The Raiment of Autumn
a poem in anapestic meter117 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
Really god. It was a very adult feel to this. I liked the tragic emotion and the imagery of the leaves falling and the bare tree left to shiver in the winter air. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Really god. It was a very adult feel to this. I liked the tragic emotion and the imagery of the leaves falling and the bare tree left to shiver in the winter air. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from words
How utterly beautiful, Brooke. You are a true master of your art.
I knew that I would love it from its title.
I am in awe of your mastering of poetry's mechanics ... and beyond that, how you always manage such depth of content.
You are forever worth reading.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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How utterly beautiful, Brooke. You are a true master of your art.
I knew that I would love it from its title.
I am in awe of your mastering of poetry's mechanics ... and beyond that, how you always manage such depth of content.
You are forever worth reading.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Diane. This meter is a bitch to sustain through an entire poem :-) I appreciate your generosity after the blood, sweat and tears I poured into it. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
Now this is you. I thought the day would slip by before finding your post. Outside mulching my blackberries and fruit trees. Getting ready to see that last leaf fall. Well done as always. Winner I'm sure.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Now this is you. I thought the day would slip by before finding your post. Outside mulching my blackberries and fruit trees. Getting ready to see that last leaf fall. Well done as always. Winner I'm sure.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Ben - and I just posted another, one with a funny photo of Sawyer :-) Brooke
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I will most certainly read it. Love that Sawyer.
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely flowing poem about the changes of autumn to winter and how we wish to see the color again after the colorless winter.
Good luck in the contest
I know you'll keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Nicely flowing poem about the changes of autumn to winter and how we wish to see the color again after the colorless winter.
Good luck in the contest
I know you'll keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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No problem, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from nancyjam
Good use of personification in this
well crafted anapest poem.
Pour Autumn is stripped of her garments
by cruel winter. Wonderful imagery and
word usage to enhance the theme.
Best of luck in the contest. Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Good use of personification in this
well crafted anapest poem.
Pour Autumn is stripped of her garments
by cruel winter. Wonderful imagery and
word usage to enhance the theme.
Best of luck in the contest. Nancy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Nancy, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
Brooke, this poem about the transition of seasons from autumn to winter is very nice. I especially like your personification of autumn as she dons garments of crimson and bronze. The contrast of winter in the next stanza is stark. I truly believe your last stanza could stand alone. Rod
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Brooke, this poem about the transition of seasons from autumn to winter is very nice. I especially like your personification of autumn as she dons garments of crimson and bronze. The contrast of winter in the next stanza is stark. I truly believe your last stanza could stand alone. Rod
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from trimple
Hi Brooke
What a wonderful way to describe autumn.
I had to look up the word 'raiment' Oh how perfect this word is to describe the beauty of autumnal leaves.
Your personification I think is splendid.
Fabulous work and a pleasure to read.
kind regards
trimple :)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke
What a wonderful way to describe autumn.
I had to look up the word 'raiment' Oh how perfect this word is to describe the beauty of autumnal leaves.
Your personification I think is splendid.
Fabulous work and a pleasure to read.
kind regards
trimple :)
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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trimple, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
a marvelous written double rhyming couplet quatrains
which includes many types of rhymes throughout the poem.
Some of these rhyming schemes are intermittent, leonine,
Ceasural, assonant, feminine and masculine rhymes just us mention a few. One rhyming question that is more like a thorn line scheme is within these two lines: "and of all of the fire of her garments are (done) the world is left to quiver, no way to keep (warm)." The two lines that are in parentheses are irregular rhymes.
The time and place of the setting of the poem is very present and for ever existing in a very figurative, allegorical and emblematic way.
The imagery is quite distinctly descriptive and exquisitely expressive throughout the writing: "The garments of autumn are golden and red until her apparel is savagely shed." A brilliant imagery and somewhat a metaphor which explains the loss of leaves and the turning of the season.
The qualities that evoke the reader are one of an interesting episode of the qualities of the seasons fall and winter and makes the reader imagine such is the beauties of the seasons.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Brooke;
a marvelous written double rhyming couplet quatrains
which includes many types of rhymes throughout the poem.
Some of these rhyming schemes are intermittent, leonine,
Ceasural, assonant, feminine and masculine rhymes just us mention a few. One rhyming question that is more like a thorn line scheme is within these two lines: "and of all of the fire of her garments are (done) the world is left to quiver, no way to keep (warm)." The two lines that are in parentheses are irregular rhymes.
The time and place of the setting of the poem is very present and for ever existing in a very figurative, allegorical and emblematic way.
The imagery is quite distinctly descriptive and exquisitely expressive throughout the writing: "The garments of autumn are golden and red until her apparel is savagely shed." A brilliant imagery and somewhat a metaphor which explains the loss of leaves and the turning of the season.
The qualities that evoke the reader are one of an interesting episode of the qualities of the seasons fall and winter and makes the reader imagine such is the beauties of the seasons.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Alex, thank you so much :-) I appreciate the thought you put into thinking about my poems and responding to them :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from DSMalott
So very nice.
The strong cadence of the anapestic tetrameter was evident. Also, very strong rhyme pattern and sequence. I do wish that 'gone' and 'warm' in the first stanza could have been closer in rhyme sound. Hmm...could 'all the fire of her garments...' been 'shorn'...perhaps. Just a random thought.
Great classic feel to this one.
Love it.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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So very nice.
The strong cadence of the anapestic tetrameter was evident. Also, very strong rhyme pattern and sequence. I do wish that 'gone' and 'warm' in the first stanza could have been closer in rhyme sound. Hmm...could 'all the fire of her garments...' been 'shorn'...perhaps. Just a random thought.
Great classic feel to this one.
Love it.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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DS, thank you so much :-) I realize not everyone is as big a fan of proximate rhyme as I am. Brooke
Comment from Dawny53
I think most of us feel this way when we see leaves turning and then leaving for good.. the loneliness and sense of foreboding that accompanies the entire process is well described here, well done.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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I think most of us feel this way when we see leaves turning and then leaving for good.. the loneliness and sense of foreboding that accompanies the entire process is well described here, well done.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014
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Dawny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
