A Sound of Thunder
100 word dash16 total reviews
Comment from MagKing
I love this because it's beautiful in style and write.
I would have given this more but because I do not understand the story to the peak.
To me it sounds and reflects as a poem, yet it is supposed to be a story....Perhaps you could make it more self explanatory with the moral inclusive.
I saw your review of my work....Thanks
It is always my tradition to try and review others that reviewed me. But I only reviewed the two you promoted...
Sorry it's coming late
Thanks for your review!
And good luck in both contests
MagKing
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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I love this because it's beautiful in style and write.
I would have given this more but because I do not understand the story to the peak.
To me it sounds and reflects as a poem, yet it is supposed to be a story....Perhaps you could make it more self explanatory with the moral inclusive.
I saw your review of my work....Thanks
It is always my tradition to try and review others that reviewed me. But I only reviewed the two you promoted...
Sorry it's coming late
Thanks for your review!
And good luck in both contests
MagKing
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thanks for this. Perhaps you didn't catch the hints that the story retells part of Samson's tale from the Bible, seen from his point of view.
Steve
Comment from Michaelk
The feast of Dagon struck a familiar chord with me. I knew I had heard that somewhere. You did a good job of telling the Samson story (or at least the end of it) in just a few words. Great descriptions, very easy to picture and vivid.
Excellent story.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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The feast of Dagon struck a familiar chord with me. I knew I had heard that somewhere. You did a good job of telling the Samson story (or at least the end of it) in just a few words. Great descriptions, very easy to picture and vivid.
Excellent story.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Scarlet T
Very well done! I know that these 100 word stories are tricky but you managed to pull me in. I'm left wanting more which is a compliment to the style and pace of the story. Good luck!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Very well done! I know that these 100 word stories are tricky but you managed to pull me in. I'm left wanting more which is a compliment to the style and pace of the story. Good luck!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the story. Never be quick to judge a man who appears weak. Samson proved his worth. He brought the town down on the jeering fools. Great work.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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I love the picture. I love the story. Never be quick to judge a man who appears weak. Samson proved his worth. He brought the town down on the jeering fools. Great work.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from Judy Couch
Very good fictionalized account of the Samson story. You put a lot of emotion into it. It's too bad you didn't have enough words to draw the conclusion. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Very good fictionalized account of the Samson story. You put a lot of emotion into it. It's too bad you didn't have enough words to draw the conclusion. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from mauial
The writing is solid, but he prompt calls for flash fiction and what I read is a retelling of a fact from the Bible. Also wouldn't the place he was taken to was a place of dishonor and not honor?
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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The writing is solid, but he prompt calls for flash fiction and what I read is a retelling of a fact from the Bible. Also wouldn't the place he was taken to was a place of dishonor and not honor?
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the review. I hope the imaginative retelling can put it in the realm of fiction (partly at least).
You ill notice that I have put 'honour' in inverted commas to suggest it is in fact the opposite.
Comment from Father Flaps
Correct me if I'm wrong, but you have written the story about the end of Samson. He is the main character in your story. He has had his eyes gouged out. The Philistines could have killed him, but preferred to humiliate this man of untold strength. You write about his eyes,
"The derision stung more than the wine flung in my empty eye-sockets."
The Philistines had a pagan sacrificial ritual, and they gathered in Gaza to celebrate. Their custom was to parade their most-prized enemy prisoner into the temple to entertain the jeering crowd. But they had overlooked that Samson's hair had grown back while he laboured at the grinding wheel. He had his strength once again. And not only that, but he had learned humility in his blindness and imprisonment. He now depended on God for everything. He had made many mistakes during his life, but now he could have victory in the end. He was ready to serve God once more. Victory in death, sight in his blindness. Many Philistines were killed by his sacrifice. Isn't it peculiar that many of us were saved by Christ's sacrifice?
Nicely penned! This was a fine story for the 100 Word Dash contest. I wish you lots of luck!
blessings
Kimbob
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Correct me if I'm wrong, but you have written the story about the end of Samson. He is the main character in your story. He has had his eyes gouged out. The Philistines could have killed him, but preferred to humiliate this man of untold strength. You write about his eyes,
"The derision stung more than the wine flung in my empty eye-sockets."
The Philistines had a pagan sacrificial ritual, and they gathered in Gaza to celebrate. Their custom was to parade their most-prized enemy prisoner into the temple to entertain the jeering crowd. But they had overlooked that Samson's hair had grown back while he laboured at the grinding wheel. He had his strength once again. And not only that, but he had learned humility in his blindness and imprisonment. He now depended on God for everything. He had made many mistakes during his life, but now he could have victory in the end. He was ready to serve God once more. Victory in death, sight in his blindness. Many Philistines were killed by his sacrifice. Isn't it peculiar that many of us were saved by Christ's sacrifice?
Nicely penned! This was a fine story for the 100 Word Dash contest. I wish you lots of luck!
blessings
Kimbob
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you, FF
You clearly know more of the story than me - I merely wanted to offer the reader a glimpse through Samson's eyes.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely. You deliver a complete story with a hint of the biblical narrative of Samson throughout. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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This meets the contest requirements nicely. You deliver a complete story with a hint of the biblical narrative of Samson throughout. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thanks, MA - just a peek through Sampson's eyes...
Comment from kiwijenny
Ooooo I love your take on Samson...in a hundred word dash....I appreciate your honesty...a 99 word dash you told the epic account in a great way. Best one of these I've read
God bless
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Ooooo I love your take on Samson...in a hundred word dash....I appreciate your honesty...a 99 word dash you told the epic account in a great way. Best one of these I've read
God bless
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Jenny - gld you enjoyed this peek through Sampson's eyes.
Comment from adewpearl
strong visuals in a dramatic setting
I'm not so sure the story is complete or just a slice of life moment in part of a larger story, though - Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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strong visuals in a dramatic setting
I'm not so sure the story is complete or just a slice of life moment in part of a larger story, though - Brooke
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you. I suppose you could say it is a 'slice' of the greatest story ever told, but I was rather hoping this could stand on its own as a peek through the eyes of Sampson.
