The Fairies of Fernwood Forest
a story poem133 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'The Fairies of F....... Forest' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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'The Fairies of F....... Forest' is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Duchess, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Brooke, you're very welcome :-) the Duchess
Comment from Dawny53
It is indeed a magical poem, a fun story of fairies and a splendid way of playing out the cloudiness into bright happy new days. A great poem for all to enjoy, young and old alike.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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It is indeed a magical poem, a fun story of fairies and a splendid way of playing out the cloudiness into bright happy new days. A great poem for all to enjoy, young and old alike.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Dawny, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
I came to this in anticipation of an avalanche of alliteration, but it is not overdone! Where you have used it, it has worked well, as in:
"the world would waken
to the tune of the trilling lark,"
It is good to read a traditional tale where the forces of good overcome those of evil. Just the right antidote to the nightmares of young (and old!). It sometimes seems these days that we are in dire need of more people who can make new light appear from darkness.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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I came to this in anticipation of an avalanche of alliteration, but it is not overdone! Where you have used it, it has worked well, as in:
"the world would waken
to the tune of the trilling lark,"
It is good to read a traditional tale where the forces of good overcome those of evil. Just the right antidote to the nightmares of young (and old!). It sometimes seems these days that we are in dire need of more people who can make new light appear from darkness.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Tony, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke,
That is some great picture! You know, my dear, that's another good reason why you should gather your very best poems and send them to a publisher. What lucky artist would they select to illustrate your book? What marvellous pictures would he/she paint? Think about it. You have enough good poems to keep a dozen artists busy. Your poetry is too good to hide in Fanstory.
"In the heart of the tangled timbers
where the toad stools grow ten feet tall,
lived the Fairies of Fernwood Forest" ...terrific alliteration with "t" and "f"
I like the way you set the stage for the fairies, and this phrase especially,
"stars in their congregation"... this is when fairies come out, at night, under moonbeams, in starlight.
"came a day when the world met danger"... something is wrong. The plot thickens. What has happened?
"not one soul in the wood was stirring,
for the sky had turned bleak and dark." ... why is the sky so dark this morning? This is the mystery.
"a cloud black as raven's feathers
swept the light of the sun away."... that is dark. Unusually dark. There's more to this than a simple storm.
We are getting curious!
"In the home of the Fernwood Fairies
not one note of the lark was heard,
not one doe stirred to feed her children,
not one sound came from fox nor bird." ... So now we find out that, not only is the morning black, but also quiet. The birds are not singing. The animals are not stirring. They know something is up. (Kids would love this. You would have captured their minds by this time.)
Enter the hero, for every story needs a hero.
"It was then that the Queen of Fairies
called her subjects to congregate,
for the doom that was fast approaching
was a grievous and tragic fate."
So now we are wondering, what will the fairy queen do?
"She commanded each sprite she'd summoned,
'Take a handful of fairy dust'," ... what is fairy dust? Can we see it? What will it do?
"Then she told them to spread their magic
with a glitter that lit the sky,
and the cloud as black as ravens' wings
had no choice but to pass on by." ... So the fairies saved the day. They drove the black cloud away with the sprinkling of magic fairy dust. With "magic", almost anything is possible. And kids all want a little magic in their lives.
"From the thick of the tangled timbers
rose the song of the trilling lark
as the light of the fairies' making
filled more space with each tiny spark."... all the things that were wrong became right. The lark began her song. The morning light increased spark by spark. The fawns began to feed. The foxes started running.
And then comes your message, to all who will listen,
"If you've wondered if light can triumph
in a world cloaked in clouds of fear,
ask the Fairies of Fernwood Forest,
who from dark made new light appear." ... When your world is cloaked in darkness, don't fear. Patiently wait for the light. Right now, there are a lot of dark clouds up there.... Ebola, ISIS, hurricanes, etc. ...but the important thing to remember is that God is in control. We shouldn't worry about things that negatively affect us. Rather, we should concentrate on our work in God's kingdom, and let Him worry about the problems that could result.
Wonderful poem, Brooke! Ya gotta love the fairies!
hugs
Kimbob
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke,
That is some great picture! You know, my dear, that's another good reason why you should gather your very best poems and send them to a publisher. What lucky artist would they select to illustrate your book? What marvellous pictures would he/she paint? Think about it. You have enough good poems to keep a dozen artists busy. Your poetry is too good to hide in Fanstory.
"In the heart of the tangled timbers
where the toad stools grow ten feet tall,
lived the Fairies of Fernwood Forest" ...terrific alliteration with "t" and "f"
I like the way you set the stage for the fairies, and this phrase especially,
"stars in their congregation"... this is when fairies come out, at night, under moonbeams, in starlight.
"came a day when the world met danger"... something is wrong. The plot thickens. What has happened?
"not one soul in the wood was stirring,
for the sky had turned bleak and dark." ... why is the sky so dark this morning? This is the mystery.
"a cloud black as raven's feathers
swept the light of the sun away."... that is dark. Unusually dark. There's more to this than a simple storm.
We are getting curious!
