The divine power of spirituality
contest Spiritual24 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Author,
I like the thoughts of this one but, it does have some errors. The title has a misspelled word in it.
In the first stanza second line, I do not think the "And also ..." works.
Otherwise, your piece is smooth, graceful and a good read. Good luck. Hope this helps. xoxo Kiwi
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Hi Author,
I like the thoughts of this one but, it does have some errors. The title has a misspelled word in it.
In the first stanza second line, I do not think the "And also ..." works.
Otherwise, your piece is smooth, graceful and a good read. Good luck. Hope this helps. xoxo Kiwi
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks for pointing out the wrong spelling in the title, I have removed the word also, and I agree it does look better. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Ekim777
There is wisdom in every line but some platitudes stand out. "The essence of our soul is in our communication." Several lines arrest our attention but in poetry I prefer a flurry of sensual images not a preponderances of abstracts. To me, a poem should paint a picture strung together by its cadence and not be a platform for instruction. Just a thought. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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There is wisdom in every line but some platitudes stand out. "The essence of our soul is in our communication." Several lines arrest our attention but in poetry I prefer a flurry of sensual images not a preponderances of abstracts. To me, a poem should paint a picture strung together by its cadence and not be a platform for instruction. Just a thought. -Ekim777
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your review and your comments.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
Beautiful artwork to stress a spiritual presence as your words take the reader on a journey.
Awesome presentation. Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Hi,
Beautiful artwork to stress a spiritual presence as your words take the reader on a journey.
Awesome presentation. Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the great review and comments.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Very esoteric offering though I think many will enjoy it. Particularly like your phrase: Making you the master of your destiny - that is true and something we often forget or simply decide to ignore. Nicely penned and great artwork. AT=/
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Very esoteric offering though I think many will enjoy it. Particularly like your phrase: Making you the master of your destiny - that is true and something we often forget or simply decide to ignore. Nicely penned and great artwork. AT=/
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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I am so pleased you enjoyed thank you for the wonderful review
