...to the flag
short poem14 total reviews
Comment from gypsycaravan
Just dug this fabulous poem out of the closed booths area. Congrats on the win. I wish we would get notifications of our fanned authors after the contest ends on blind entries. I don't like to miss any of my favorites. This is such a terrific piece on a subject dear to my heart. I need to write a complete essay on this one, someday. Great job, mikey.
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Just dug this fabulous poem out of the closed booths area. Congrats on the win. I wish we would get notifications of our fanned authors after the contest ends on blind entries. I don't like to miss any of my favorites. This is such a terrific piece on a subject dear to my heart. I need to write a complete essay on this one, someday. Great job, mikey.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
Comment from rjuselius
this is an outstanding piece of poetic art! the picture you paint in your 15 words is amazing and morbid in a sense. thank you for sharing! this should be a winner.
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
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this is an outstanding piece of poetic art! the picture you paint in your 15 words is amazing and morbid in a sense. thank you for sharing! this should be a winner.
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
Comment from Charlene0513
Never to be forgotten in this lost, mixed-up world.
Where we need to remember those that paid a very high price for our freedom only to see that their lives had changed for the worse because of it.
Charlene
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Never to be forgotten in this lost, mixed-up world.
Where we need to remember those that paid a very high price for our freedom only to see that their lives had changed for the worse because of it.
Charlene
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This is an exceptional use of fifteen words. You ignore the restriction and simply write an exquisite free verse poem in three distinct stanzas. Exceptional in every way. The clear winner here!!!
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This is an exceptional use of fifteen words. You ignore the restriction and simply write an exquisite free verse poem in three distinct stanzas. Exceptional in every way. The clear winner here!!!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
This poem stops your breath as you look upon it. The red/white/blue has been tarnished by ungrateful Americans. Young ignorant muslim ones who want to join ISIS to fight. they just want to becomo part of something. They got no clue what war is. They dishonor us. They thi nk it is like facebook, another access to public media on their cell phones. i slept on a few benches in my day. A homeless veteran. I do recall. I never did panhandle, out of my last respect. The American flag has faded. It's being spit on by many nations and sleeper cells in our country. What would happen if a muslim sleeper was to become president? i wonder...
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This poem stops your breath as you look upon it. The red/white/blue has been tarnished by ungrateful Americans. Young ignorant muslim ones who want to join ISIS to fight. they just want to becomo part of something. They got no clue what war is. They dishonor us. They thi nk it is like facebook, another access to public media on their cell phones. i slept on a few benches in my day. A homeless veteran. I do recall. I never did panhandle, out of my last respect. The American flag has faded. It's being spit on by many nations and sleeper cells in our country. What would happen if a muslim sleeper was to become president? i wonder...
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
Comment from mfowler
Power packed message with a wide range of scrutiny here, m. (Funny how style gives up the substance to a familiar eye) The three verses each portray something about this theme 'to the flag'. The first is a sardonic salute to the glory of the military and nationalistic ideal.'prosthetic salute' tends to say it all about where you're coming from here. vs 2 looks at 'the fluff', he promises, the adulation, and the irony. vs 3 reminds of the aftermath as the leftover heroes face a reality at home 'homeless ignored abandoned'. A fine poem about something very important to keep in perspective.
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Power packed message with a wide range of scrutiny here, m. (Funny how style gives up the substance to a familiar eye) The three verses each portray something about this theme 'to the flag'. The first is a sardonic salute to the glory of the military and nationalistic ideal.'prosthetic salute' tends to say it all about where you're coming from here. vs 2 looks at 'the fluff', he promises, the adulation, and the irony. vs 3 reminds of the aftermath as the leftover heroes face a reality at home 'homeless ignored abandoned'. A fine poem about something very important to keep in perspective.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
Wow -- I wish I had a sixer to give. This is extraordinary. This is so true. This is extremely sad that it is true.
Stunning artwork and presentation. This is a winner!
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
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Hi,
Wow -- I wish I had a sixer to give. This is extraordinary. This is so true. This is extremely sad that it is true.
Stunning artwork and presentation. This is a winner!
Best of luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
Comment from l.raven
makes me sick...these men and women die for us...and they come back only for our government to throw them away...had sad of a country we are to our soldiers...very well written...perfect picture
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makes me sick...these men and women die for us...and they come back only for our government to throw them away...had sad of a country we are to our soldiers...very well written...perfect picture
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
Comment from RYME4U
This is very thought provoking. Very timely, too with Veteran's Day coming up, It is so sad that our country made so many promises and broke them all.
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This is very thought provoking. Very timely, too with Veteran's Day coming up, It is so sad that our country made so many promises and broke them all.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your fifteen words portray a strong message of the forgotten
and left destitute while others lavish their existence
the allegiance that spills blood and all the promises
good visual
cheers Smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest
your fifteen words portray a strong message of the forgotten
and left destitute while others lavish their existence
the allegiance that spills blood and all the promises
good visual
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 17-Oct-2014
