Comment from gypsycaravan

Excellent

Not only well-written but this told a great story with a clever twist at the end. Very nice entry for the contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014

Thanks so much for the lovely review!

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

You meet the contest requirements splendidly with this well penned piece. I love the twist at the end where it was not so much the guy, but the desserts themselves which were the temptation. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014

Thank you so much for this sweet review!

Comment from mauial

Excellent

I like your poem and the twist that you gave it at the end came as a surprise. The thought of temptation was made very clear poetically from the beginning to the end. Great job on the prompt.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thank you so much!

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

Very clever. I like the suggestive symbolism here. It is written in a subtle way with good rhymes and even flow of words. A job well done!

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thank you so much!