Comment from faygrizzle

Good

I love how you arranged the words in your poem. You used emotions in your poem. I enjoyed how it flowed to tell a story. Continue to excel.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014

thank you faygrizzle

Comment from mumsyone

Average

Oops! Your poem is not a 5-7-5. The 5-7-5 calls for three lines only, of 5, 7, and 5 syllables, so your poem does not qualify for this contest. Sorry.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014

I am sorry.it breaks my heart to know that there is just one entry per person .thank you.

Comment from Trybuck

Average

Before entering
Please read all rules for contest
saves so much trouble

The above is what a 5-7-5 should look like:
5 syllables first line
7 syllables second line
5 syllables third line

Let me know when you either revise yours or remove it from the contest, and I'll be glad to come back and upgrade my rating, Buck

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2014

thanks buck.i will do it.thank you.

reply by Trybuck on 13-Nov-2014

As long as you use the same title, you can go back and edit this one to fit the guidelines