Reprieve
Contest entry15 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your Minute poem contest entry. This poem flowed well and was easy to read. I happen to like autumn because of the deep rich colors Mother Nature adorns this season with. Of course, in Texas it's just an extension of summer. LOL Good luck with the contest.
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I enjoyed reading your Minute poem contest entry. This poem flowed well and was easy to read. I happen to like autumn because of the deep rich colors Mother Nature adorns this season with. Of course, in Texas it's just an extension of summer. LOL Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
And you did a great job, Debbie. I feel this one with you. I just learned that I have yet a SEVENTH autoimmune disease, and THIS one is painful. I'm too busy with Amanda and her parents to let myself wallow in self-pity, so maybe the timing is good. I made a doctor appt about it for next week, though.
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And you did a great job, Debbie. I feel this one with you. I just learned that I have yet a SEVENTH autoimmune disease, and THIS one is painful. I'm too busy with Amanda and her parents to let myself wallow in self-pity, so maybe the timing is good. I made a doctor appt about it for next week, though.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Debbie,
and here I am in OZ with the weather starting to heat up nicely... but I too, await for light to reappear... a very clever construction with the deeper meanings of life weaved through with skill... and I loved that you delivered such a well rhymed and metered... enjoyed the flow and content... well penned my dear friend... all the very best in this contest... that's if I'm not too late... sorry!
With our thought we create,
a rainbow of vision,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
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Hi Debbie,
and here I am in OZ with the weather starting to heat up nicely... but I too, await for light to reappear... a very clever construction with the deeper meanings of life weaved through with skill... and I loved that you delivered such a well rhymed and metered... enjoyed the flow and content... well penned my dear friend... all the very best in this contest... that's if I'm not too late... sorry!
With our thought we create,
a rainbow of vision,
James xx
******Stars!!!!!!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
Comment from mumsyone
I'm not really up on the Minute poem, but this is a good entry for the contest, Debbie. I think we'd all like to see some sunlight. It's been dreary here for the past few days.
Hugs,
Lois
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I'm not really up on the Minute poem, but this is a good entry for the contest, Debbie. I think we'd all like to see some sunlight. It's been dreary here for the past few days.
Hugs,
Lois
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
Comment from JW
Good luck in the contest.
I can easily relate to the message in the poem. I too have experiences times of being depressed - and when they occur, it's difficult to see the proverbial light at the end of the tunnel.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
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Good luck in the contest.
I can easily relate to the message in the poem. I too have experiences times of being depressed - and when they occur, it's difficult to see the proverbial light at the end of the tunnel.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
Comment from krys123
Debbie;
I thought this Minute poem was written very well by you and I enjoyed it immensely. The rhyming and rhythm both were written very well in neither of the rhyming was forced to ignore labor and even helped with the rhythmic flow.
Within each single verse there were internal rhymes and also rich, light line, assonant an feminine rhymes.
Most of all the imagery caught my eye the best in this imagery was very descriptive in eloquently expressive throughout: "I wait for the light to reappear when every year smiles just can't feign hope does remain". This imagery is very illustrative and symbolic.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Debbie. Good luck in the contest with this is a very good entry.
Alex
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Debbie;
I thought this Minute poem was written very well by you and I enjoyed it immensely. The rhyming and rhythm both were written very well in neither of the rhyming was forced to ignore labor and even helped with the rhythmic flow.
Within each single verse there were internal rhymes and also rich, light line, assonant an feminine rhymes.
Most of all the imagery caught my eye the best in this imagery was very descriptive in eloquently expressive throughout: "I wait for the light to reappear when every year smiles just can't feign hope does remain". This imagery is very illustrative and symbolic.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Debbie. Good luck in the contest with this is a very good entry.
Alex
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
Comment from royowen
I guess we need to make sure the sunshine, happiness depends on circumstance, but joy comes from within! But I must admit I don't want to endure another NY winter, but life with family is joyful! Beautifully written, good entry in this minute poetry contest! Well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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I guess we need to make sure the sunshine, happiness depends on circumstance, but joy comes from within! But I must admit I don't want to endure another NY winter, but life with family is joyful! Beautifully written, good entry in this minute poetry contest! Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you, my friend. Have a blessed evening~Debbie
Comment from GracieAnn
Debbie, you have done a good job in the meter for this Minute contest entry. It expresses an important condition that many suffer from during the less sunny days. Well done. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Debbie, you have done a good job in the meter for this Minute contest entry. It expresses an important condition that many suffer from during the less sunny days. Well done. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you, my friend. Have a blessed day~Debbie
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhymes and proximate rhyme - I love the pairing of plague and beg
your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the minute poem and uses steady iambic meter well in true minute poem format
good touches of alliteration
strong verbs that intensify the emotion
a most thoughtful look at your struggles with depression
Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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solid rhymes and proximate rhyme - I love the pairing of plague and beg
your poem is in excellent syllable count and structure for the minute poem and uses steady iambic meter well in true minute poem format
good touches of alliteration
strong verbs that intensify the emotion
a most thoughtful look at your struggles with depression
Brooke
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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OMG, I got the meter right. That's amazing. Thank you, my friend. Have a blessed night~Debbie
Comment from drivenbackward
Do you really get depressed by winter, Debbie? That would be an interesting condition -- one I haven't read about yet. Then again, this could be a metaphor.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Do you really get depressed by winter, Debbie? That would be an interesting condition -- one I haven't read about yet. Then again, this could be a metaphor.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Yes, unfortunately I do. It is the worst in October and November. The excitement of Christmas in December makes it better. It's called Seasonal Affective Disorder. Thank you, my friend. Have a blessed day~Debbie