"In the home of the Fernwood Fairies
not one note of the lark was heard,
not one doe stirred to feed her children,
not one sound came from fox nor bird." ... So now we find out that, not only is the morning black, but also quiet. The birds are not singing. The animals are not stirring. They know something is up. (Kids would love this. You would have captured their minds by this time.)
Enter the hero, for every story needs a hero.
"It was then that the Queen of Fairies
called her subjects to congregate,
for the doom that was fast approaching
was a grievous and tragic fate."
So now we are wondering, what will the fairy queen do?
"She commanded each sprite she'd summoned,
'Take a handful of fairy dust'," ... what is fairy dust? Can we see it? What will it do?
"Then she told them to spread their magic
with a glitter that lit the sky,
and the cloud as black as ravens' wings
had no choice but to pass on by." ... So the fairies saved the day. They drove the black cloud away with the sprinkling of magic fairy dust. With "magic", almost anything is possible. And kids all want a little magic in their lives.
"From the thick of the tangled timbers
rose the song of the trilling lark
as the light of the fairies' making
filled more space with each tiny spark."... all the things that were wrong became right. The lark began her song. The morning light increased spark by spark. The fawns began to feed. The foxes started running.
And then comes your message, to all who will listen,
"If you've wondered if light can triumph
in a world cloaked in clouds of fear,
ask the Fairies of Fernwood Forest,
who from dark made new light appear." ... When your world is cloaked in darkness, don't fear. Patiently wait for the light. Right now, there are a lot of dark clouds up there.... Ebola, ISIS, hurricanes, etc. ...but the important thing to remember is that God is in control. We shouldn't worry about things that negatively affect us. Rather, we should concentrate on our work in God's kingdom, and let Him worry about the problems that could result.
Wonderful poem, Brooke! Ya gotta love the fairies!
hugs
Kimbob
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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I am about to go to bed a happy woman thanks to you, Kimbob - what a lovely man you are :-) Brooke
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You bring out the best in me, Brooke!
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Brooke,
I love these feel good stories... and the way you have made this poem sing with such clarity and rhyming flow is a testament to your amazing wordsmith'ry (what not a word?) Ah, back to the drawing board... smile)))))).
A truly exceptionally composed poem and a true delight to read... ah, I love a happy ending.
With our thoughts we create,
the energy to enhance happiness,
James xx
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I love these feel good stories... and the way you have made this poem sing with such clarity and rhyming flow is a testament to your amazing wordsmith'ry (what not a word?) Ah, back to the drawing board... smile)))))).
A truly exceptionally composed poem and a true delight to read... ah, I love a happy ending.
With our thoughts we create,
the energy to enhance happiness,
James xx
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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James, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What a lovely little poem in a story! The Fs of F F... great name, too.
where the toad stools grow ten feet tall, << Love this line!
'Twas a time when the streams ran clearer, << I'm sure they did!
Great poem to read aloud to kids. :)
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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What a lovely little poem in a story! The Fs of F F... great name, too.
where the toad stools grow ten feet tall, << Love this line!
'Twas a time when the streams ran clearer, << I'm sure they did!
Great poem to read aloud to kids. :)
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Phyllis :-) Brooke
Comment from jlsavell
Brooke, another entertaining and exceptional write. A top notch contender for story in a poem contest. You always do well and rightly so. Perfect rhythm, structure and word choice makes the work come alive and wondrous. Loved it. Jimi
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Brooke, another entertaining and exceptional write. A top notch contender for story in a poem contest. You always do well and rightly so. Perfect rhythm, structure and word choice makes the work come alive and wondrous. Loved it. Jimi
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Jimi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Zinnia48
What a beautiful, magical story! I p articularly like the lines:
No more stars in their congregation
made the night seem as bright as day,
and a cloud black as raven's feathers
swept the light of the sun away.
thank you! Caroline
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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What a beautiful, magical story! I p articularly like the lines:
No more stars in their congregation
made the night seem as bright as day,
and a cloud black as raven's feathers
swept the light of the sun away.
thank you! Caroline
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Caroline, I appreciate your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
Your alliterative title and fairyland artwork selection certainly caught my attention! I thoroughly enjoyed your story poem in rhymed quatrains. I liked your additional alliteration and the "raven" simile plus the cadence and the suspense. I also relished the "spark" metaphor and happy ending. Brava! -Joan
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Your alliterative title and fairyland artwork selection certainly caught my attention! I thoroughly enjoyed your story poem in rhymed quatrains. I liked your additional alliteration and the "raven" simile plus the cadence and the suspense. I also relished the "spark" metaphor and happy ending. Brava! -Joan
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Joan, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
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Well deserved for your tour de force--your poem had something for everyone! More hugs- Joan
Comment from emrpoems
Excellent rhythm and abcb rhyme.
Remarkable use of enjambment allowing the reader to really enjoy the story you tell in that poem. Sound message o the triumph of light over dark and it comes at a time t hat the Hindus are celebrating Diwali.
Lots of alliteration throughout
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Excellent rhythm and abcb rhyme.
Remarkable use of enjambment allowing the reader to really enjoy the story you tell in that poem. Sound message o the triumph of light over dark and it comes at a time t hat the Hindus are celebrating Diwali.
Lots of alliteration throughout
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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emrpoems, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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Caroline, thank you so much :-) Brooke
