The Raiment of Autumn
a poem in anapestic meter117 total reviews
Comment from Debra White
Hi Brooke :)
This poem is brilliant!
Everything about it is done so well.
Your meter is perfect as is your rhyme scheme. Very effective usage of alliteration (particularly enjoyed savagely shed!) and enjambement throughout.
Very descriptive writing about autumn turning to winter - I love the imagery.
Your presentation is gorgeous - winter to a 'T'.
I love this! Good luck in the voting booth.
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke :)
This poem is brilliant!
Everything about it is done so well.
Your meter is perfect as is your rhyme scheme. Very effective usage of alliteration (particularly enjoyed savagely shed!) and enjambement throughout.
Very descriptive writing about autumn turning to winter - I love the imagery.
Your presentation is gorgeous - winter to a 'T'.
I love this! Good luck in the voting booth.
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Debra, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem, my friend :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome, Brooke :) Your poem stopped me in my tracks...x
Comment from royowen
A beautifully crafted poem, that leaves little doubt that your talent is expansive and leaves no doubt as to your abilities, this poem highlights the coming winter and the glory of Autumn that heralds it's approach, but even in winter's dormancy there is the promise of life to come, that winter is a time of renewal, alliteration in garments/gone, winds/winter, garments/golden, last/leaf, well done, Roy.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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A beautifully crafted poem, that leaves little doubt that your talent is expansive and leaves no doubt as to your abilities, this poem highlights the coming winter and the glory of Autumn that heralds it's approach, but even in winter's dormancy there is the promise of life to come, that winter is a time of renewal, alliteration in garments/gone, winds/winter, garments/golden, last/leaf, well done, Roy.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Roy, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from heyjude
Brooke, wonderful job on this poem. Yes, I do hate
to see all those leaves on the trees fall. I love
the changing of the colors of the leaves, but not
the bare trees.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Brooke, wonderful job on this poem. Yes, I do hate
to see all those leaves on the trees fall. I love
the changing of the colors of the leaves, but not
the bare trees.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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heyjude, thank you so very much for your generous response to my poem :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. It makes me shiver to think of winter. I'm not ready for it yet. We're having lovely Fall weather here.
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I'm never ready for winter :-)
Comment from padumachitta
Hey. I don't know what the contest is...I will look later. I am sure you nailed the rules!
Oh please, not winter, not again.
I thought this was a good description of how one feels when that last leaf blows away and the chill wind finds the way up ones sleeve.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Hey. I don't know what the contest is...I will look later. I am sure you nailed the rules!
Oh please, not winter, not again.
I thought this was a good description of how one feels when that last leaf blows away and the chill wind finds the way up ones sleeve.
padumachitta
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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thank you so much, padumachitta - the contest was to write a poem in anapestic tetrameter, which ain't easy. LOL :-) Brooke
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LOL...I can't even say the dang thing:-)
padumachitta
Comment from gypsycaravan
I don't know why but by the time I finished reading this, I had a picture of a closet in my head filled with red and gold outfits and they were slowly being removed and donated to a charity leaving the closet bare. Strange brain I have, huh? Love the poem, Brooke and the precious photo of Sawyer.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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I don't know why but by the time I finished reading this, I had a picture of a closet in my head filled with red and gold outfits and they were slowly being removed and donated to a charity leaving the closet bare. Strange brain I have, huh? Love the poem, Brooke and the precious photo of Sawyer.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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thanks so much, gypsy - and yes, it is quite the sweet picture :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Brooke - three good stanzas well written in the required form. Nice personification of Autumn. Good use of metaphor in 'once all the fire of her garments is gone'. Good rhyming couplets - near rhyme in gone/warm. Good personification of winter in your second line and choice of picture, good and stark. Good read. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke - three good stanzas well written in the required form. Nice personification of Autumn. Good use of metaphor in 'once all the fire of her garments is gone'. Good rhyming couplets - near rhyme in gone/warm. Good personification of winter in your second line and choice of picture, good and stark. Good read. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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thank you so very much, Dorothy :-) Brooke
Comment from Nosha17
I tried one of these anapaestic meter poems a while back, it turned out well, but it is not that easy to write in. This was well written with lovely images of Autumn and excellent rhyming. The fear of winter approaching makes me shudder, but where I am we have very little snow, thank goodness. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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I tried one of these anapaestic meter poems a while back, it turned out well, but it is not that easy to write in. This was well written with lovely images of Autumn and excellent rhyming. The fear of winter approaching makes me shudder, but where I am we have very little snow, thank goodness. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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thank you so much, Faye - yes, I agree - it is a bitch to write :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
NIce meter, pleasant to read. duh DUM duh duh DUM duh duh DUM duh duh DUM...
Today the golden-leafed maple in my backyard was lit by late afternoon sun against a dark gray sky... gorrrrgeous. I had a math student at the time. We both stopped working just to look at the sight. Soon, those brilliant leaves will be gone... and stark, black branches will be all we see against the gray November sky.
A quick little poem in anapestic meter:
November's the ugliest month in the year.
December's quite gloomy but brings Christmas cheer.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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NIce meter, pleasant to read. duh DUM duh duh DUM duh duh DUM duh duh DUM...
Today the golden-leafed maple in my backyard was lit by late afternoon sun against a dark gray sky... gorrrrgeous. I had a math student at the time. We both stopped working just to look at the sight. Soon, those brilliant leaves will be gone... and stark, black branches will be all we see against the gray November sky.
A quick little poem in anapestic meter:
November's the ugliest month in the year.
December's quite gloomy but brings Christmas cheer.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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thanks so much, Phyllis :-) I like your quick little poem, which echoes my sentiments exactly :-) Brooke
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Brooke,
Doesn't seem like it with the hot weather we're having here. Still have our a/c on!
I love to watch a gentle falling snow. Something so tranquil about.
Like the simplistic approach to this with your chosen artwork. Great imagery in your words. Nicely done.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Hi, Brooke,
Doesn't seem like it with the hot weather we're having here. Still have our a/c on!
I love to watch a gentle falling snow. Something so tranquil about.
Like the simplistic approach to this with your chosen artwork. Great imagery in your words. Nicely done.
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Jax, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from rjuselius
this is a beautiful poem about autumn. i never can stress it enough too much but you're an awesome poet and not just a poet but a poet with the soul of a poet!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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this is a beautiful poem about autumn. i never can stress it enough too much but you're an awesome poet and not just a poet but a poet with the soul of a poet!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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rebekka, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
