Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "CHAPTER OCHO; PART DOS"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This was most enjoyable and ended with something to look forward to in the next post. I think I will enjoy this celebration, always interesting to learn something in the process of reading a story, Giddy
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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This was most enjoyable and ended with something to look forward to in the next post. I think I will enjoy this celebration, always interesting to learn something in the process of reading a story, Giddy
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
I love all the details about the Lipan Apache culture you provide us in this great chapter, Barbara. The reservation just north of my house is more like a village than the stereotypical version most white people expect, much like you relate in your story. Of course, the casino money has helped spruce things up quite a bit :)
Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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I love all the details about the Lipan Apache culture you provide us in this great chapter, Barbara. The reservation just north of my house is more like a village than the stereotypical version most white people expect, much like you relate in your story. Of course, the casino money has helped spruce things up quite a bit :)
Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. :)
Comment from Ben Colder
Now I need to know what is it she will be getting ready. I bet I am in for a good romance heading in the direction of poor old Jom and Sonia. Well done as always.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Now I need to know what is it she will be getting ready. I bet I am in for a good romance heading in the direction of poor old Jom and Sonia. Well done as always.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from boxergirl
Nice to see some information about Indian culture come out in your story. It makes the story authentic. It will be interesting to see whst the festival holds in store for Soni.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Nice to see some information about Indian culture come out in your story. It makes the story authentic. It will be interesting to see whst the festival holds in store for Soni.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Good to see you back again. My internet is playing up hope to get it fixed today. Thanks for another interesting chapter. No errors. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Good to see you back again. My internet is playing up hope to get it fixed today. Thanks for another interesting chapter. No errors. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. Internets can be a pain sometimes.
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Yeah for sure... Had ISP Tech over today. I now have to keep to just Chrome Browser he seems to think switching from Chrome to IE is causing my Internet problems. Now I have to find a media player that works on Chrome I did a search and a "V" media player I found is warned off by Norton Sigh! Any ideas?
Comment from adewpearl
I think they were up to no good, but - add comma
good use of dialogue to impart information about Native Americans and reservations while also expressing emotion and attitude - interesting discussion about food and one'attitude about the procuring and use of it
You make it clear that she suspects him of holding stereotypes and resents that
Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I think they were up to no good, but - add comma
good use of dialogue to impart information about Native Americans and reservations while also expressing emotion and attitude - interesting discussion about food and one'attitude about the procuring and use of it
You make it clear that she suspects him of holding stereotypes and resents that
Brooke
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. Took care of the comma.
Comment from rmj09
The chapter remains in the romance fiction genre.
The suspense of the last chapter carries through this chapter,
what are the four mean up to.
The focus is the celebration. The storyline is Soni and Jim are late for the celebration. Grandfather said he would send men but Soni took a hook-up bracket so they can't pull the trailer. Soni prepares for the ceremony.
The dialogue is clear and tell what is and has been happening as well as The American Native meal. The narrative shows the action.
Keep on writing.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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The chapter remains in the romance fiction genre.
The suspense of the last chapter carries through this chapter,
what are the four mean up to.
The focus is the celebration. The storyline is Soni and Jim are late for the celebration. Grandfather said he would send men but Soni took a hook-up bracket so they can't pull the trailer. Soni prepares for the ceremony.
The dialogue is clear and tell what is and has been happening as well as The American Native meal. The narrative shows the action.
Keep on writing.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
I adored this chapter, Barbara. Not only did you carry the action forward with terse, lean dialogue, but you managed to fill the reader in on background information regarding the Indian Reservations. You even included a jab or two about the wigwams and tee-pees. Then you introduced the Indian blessing of the food and followed with food descriptions connected with Indian philosophy of the Earth.
Worthy of a 6!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I adored this chapter, Barbara. Not only did you carry the action forward with terse, lean dialogue, but you managed to fill the reader in on background information regarding the Indian Reservations. You even included a jab or two about the wigwams and tee-pees. Then you introduced the Indian blessing of the food and followed with food descriptions connected with Indian philosophy of the Earth.
Worthy of a 6!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Sasha
Excellent chapter. My mother once tried to get me to eat buffalo meat but I refused. I am strange when it comes to eating things I develop an emotional attachment to. Very nice work with this one.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Excellent chapter. My mother once tried to get me to eat buffalo meat but I refused. I am strange when it comes to eating things I develop an emotional attachment to. Very nice work with this one.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I tried it when I was younger. It's not bad.
Comment from Genya
Another great chapter. If anything it did seem a lot shorter. Maybe it was wishful thinking. These two seem to be getting along much better at the moment. Very good dialogue all the way through and such likeable characters. Great story. Look forward to the next one. Genya
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Another great chapter. If anything it did seem a lot shorter. Maybe it was wishful thinking. These two seem to be getting along much better at the moment. Very good dialogue all the way through and such likeable characters. Great story. Look forward to the next one. Genya
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
