The Fairies of Fernwood Forest
a story poem133 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Oh, your fairies are so much nicer than the ones I write about. The bleak and dreadful silence and darkness are overcome. The fairies saved the day with their fairy dust, conquerd the darkness and filled the world with light.
I love the alliteration in the Faries of Fernwood Forest.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Oh, your fairies are so much nicer than the ones I write about. The bleak and dreadful silence and darkness are overcome. The fairies saved the day with their fairy dust, conquerd the darkness and filled the world with light.
I love the alliteration in the Faries of Fernwood Forest.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Debi, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from words
I am so happy it is Sunday, so I have a quiver full of dudes for you.
Love your faerie verse. I know this will make Miranda happy.
The intrepid faeries remind me of Maureen's girls.
You have left me with a smile.
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I am so happy it is Sunday, so I have a quiver full of dudes for you.
Love your faerie verse. I know this will make Miranda happy.
The intrepid faeries remind me of Maureen's girls.
You have left me with a smile.
d
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Diane, thank you so much, my friend :-) Yep, this one is for Miranda. Heck, even the poems for Sawyer are for Miranda :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
What a delightful story poem, Brooke. This would make a nice little book. A good-happy-ending story, with lots of action throughout.
The meter is fun and the poem was enjoyable to read. I liked the anapestic feel to the poem, too (I just posted contest #3, which calls for anapestic meter, so my mind is humming and da-da-DUMing.)
Rose
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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What a delightful story poem, Brooke. This would make a nice little book. A good-happy-ending story, with lots of action throughout.
The meter is fun and the poem was enjoyable to read. I liked the anapestic feel to the poem, too (I just posted contest #3, which calls for anapestic meter, so my mind is humming and da-da-DUMing.)
Rose
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Rose :-) I'll go take a look at the contest - what a coincidence :-) Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
I really like this poem and feel it would shine if put to music. This is definitely a read aloud piece to fully get in gear with your rhythm. The story is magical and has much depth and commentary as well.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I really like this poem and feel it would shine if put to music. This is definitely a read aloud piece to fully get in gear with your rhythm. The story is magical and has much depth and commentary as well.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Lou, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
What an astounding story- poem you created my friend.
Love the perfection of the style , fabulous imagery , word choice
very entertaining, and glad that good wins restoring the light in the world. Pili
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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What an astounding story- poem you created my friend.
Love the perfection of the style , fabulous imagery , word choice
very entertaining, and glad that good wins restoring the light in the world. Pili
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Pili, thank you so very much for your generosity :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome. Pili
Comment from rjuselius
i just love mythical creatures and mythic elements! this is a poem that goes straight to the heart!i feel for the fairies. nice one!
thank you for sharing, brooke!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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i just love mythical creatures and mythic elements! this is a poem that goes straight to the heart!i feel for the fairies. nice one!
thank you for sharing, brooke!
rebekka x
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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rebekka, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from pattipac
Your lovely poem, about how the Fairies of Fernwood Forest turned darkness into light, is lovely. Excellent word choice, alliteration, and rhyme-scheme makes your poem flow easily from one stanza to the next.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Your lovely poem, about how the Fairies of Fernwood Forest turned darkness into light, is lovely. Excellent word choice, alliteration, and rhyme-scheme makes your poem flow easily from one stanza to the next.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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patti, thank you so much for your generous and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
I love fantasy poetry and you tell a tale here,good conquers evil,the fairy dust saves the day. In addition to telling a story,you have smooth rhyming of words and a strong steady beat in your verses. I can also see this poem as book with illustrations.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I love fantasy poetry and you tell a tale here,good conquers evil,the fairy dust saves the day. In addition to telling a story,you have smooth rhyming of words and a strong steady beat in your verses. I can also see this poem as book with illustrations.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much for your generosity, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from jackpeg
Not your usual smoothness. Certain of the anapests seem under strain, like "hid the diff--" followed by 3 unstressed sybs,"erence 'twixt." And "filled more space."
One line, (no big thing with most poets, but unlike most of yours: "and the cloud as black as ravens' wings" is a solitary tetrameter, the rest are tri. The line, "not one doe stirred to feed her children," sounds better read as 4 iambs and 4 stresses, instead of as anapests with 3 stresses. Hate to be so picky. Fire back you indignation. You're most always right, and I can take it.
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Not your usual smoothness. Certain of the anapests seem under strain, like "hid the diff--" followed by 3 unstressed sybs,"erence 'twixt." And "filled more space."
One line, (no big thing with most poets, but unlike most of yours: "and the cloud as black as ravens' wings" is a solitary tetrameter, the rest are tri. The line, "not one doe stirred to feed her children," sounds better read as 4 iambs and 4 stresses, instead of as anapests with 3 stresses. Hate to be so picky. Fire back you indignation. You're most always right, and I can take it.
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Jack - my goal was not to use consistent meter throughout, but I appreciate your feedback. I am truly proud of this poem. There's nothing to get indignant about - you have every right not to enjoy it as much as I do :-) Brooke
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A gracious reply, totally accepted. I just had to be honest and consistent with how it struck me, knowing you expect nothing less.
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My daughter usually likes my poems a lot, but once in a while she does not, and believe me, she is far less tactful than you in her expressions of disapproval, and yet, I love her more than anyone else on the face of the earth LOL :-)
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That's what mothers are for.
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That's what mothers are for.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, brooke, this is longer than most of your writes, great imagery presented in the way the darkness took over the light, but the light triumphed in the end. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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this is an excellent write, brooke, this is longer than most of your writes, great imagery presented in the way the darkness took over the light, but the light triumphed in the end. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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sweetwoodjax, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
