Comment from djsaxon

Exceptional

I truly love this aspect to your pen. Forgive me, but I can't help thinking of Maureen when I read this. I won't presume to comment on structure and imagery. Your pen is impeccable. DJ xxx

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014

thank you so much, djsaxon, for your generous response to this poem. My thoughts are also often with Maureen. Brooke

Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

Dear Brooke: wonderful metaphor, lovely pace, and great emotional grip within your splendid writing and perfect picture. Outstanding work! Many thanks: Vance

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014

Vance, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your rhythmic, rhymed couplets in these quatrains filled with personification. I actually felt the cold as the seasons changed! Cheers and best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014

Joan, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

Very nice Brooke,
Winter is a stark time following the brilliance of autumn's glow. I liked the last line..
When winter comes calling to steal the last leaf.
:-) Carolyn

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014

Thank you, Caroline, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

I had to look up what anapestic was. I know I learned it in school but way too long ago. And with my memory, and never writing them, I thought it was one long and two short but wasn't sure.

Yes, soon snow will be here. I still have work outdoors and we don't have our wood for the winter yet. Can't believe this.

Anyway, well written.

Drew

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Drew. When a poem is in a contest, the site provides a link you can click on with the contest, which in this case gave form rules. It makes them easy to find :-) Brooke

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

I give up - I surrender. I can't keep up with your amazing skill and talent (but I CAN learn from it! LOL) This is so beautiful (and a meter I know that now has a name for me). *smile*

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 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Dawn, thank you so much :-) I truly appreciate your encouraging and generous reviews :-) Brooke

Comment from perpetualwallflower

Exceptional

This poem is beautiful. I love the personification and the imagery of it. It's truly deserving of the six stars I gave you. Bravo!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

thanks so much for your generous six stars and thoughtful review, perpetualwallflower :-) Brooke

Comment from Craigitar

Excellent

After reading the requirements and exceptions of anapestic tetrameter poetry and how catalexis is perfectly acceptable, I can see that you have delivered a poem well within the parameters of this poetic form. Brooke, this is a great poem that conveys the death of autumn and the bleakness of the dead of winter very well. Great imagery and feel. Good luck with the prompt.

Craig

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Craig, for commenting on the composition as well as the content :-) Brooke

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

With a leap and bound the swift anapests throng, the guy said. I won't bother reading the poetry mechanics rules.
It's all bout my sleepy ear, to me. This poem's nice.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

LIJ, thanks so mjuch :-) Brooke

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

The first thing I noticed after reading this, was the look on Sawyer's face. Sadness - apprehension - upset? I expected to hear him say: uh, oh....something's coming! It perfectly fits your poem.

And, like your offering - a bit intense in a sad sort of way - the underlying violence of autumn leaving...

Very nice...Jean

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Jean, thank you so much :-) Brooke