Two little boys.
Twins pulling the wool over their mama's eyes.36 total reviews
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a delightful read with a fun meter that thoroughly engages the reader in the story. I am not sure if these are typos or suggestions: "their stomped on the floor" - maybe they instead of their would be better here.
"doom" - should be doom. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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This is a delightful read with a fun meter that thoroughly engages the reader in the story. I am not sure if these are typos or suggestions: "their stomped on the floor" - maybe they instead of their would be better here.
"doom" - should be doom. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Yes Mystic, typos at their best LOL. I wrote this in about ten minutes and edited in 5 before i left for work. Obviously I did not push the save button. I was cracking up after reading these first few reviews and editing again. You should read it again and i put a pic of the boys up with there sister. God Bless!
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Thank you again, don't forget to vote if you liked it! God Bless!
Comment from Dawny53
I didn't understand your warning.. for there is nothing disturbing here. You wrote this well, it flows along smoothly and I found it quite funny as well. Fourth stanza I think you left out the word feet.. and a couple of punctuation mistakes here and there but the writing is good.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I didn't understand your warning.. for there is nothing disturbing here. You wrote this well, it flows along smoothly and I found it quite funny as well. Fourth stanza I think you left out the word feet.. and a couple of punctuation mistakes here and there but the writing is good.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I definitely edited after looking it over at work LOL. I added it under humor and could not find a warning on here. Thank you for the awesome review and stars. God Bless!
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Thank you again, don't forget to vote if you liked it! God Bless!
Comment from Jay Squires
their stomped on the floor [their FEET ?? stomped...]
Geeze that's a cute poem. Those boys must be yours (or grands). No poet could come up with names that cute off the top of his head.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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their stomped on the floor [their FEET ?? stomped...]
Geeze that's a cute poem. Those boys must be yours (or grands). No poet could come up with names that cute off the top of his head.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you Jay Squires, they are actually my great nephews who bought the house across the street from me. They are a riot and a trial on a daily basis. I edited after getting to work LoL. There is now a pic of them with their sister. God Bless!
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They are a good lookin' couple of boys -- and if you could only get their sister to smile! They're all three adorable. God Bless you as well.
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Comment from kiwijenny
I have twins this made me grin...they would collaborate and speak their
own language.....candy sigh I hid it from them...
their stomped on the floor,,,,.?
God bless
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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I have twins this made me grin...they would collaborate and speak their
own language.....candy sigh I hid it from them...
their stomped on the floor,,,,.?
God bless
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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I wnet back in and edited LOL. I love these little boogers, they are a handful and yes, they have there own language. When they speak it, trouble follows LOL!
God Bless!
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Comment from patcelaw
The word twins got me on this one as I am a twin, I have a twin brother and remember we never ask for a treat without asking for a treat for our twin as well. My twin and I are 76. Today we still have a very close relationship, even though we live many miles apart. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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The word twins got me on this one as I am a twin, I have a twin brother and remember we never ask for a treat without asking for a treat for our twin as well. My twin and I are 76. Today we still have a very close relationship, even though we live many miles apart. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Happy Birthday to you and your twin! I love these little guys, they are definitely a handful. God Bless!
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I guess I mislead you. The reply should have read like this
My twin and I are 76. We still have a very close relationship
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Well then Happy Belated Birthday LOL.
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Neonewman,
This is tooooo cute. More so since I have twin grandsons - I can relate.
Fun read.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Hi, Neonewman,
This is tooooo cute. More so since I have twin grandsons - I can relate.
Fun read.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Awesome! Thank you Jax again for another excellent review and stars. I edited and added a pic of the boys and their sister if you want to check it out. God Bless!
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