Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "CHAPTER OCHO; PART DOS"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent chapter, Barbara, soni confiscates the hitch so the poachers can't haul anything with the trailer they found, they get to the celebration and grandfather asks why they were late. then sonni prepares for the celebration. I'm guessing she's going to dress in the native American garb and dance?
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this is an excellent chapter, Barbara, soni confiscates the hitch so the poachers can't haul anything with the trailer they found, they get to the celebration and grandfather asks why they were late. then sonni prepares for the celebration. I'm guessing she's going to dress in the native American garb and dance?
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from rama devi
Hi dear. As usual, this flows well and has life-like dialog and fine characterization. it's too short to comment on plot development...and also having not read all chapters, I'll leave that aside for more regular readers. No big spags, just one optional comma suggestion:
"And here he is(,) right on cue."
Nice authenticity in the details--especially the fine culinary details...well done. Also the prayer Grandfather made before eating. Gives it a genuine native flavor.
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"About the same time you started saying coasterners." Jim chuckled. "That's a mouthful."
I thought so too! LOL
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"They do. Native Americans prefer to live off the land. They believe if they take care of the land, the land will take care of them."
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Hi dear. As usual, this flows well and has life-like dialog and fine characterization. it's too short to comment on plot development...and also having not read all chapters, I'll leave that aside for more regular readers. No big spags, just one optional comma suggestion:
"And here he is(,) right on cue."
Nice authenticity in the details--especially the fine culinary details...well done. Also the prayer Grandfather made before eating. Gives it a genuine native flavor.
LOL-
"About the same time you started saying coasterners." Jim chuckled. "That's a mouthful."
I thought so too! LOL
YES YES YES-
"They do. Native Americans prefer to live off the land. They believe if they take care of the land, the land will take care of them."
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I appreciate hearing from you.
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Thanks dear B. I've been less active on FS lately (past few months) and will continue to be less and less here--as in Dec, my membership expires. I'll stay on as a standard member ad still review sometimes. :)
Feel free to connect with me offsite on social networks (FB, Twitter and Linked In) and via email: ramadevinina@yahoo.com
Warmly,
rd
Comment from c_lucas
Most celebrations have a majority of the Indians dressed in traditional clothes. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read
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Most celebrations have a majority of the Indians dressed in traditional clothes. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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My pleasure. Barbara. Charlie
Comment from angelface2
I think the picture is fine, Barbara. It is good chapter and well written. I found one place where you didn't need quote marks...
Kuruk hugged his granddaughter.(") no quotes. Nicely done. :>D Miss Sally
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I think the picture is fine, Barbara. It is good chapter and well written. I found one place where you didn't need quote marks...
Kuruk hugged his granddaughter.(") no quotes. Nicely done. :>D Miss Sally
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the catch. I have removed the " I appreciate your help.
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Thank you for the catch. I have removed the " I appreciate your help.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Hmm... wonder what Soni's planning to participate in. Eating cactus might be dangerous... guess they take out the thorns, though. LOL! So, we still don't know what the four men were after. But there's safety in numbers, so they should be safe on the reservation... I hope. ;)
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Hmm... wonder what Soni's planning to participate in. Eating cactus might be dangerous... guess they take out the thorns, though. LOL! So, we still don't know what the four men were after. But there's safety in numbers, so they should be safe on the reservation... I hope. ;)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I promise we will find out what those men were after. Thank you for the kind review.
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I promise we will find out what those men were after. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
I'm sorry I'm a drop in reviewer, but I'll try do the best that I can! the Australian aboriginals have lived off the land for many generations, and we've had a 'bush tucker man' reveal the food that is edible and nourishing, they live off whatever is available. I related to your story in some ways, it was interesting and 'palatable' no pun intended, characters unrecognised but believable, the storyline well designed and composed, good write, blessings, Roy.
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I'm sorry I'm a drop in reviewer, but I'll try do the best that I can! the Australian aboriginals have lived off the land for many generations, and we've had a 'bush tucker man' reveal the food that is edible and nourishing, they live off whatever is available. I related to your story in some ways, it was interesting and 'palatable' no pun intended, characters unrecognised but believable, the storyline well designed and composed, good write, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara,
Comment from Sefiros
This is a nice slice of Native American culture without being too preachy. I was half-expecting Jim or Alex wonder how the Great Spirit helping the Native Americans if they live in poverty, but you didn't go that way. Nice avoidance of the stereotype. Good job.
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This is a nice slice of Native American culture without being too preachy. I was half-expecting Jim or Alex wonder how the Great Spirit helping the Native Americans if they live in poverty, but you didn't go that way. Nice avoidance of the stereotype. Good job.
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
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I am not sure what I need to do to improve this post to receive a five. Please tell my errors. Thank you for the review.
Comment from judiverse
Just when I'd given up finding anything exciting to read! six stars for providing some entertainment. I like the way you have Soni give Jim the description of the reservation. It works well. Interesting details about the foods being served. Some sounds good, others not. At least the party appears to be going on without incident, but those who are determined to harm Soni and the ranch aren't easily stopped. Clever the way she took the hook-up bracelet to prevent the suspicious strangers from making off with any livestock. Interesting conclusion. Sounds like some kind of costume affair. judp
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Just when I'd given up finding anything exciting to read! six stars for providing some entertainment. I like the way you have Soni give Jim the description of the reservation. It works well. Interesting details about the foods being served. Some sounds good, others not. At least the party appears to be going on without incident, but those who are determined to harm Soni and the ranch aren't easily stopped. Clever the way she took the hook-up bracelet to prevent the suspicious strangers from making off with any livestock. Interesting conclusion. Sounds like some kind of costume affair. judp
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
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There will be plenty of action in the future. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curly Girly
This was well written, and I enjoyed the table talk. What a surprising menu! Imagine having all those contrasting meats on one plate. I'd certainly give it a try.
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This was well written, and I enjoyed the table talk. What a surprising menu! Imagine having all those contrasting meats on one plate. I'd certainly give it a try.
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
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I got the impression Jim did try them all. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yes, he did. But many wouldn't!
