen art by VMarguarite is beautiful, as always. Love, Jeanie

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014

Jeannie, thank you so very much :-) yeah - winter always pays us a visit sooner and lasts longer and is a much worse guest LOL :-) Brooke

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is a very apt and fitting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. Autumn us certainly upon us and winter is on the way indeed. I felt the first hint of an icy blast today.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Tomes, thanks so much :-) Brooke

reply by Tomes Johnston on 22-Oct-2014

My pleasure

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Great job, Brooke. I enjoyed reading about The Raiment of Autumn. The ABCB rhyme scheme works well and the imagery of winds of winter stripping her bare and stealing the last leaf was strong as well. 8-)

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

thanks so much, boxergirl :-)

Comment from mshirachot

Exceptional

Hello Brooke! This contest entry had me "working" to review...which is good since "working" = learning.

I had to go back a few times to the contest rules when I realized that your syllable count is eleven per line. That took me a bit to re-think the whole da, da, dum routine.

So, I finally came to the conclusion that you aced this colorful poem. Best wishes with contest entry. I am glad there is still vivid colors on the trees!

Blessings!
Marsha

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

thanks so much, marsha - yes, the eleven line variant is perfectly acceptable in anapestic meter and specifically in this contest :-)

Comment from jackpeg

Excellent

Autumn and winter are beautiful we think out here, because we don't have them. Beautiful verse, Brooke. How beautiful those bare trees are when they first begin to regain their foliage. Palm trees...they never change. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014

John, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from PatVallesMangan

Excellent

This type of poem is very interesting to me. It is the first time I have come upon it. The rhyme and rhythm work nicely together and the author uses precise words to create a vivid picture of the season's change. Well done! It might be helpful to tell as an Author's Note exactly what this type of poem entails.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

thanks so much - it is in a contest, so you can read the directions there. The contest forbids the use of any author notes :-) Brooke

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

I always dread the approaching winter. The older I get, the more I dread it. Things look bleak when winter steals the last of the colorful leaves. Excellent ABAB rhyme, and the flow is beautiful. The somber mood of the poem reflects the bare, stark winter with its chill. Lovely alliteration with winds of winter and savagely shed. I love your word choices throughout, especially raiment. judi

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

thank you so much, judi :-) Brooke

reply by judiverse on 21-Oct-2014

You're very welcome. Certainly reminded me of how I feel about winter. judi

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

I loved the meter and message. I thought the picture was wrong for this poem. I believe you left out a word in the last line of the second verse, probably: (so) bold. Having said that, your clearly described beautifully the transition of the seasons.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thank you, Treischel. I tried to find a picture I was happier with but to no avail. Perhaps I will search again. I had so cruel at first while I was composing, but went with the two syllable pronunciation listed as the preferred spelling in some dictionaries because it did sound more impactful to me. Brooke