White
sometimes winter in the north is just white snow everywhere58 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
Gorgeous designer imagery...white on white:o)
I like the black bark of trees striving for uniqueness ...so cool
And hot cocoa a necessity...on these days...
God bkess
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Gorgeous designer imagery...white on white:o)
I like the black bark of trees striving for uniqueness ...so cool
And hot cocoa a necessity...on these days...
God bkess
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you for reading, kiwijenny. I can only enjoy the pictures now. Can't do any more Michigan winters due to health. But, I still do enjoy looking at all those pictures. When we knew a blizzard was on its way, we weren't upset at all. It meant a day or two vacation for school and perhaps work. We would go to the store and stock up on junk food, chili makings, hot cocoa, etc., foods that would warm our insides. The kids knew they would be able to play outside in drifts of snow and make snowmen, forts and have snowball fights. It was a holiday! But, now I can only go to my memory. livelylinda
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Hi Linda. Since this is free verse I think it would be easy and improve the poem if you remove the word white here and there. I understand what you are saying but it is good to leave some of it to imagine. The addition of color was a good touch. We will be seeing plenty of White in the near future here and I dread it! Love that last stanza! That's the best part of winter. xx Nancy
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Hi Linda. Since this is free verse I think it would be easy and improve the poem if you remove the word white here and there. I understand what you are saying but it is good to leave some of it to imagine. The addition of color was a good touch. We will be seeing plenty of White in the near future here and I dread it! Love that last stanza! That's the best part of winter. xx Nancy
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
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Nancy: thanks for reading and I'll take a look at your suggestion. Linda
Comment from lakeport
White, indeed winter is not to far away,hopefully a mild one, that's a beautiful expressed poem, I enjoyed reading it,God bless you,lakeport.
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White, indeed winter is not to far away,hopefully a mild one, that's a beautiful expressed poem, I enjoyed reading it,God bless you,lakeport.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you, lakeport. livelylinda
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your welcome.Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is very well written and flows wonderfully for a free verse. I thoroughly enjoyed the imagery as you paint a vivid picture of winter. I think it would be even stronger if you did not use the words 'white' so much as it starts to become redundant and there are lots of other words that convey the color without using its name. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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This is very well written and flows wonderfully for a free verse. I thoroughly enjoyed the imagery as you paint a vivid picture of winter. I think it would be even stronger if you did not use the words 'white' so much as it starts to become redundant and there are lots of other words that convey the color without using its name. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Mystic Angel7777: thank you so much for reading. I will take a look at your suggestion. livelylinda
Comment from adewpearl
I like the alliteration throughout
envelopes everyone - envelops
vivid descriptive detail
with strong sensory appeal
smoke from chimneys puff out - smoke...puffs out
good use of similes
love the romantic closing :-) Brooke
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I like the alliteration throughout
envelopes everyone - envelops
vivid descriptive detail
with strong sensory appeal
smoke from chimneys puff out - smoke...puffs out
good use of similes
love the romantic closing :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Brooke: thanks so much for reading and catching my spelling error, etc. Will fix it. Linda
Comment from drivenbackward
Very well written, livelylinda. Loved the last line. I just read two very clever poems in a row. Must be something in the air today. Enjoyed this one.
streetlights become spotlights -- Great line.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Very well written, livelylinda. Loved the last line. I just read two very clever poems in a row. Must be something in the air today. Enjoyed this one.
streetlights become spotlights -- Great line.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
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driven: thank you so much for reading and commenting. livelylinda
Comment from patcelaw
You painted a lovely picture of a wintery day, with the snow. I like the fact that you did add a bit of color with the black bark trees. In my mind I also see a spot of read as a beautiful cardinal walks on the snow looking for anything to eat. Nicely done.
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You painted a lovely picture of a wintery day, with the snow. I like the fact that you did add a bit of color with the black bark trees. In my mind I also see a spot of read as a beautiful cardinal walks on the snow looking for anything to eat. Nicely done.
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
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patcelaw: what I remember most about Michigan winters was that once we had a heavy snowstorm or were in the middle of a blizzard, one could be almost blinded by nothing but white everywhere. The lack of color was so striking. That kind of white is what I was shooting for. But, you are right. A sudden bright red cardinal against the backdrop of white and a little black bark, it quite picturesque. Thanks for reading. livelylinda
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I lived in Missouri until I was 20, then moved to California. In Missouri we had snow and ice storms. The snows were nice, but I hated the ice storms even though they had a beauty all their own. In California we didn't have seasonal change, I now live in New Mexico and we do have an occasional snow storm . Usually no more than 4-6 inches.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, lively linda, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the winter scene that calls for a warm evening by the fire. I enjoyed reading it.
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this is an excellent write, lively linda, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the winter scene that calls for a warm evening by the fire. I enjoyed reading it.
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you, sweet! Linda
